Thursday, June 27, 2013

First Sentence #1

TITLE: Tiger Daughter
GENRE: YA Contemporary

When Mei's mother died, 47 cats attended her funeral.

68 comments:

  1. YES. This gives a great visual in very few words.

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  2. Yes. I really want to know more!

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  3. Yes!

    It's something new and intriguing. And as was already said; few words, great visual.

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  4. Yes. Cats at a first neral pulled me in. A dead parent right off borders on cliche, so the next few lines better be amazing.

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  5. Yes. If you can make me smile when you're describing a funeral, I really want to read more.

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  6. Yes!
    It hits you right in the gut. Well done!

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  7. Yes. I want to know, was Mei's mother a crazy cat lady?

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  8. Yes - this made me laugh out loud and I immediately want to know more.

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  9. Yes. Simple and clear, but it raises questions.

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  10. Yes - I want to know if the cats have anything to do with the fact that she could be a "tiger" and Mei is her daughter! Already interested!

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  11. Yes, great first sentence, intriguing.

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  12. Yes. It made me laugh, but also made me feel sad for the mom.

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  13. Yes. Because it made me curious as to why, and it starts with an event that will likely affect the main character in some way.

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  14. Yes! Echoing everyone else, a clear first sentence with enough oddity/mystery to keep me reading on.

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  15. Yes! Did Mei's mother love cats? Is Mei's mother a cat herself? Probably not, since this isn't a fantasy, but I'd read on to find out!

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  16. Very nice sentence! You introduce the character's name and have us wondering two things - why cats? why 47?

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  17. YES. Great image. Definitely want to know more about this person.

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  18. Yes! This puts a great image in my head.

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  19. Yes. Intriguing. Want to know more.

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  20. I love this! It says A LOT in just a few words. Funny too :)

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  21. No - makes the mother sound interesting, but if the mother's dead, the interesting person is already removed from the story.

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  22. Autocorrect is fun. My comment above should read cats at a funeral. Lol

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  23. Yes-- the 47 cats detail makes me want to know more

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  24. Yes. I had to laugh a little about the 47 cats even though it's a funeral.

    I wonder why *specifically* 47 cats though.

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  25. Yes--it's the voice. I want to know who this woman was that had cats at her funeral. And as a result, it makes me curious about Mei since it was her mother.

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  26. Yes. Wow, completely hooked. 47 cats? Weird. More please.

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  27. Yes. Love that it introduces the MC (I assume) and her current situation, and then adds the bizarre and silly twist about the cats. I smiled :)

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  28. Yes, makes me think of a couple people I know hmmm

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  29. Yes.

    It gave me a really funny mental image and the book sounds like it might be quirky.

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  30. Yes, but the next sentences could kill it for me if it turns out the narrator is using cats as slang like Sammy Davis Jr. or if the MC is actually a feline. Crazy cat lady=good. Talking animals or dead Rat Pack member=bad.

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  31. Yes. It makes me wonder why 47

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  32. Oh, yes. This caught me right away.

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  33. Yes! Cats? I'm hooked, at least until the end of the paragraph.

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  34. Yes. I'm not a "cat person" and want to know why 47 would come to a funeral.

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  35. Umm. Yes. Maybe? I think?

    With a second or third line I could be more affirmative.

    But it wasn't a straight-off No. That's gotta count for something :)

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  36. Yes. I love the eccentricity here.

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  37. Yes. I just want to know more.

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  38. Yes. I definitely want to know more and ..well, I love cats :)

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  39. Yes
    Capturing first line and I don't even like cats. LOL

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  40. Yes, because I want to know why those cats are there, and what they were to Mei's mom.

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  41. Yes. That's such a great visual joke, even if it's not mean to be "haha" funny (although maybe it is?).

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  42. Ummm. Yes?
    This one was weird. And not in the "I must know more!" sort of way. But I'll admit that's a lot of freaking cats. I do want to know why they're there.

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  43. Yes. Hell Yes. I want to know all about this crazy cat lady.

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  44. Yes, with 47 cats she's either quirky, crazy or there's unnatural elements afoot.

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  45. You definitely have my attention with this. Good job.

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  46. YES. Love the number choice (an odd number, higher than a "big house of cats" population, more like ... cat foster mom population levels (Love & Hisses foster blog, for instance!). Or even crazy cat lady. And how, and why, were they at the funeral?? I want more! more more more.

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  47. Yes. I laughed out loud! This also stirs my curiosity on who Mel is (a best friend maybe?)

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  48. Yes - but only for another couple of lines until could work out what is going on and if it involved cats. No a cat lover I'm afraid.

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  49. Yes. Great bit of character building in so few words.

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  50. No. I wanted to reword it to "Forty-seven cats attended Mel's mother's funeral" but I obviously am alone in my craziness.

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  51. Yes. It makes me want to know why.

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  52. Yes. Instant story questions raised.

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  53. Yes'em. While I'm a dog guy, I'm curious.

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  54. Yes...kind of. I say yes because I want to know about the cats. Outside of that, nothing else grabbed me.

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  55. No. Have to agree with Dieselpunkette. I want to know more about the eccentric mother, but she makes her cameo as a corpse in the first sentence. The title also reminds me too much of Amy Chua's "The Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother." Love the cats, though.

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  56. Yes--naturally, cats. Also, it's funny, quippy, and the title is riding the tail end of the tiger mom wave. All intriguing. Nice!

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  57. Yup! Love the name, the funeral, and the weird detail about the cats. Awesome!

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  58. Yes! Right away feeling empathy for MC and want to know why the cats would attend the funeral.

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  59. Yes. I have to know what's up with the cats.

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  60. Yes. Great sentence construction and an intriguing opener.

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  61. Yes. It's just a good opener, hands-down.

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