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LOL! This definitely hooks me. You say so much about your character in just a dozen words.
Yes! Love this!
I really like the voice of this character. It's definitely one I would read on.
Actually, no. It might be because it feels like you're trying too hard, or maybe because I've seen a lot of this sort of first sentence twist. I'm sorry.Amethys
This makes me curious but I'm not sure that I'd read much more than a page or two.
Yes - the used of band-sawed is fantastic.
This really doesn't do it for me. But I think it's style thing for me more than you sentence.
hahahhaaaaaaaaaa I Love it.
You made me laugh, thank you! And I'd definitely read on. Inspired word choice - band sawed and chunks especially.
Eeew. :) That said, I'd probably read on if I weren't so turned off by books about killing - but that's personal and has nothing to do with your writing. Good humor and voice.
Oh dear!! LOL I'd read on!! :-)
I felt sick after I read this... Visions of FARGO in my mind.
This has good voice, and I think I'd probably read further just to see whats going on.
I love it. I would change the 2nd and to then, thought.honored him, then band sawed...
I'm trying to imagine how you band saw someone. Hacksaw, chain saw, but band saw makes me go huh? The body would have to be incapacitated and then lifted onto the band saw. Seems too much work when there are other means of dismemberment I love the voice and would read on.
I loved this. Yes, I would read on.
It is one of those shocking sentences that is interesting but also takes away a bit of my trust in the author to not jolt me quite like that. Maybe not my kind of book even thought the sentence is interesting.
I read this as the title being 'Craven' (which I liked) and 'buried rage' being the genre and I thought: ooh, like the genre...never heard of that one, but it's reminiscent of Saw/Hostel/etc...good genre. Than realized that was the title. Still like it. Loved the sentence. Would 'band sawed' be one word? 'manageable chunks'...love it! Very...what's the word?...meaty :)
The first line is witty and shocking when presented by itself like this. Even without knowing the genre, though, this doesn't sound like my sort of book. But the line is good.
I'm guessing this is horror? :P LOL, I like, I'd definitely read on. %-)~Merc
ROFL! Love it. Completely hooked.
Good sentence--wouldn't read any farther (definitely not my kind of book or MC. And the comments about using a band saw are correct. Unless the man she's sawing into chunks is the size of a small log, it wouldn't work so well. A table saw might be a better choice, if you have to use common woodshop tools--at least then you'd have a nice large space to balance the body on. Oh, but table saws don't tend to have very large blades--10" diameter is a typical size. Perhaps if the guy is really skinny...maybe a reciprocating saw would work best (they can have a decent length blade), if a chainsaw were not available...After that, then you could use the band saw, like butchers do (just be careful--I had a band saw blade snap and embed itself in the wood about 1/2" from my hand. still freaks me out thinking about it)and I can't believe I just wrote all that. How very "unessi" (word verification) of me.
Oh, dear God. You certainly have my attention. I'll certainly be reading more.
You get my vote for best one of the bunch.
I wondered if band-saw was one word or two, but laughed at the manageable chunks.Definitely an eye catching start
The title is too generic for me, and I'd hyphenate "band-sawed," but this is my choice for winner.Fabulous!!
Not my type of book, but funny! I'd probably read further, but I'm not sure if I'd continue . . . but I might if it kept on like this. =)
Yeah, I'd read on. Brings to mind an abused woman dealing with a very bad husband, having snapped just far enough to do what needs to be done, in spite of what it does to her sanity. Makes me want to know why she's where she is. and what "he" did to warrant his demise. Makes me want to listen to waht's going on in her head.
Gave me a chuckle. I'd read further to see what's happening.
Maybe you meant a hack saw? The kind of hand saw with a tension-drawn band blade. Band saws are typically for fine detail work.Other than that, totally hooked and amused. Fun first sentence.
Hysterical. Yeah, I'm reading on.Fred
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