tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post154988389769460365..comments2024-03-29T05:51:50.813-04:00Comments on Authoress: March Secret Agent #10Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39862826550036298882012-03-12T21:32:38.940-04:002012-03-12T21:32:38.940-04:00Loved it......can't wait to read the whole thi...Loved it......can't wait to read the whole thing!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-57251592777542678552012-03-12T19:04:43.784-04:002012-03-12T19:04:43.784-04:00Thanks everyone, your comments have been very help...Thanks everyone, your comments have been very helpful!!Angela Quarleshttp://www.angelaquarles.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2475088511846721242012-03-12T13:49:36.194-04:002012-03-12T13:49:36.194-04:00I think this is a strong opening; I have a sense f...I think this is a strong opening; I have a sense for where the story's going. The second paragraph felt a little clunky, but it evened out after that. I liked the description on her relationship with her coworker which seamlessly added why they were there. I also enjoy a story that can poke fun, self-referentially, at its own genre. And the title is great!<br /><br />Congrats on getting an additional agent submission. :)Stephscohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06328839483008086049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19452629105174769552012-03-10T03:59:49.251-05:002012-03-10T03:59:49.251-05:00I had a little trouble getting into this one becau...I had a little trouble getting into this one because I didn't get a good visual. Where is this event taking place? In a hotel ballroom? A period-appropriate country estate? And what does a circa 1834 dress look like? That kind of description would let me sink into the scene instead of floating outside it.Abbe Hoggannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40651372913503486512012-03-08T12:45:33.965-05:002012-03-08T12:45:33.965-05:00Not my genre, but I though the opening was interes...Not my genre, but I though the opening was interesting, nonetheless. <br /><br />There a couple of turns of phrase that, while I liked the idea behind the syntax, just seemed slightly off: "but oh-so-accurate," and "Like Isabelle's, her dress..." The only sentence that seemed out of place to me was "--they'd just been discussing their favorite "bodice ripper' romances" because the way it's phrased makes it feel like a sudden telling (maybe even an author intrusion for explanation's sake) when the choke would have been enough there, followed by the addition of the bodice ripper interest alongside the period-dressed fellows.Heathernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11452119646587945172012-03-08T11:24:12.499-05:002012-03-08T11:24:12.499-05:00I like this! There's a sense of snark and poki...I like this! There's a sense of snark and poking fun at historical romances. I'd keep reading to see if Isabelle gets the guy (and good job introducing him right off the bat).Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60826261914379454892012-03-08T10:41:43.624-05:002012-03-08T10:41:43.624-05:00I like it, there were a few phrasing problems for ...I like it, there were a few phrasing problems for me, but I definitely would keep reading. Looks fun.<br /><br />The "oh-so-accurate" was strange to me. I get what it means, but it looks weird with the dashes in between. <br /><br />Good luck with it.AKFnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68722954336673996492012-03-08T10:10:51.301-05:002012-03-08T10:10:51.301-05:00I usually prefer openings to be more intense. I am...I usually prefer openings to be more intense. I am not a fan of this genre, but I say this because surprisingly, I loved this. It painted a very clear and easy to follow scene. I thought this was great and would read on.Amberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00368485571268832781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25882243829542985822012-03-08T09:50:49.030-05:002012-03-08T09:50:49.030-05:00Love this and I would totally react the same about...Love this and I would totally react the same about accuracy versus sexyness. UGH! You got me.Amanda S. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03865077959290947501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23304969430152373662012-03-07T21:03:09.534-05:002012-03-07T21:03:09.534-05:00The setting of a reenactment ball provides such a ...The setting of a reenactment ball provides such a wonderful sense of place: the anachronism of the costumes and the modern speech patters is a great deal of fun and very inviting. Most definitely want to read more (and as much as I LOVE time-travel stories "Romance" is not really my genre so wanting to read more is a good thing).Peterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03525836364241572779noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-22702362242269900492012-03-07T14:07:42.169-05:002012-03-07T14:07:42.169-05:00Very fun! Not sure I loved the first sentence, but...Very fun! Not sure I loved the first sentence, but I enjoyed your writing, and the setting. Good luck!A Little Pushhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08081183739979996879noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51197361841245766782012-03-07T12:25:02.455-05:002012-03-07T12:25:02.455-05:00The writing is precise and Moves the story along -...The writing is precise and Moves the story along - as it should! The characters are interesting and you do a great job of giving information without makings to. Of adjectives. It flows very well and the characters are likeable. I'd read on! Good luck and thanks for sharing!Adopted Goddesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16854988307087656003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54455774545095204142012-03-07T11:23:37.871-05:002012-03-07T11:23:37.871-05:00I agree with Anon - fresh and fun! I would read on...I agree with Anon - fresh and fun! I would read on.Betsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13580799111484155334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-74238799427973192242012-03-07T11:01:37.321-05:002012-03-07T11:01:37.321-05:00Oooh i like this...funny right out of the box and ...Oooh i like this...funny right out of the box and a unique fresh location. Well-done (claps hands)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com