tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post1253458478769265837..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: 41 Secret AgentAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-15003808840026031252009-08-24T04:54:26.636-04:002009-08-24T04:54:26.636-04:00There's a big infodump here and it's not h...There's a big infodump here and it's not hooking me. <br /><br />Those of you wondering about the asterisks, I think Authoress stars out naughty words. :-)Bronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13029635239132926178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19416410369149062182009-08-23T08:10:09.741-04:002009-08-23T08:10:09.741-04:00It's always difficult when you have to **** so...It's always difficult when you have to **** something out, especially in a sentence as important as the first. Also, the first exchange of dialog was a bit bland, ramping up to the last paragraph that actually started to get into what was going on there.<br /><br />While I liked that a couple of the speakers were older, I didn't get the sense that they actually were older from the dialog. It sounded more like a couple of college girls talking about something they did last month rather than a look into a story 20 plus years old.<br /><br />Sorry, I wasn't hooked.pj schnyderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06770556738469006567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31395126623053911302009-08-21T21:11:45.065-04:002009-08-21T21:11:45.065-04:00Siobhan--I still don't know what the J word is...Siobhan--I still don't know what the J word is!! I guess I'm too naive.<br /><br />I'm not hooked by this. The writing's not there yet. It's too much, "As you know, Bob."Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-87379350858307699272009-08-21T01:57:34.893-04:002009-08-21T01:57:34.893-04:00I got confused by what the asterisks were supposed...I got confused by what the asterisks were supposed to be (slow brain, I know), but then enjoyed the rest of the excerpt. It seems like it will be a fun, raunchy sort of book. I don't mind not knowing more about the characters since the conversation is sure to reveal a lot about them anyways. Hooked.Siobhanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08319879957947966018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83856843631763436422009-08-20T17:09:57.182-04:002009-08-20T17:09:57.182-04:00This didn't grab me, not because of the subjec...This didn't grab me, not because of the subject matter--which is fine--but because of the uninteresting dialogue at the beginning. The material haa a chicklit/henlit feel, whereas publishers are looking for more depth and sophistication in their women's fiction right now. Also, exclamation points don't work well in titles.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-76966956954225034422009-08-20T01:39:01.129-04:002009-08-20T01:39:01.129-04:00Not hooked. The subject matter doesn't interes...Not hooked. The subject matter doesn't interest me, but I'm also having trouble imagining what kind of party they'd be telling this story at. Or why they're explaining for anyone. <br /><br />I also didn't get a sense of anyone else in the room with them, so I didn't feel grounded.Jodi Meadowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11796496740054225283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54973886197593594952009-08-20T01:15:26.004-04:002009-08-20T01:15:26.004-04:00Well I wasn't sure what the flood of *******&#...Well I wasn't sure what the flood of *******'s in the first sentence meant,but if it was something antisemitic (Catskills?) then just spit it out.Keren Davidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13121027210783177857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47373600591042605412009-08-19T20:50:10.927-04:002009-08-19T20:50:10.927-04:00Interesting...
Well, I'm not sure that high c...Interesting...<br /><br />Well, I'm not sure that high concept women's fiction would normally begin this way. LOL. I've seen and read this type of scene before and rolled on the floor laughing. With this, I sort of felt embarrassed. <br /><br />It didn't hit the mark for me. What I did appreciate was a novel with women over 50. So keep working on this. I get the sense that you haven't hit your stride with this sampling.<br /><br />*Tapping my drink your way!*Meghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01806075459880162155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89144963734946065572009-08-19T20:42:21.626-04:002009-08-19T20:42:21.626-04:00It feels like I walked into a conversation that I ...It feels like I walked into a conversation that I shouldn't have. Either that or chapter two. If your going for shock, you've got it but it's not really a believable shock. I can actually see this might happen if Barbie just turns to the party goers and says, "Sophie's a whore." I need a little more than just the dialogue for this opener. Maybe the ambience of the party? Starting it with unbelievable shock isn't going to work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31721210825014851002009-08-19T19:56:10.396-04:002009-08-19T19:56:10.396-04:00Uhm... why would she be describing this at a party...Uhm... why would she be describing this at a party? :O<br /><br />The other thing is the last paragraph reminded me of those logic problems you find in puzzle books.Cate Kariaxihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01812494549402252779noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8586592170690926632009-08-19T16:57:37.744-04:002009-08-19T16:57:37.744-04:00not hooked: the characters and their perdicament j...not hooked: the characters and their perdicament just didn't interest meValerie Gearyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17165554338889917253noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-10314406793407511812009-08-19T14:30:38.444-04:002009-08-19T14:30:38.444-04:00Why would this woman need to explain this to the p...Why would this woman need to explain this to the party and why would she give the explanation outlined here? It doesn't read as plausible. Also, I don't understand the comment "Who knew the subject was even up for discussion?" Didn't he just make a comment loud enough for everyone to here? Definitely not hooked.Maggie Forsythenoreply@blogger.com