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YES. This gives a great visual in very few words.
Yes. I really want to know more!
Yes!It's something new and intriguing. And as was already said; few words, great visual.
Yes. Cats at a first neral pulled me in. A dead parent right off borders on cliche, so the next few lines better be amazing.
Yup, I'm there.
Yes. If you can make me smile when you're describing a funeral, I really want to read more.
Yes!It hits you right in the gut. Well done!
Yes. I want to know, was Mei's mother a crazy cat lady?
Yes - this made me laugh out loud and I immediately want to know more.
Yes. Simple and clear, but it raises questions.
Yes - I want to know if the cats have anything to do with the fact that she could be a "tiger" and Mei is her daughter! Already interested!
Yes, great first sentence, intriguing.
Yes. It made me laugh, but also made me feel sad for the mom.
Yes. Because it made me curious as to why, and it starts with an event that will likely affect the main character in some way.
Yes! Because I love cats.
Yes! Echoing everyone else, a clear first sentence with enough oddity/mystery to keep me reading on.
Yes! Did Mei's mother love cats? Is Mei's mother a cat herself? Probably not, since this isn't a fantasy, but I'd read on to find out!
Very nice sentence! You introduce the character's name and have us wondering two things - why cats? why 47?
YES. Great image. Definitely want to know more about this person.
Yes! This puts a great image in my head.
Yes. Intriguing. Want to know more.
Yes. Love it
Yes. Sounds very quirky.
Yes. Love crazy cat ladies.
I love this! It says A LOT in just a few words. Funny too :)
Yes! You had me at cats.
No - makes the mother sound interesting, but if the mother's dead, the interesting person is already removed from the story.
Autocorrect is fun. My comment above should read cats at a funeral. Lol
Yes-- the 47 cats detail makes me want to know more
Yes. I had to laugh a little about the 47 cats even though it's a funeral.I wonder why *specifically* 47 cats though.
Yes--it's the voice. I want to know who this woman was that had cats at her funeral. And as a result, it makes me curious about Mei since it was her mother.
Yes. Wow, completely hooked. 47 cats? Weird. More please.
Yes. Love that it introduces the MC (I assume) and her current situation, and then adds the bizarre and silly twist about the cats. I smiled :)
Yes, makes me think of a couple people I know hmmm
Yes.It gave me a really funny mental image and the book sounds like it might be quirky.
Yes, but the next sentences could kill it for me if it turns out the narrator is using cats as slang like Sammy Davis Jr. or if the MC is actually a feline. Crazy cat lady=good. Talking animals or dead Rat Pack member=bad.
Yes. It makes me wonder why 47
Oh, yes. This caught me right away.
Yes! Cats? I'm hooked, at least until the end of the paragraph.
Yes. I'm not a "cat person" and want to know why 47 would come to a funeral.
Umm. Yes. Maybe? I think?With a second or third line I could be more affirmative. But it wasn't a straight-off No. That's gotta count for something :)
Yes. I love the eccentricity here.
Yes. I just want to know more.
Yes. I definitely want to know more and ..well, I love cats :)
YesCapturing first line and I don't even like cats. LOL
Yes, because I want to know why those cats are there, and what they were to Mei's mom.
Yes. That's such a great visual joke, even if it's not mean to be "haha" funny (although maybe it is?).
Ummm. Yes?This one was weird. And not in the "I must know more!" sort of way. But I'll admit that's a lot of freaking cats. I do want to know why they're there.
Yes. Hell Yes. I want to know all about this crazy cat lady.
Yes, with 47 cats she's either quirky, crazy or there's unnatural elements afoot.
You definitely have my attention with this. Good job.
YES. Love the number choice (an odd number, higher than a "big house of cats" population, more like ... cat foster mom population levels (Love & Hisses foster blog, for instance!). Or even crazy cat lady. And how, and why, were they at the funeral?? I want more! more more more.
Yes. I laughed out loud! This also stirs my curiosity on who Mel is (a best friend maybe?)
Yes - but only for another couple of lines until could work out what is going on and if it involved cats. No a cat lover I'm afraid.
Yes. Great bit of character building in so few words.
No. I wanted to reword it to "Forty-seven cats attended Mel's mother's funeral" but I obviously am alone in my craziness.
Yes. It makes me want to know why.
Yes. That's quite a picture!
Yes. Instant story questions raised.
Yes'em. While I'm a dog guy, I'm curious.
Yes...kind of. I say yes because I want to know about the cats. Outside of that, nothing else grabbed me.
No. Have to agree with Dieselpunkette. I want to know more about the eccentric mother, but she makes her cameo as a corpse in the first sentence. The title also reminds me too much of Amy Chua's "The Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother." Love the cats, though.
Yes--naturally, cats. Also, it's funny, quippy, and the title is riding the tail end of the tiger mom wave. All intriguing. Nice!
Yup! Love the name, the funeral, and the weird detail about the cats. Awesome!
Yes! Right away feeling empathy for MC and want to know why the cats would attend the funeral.
Yes. I have to know what's up with the cats.
Yes. Great sentence construction and an intriguing opener.
Yes. It's just a good opener, hands-down.