tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post2200659153274595416..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: Are You Hooked? Young Adult #13Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-85064960654330283222016-12-15T11:45:05.415-05:002016-12-15T11:45:05.415-05:00The logline is about Corey Roote but the opening i...The logline is about Corey Roote but the opening is about Eoin Wade, so I am left not knowing who Eoin is. Is he the bad guy or what,I am not sure if I should be bonding with him and rooting for him, or fearing him. But I do like the atmosphere built here, I would keep reading to see what unfolds. AMYnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52785292832824944932016-12-14T16:17:03.455-05:002016-12-14T16:17:03.455-05:00I like the imagery in the opening paragraphs. The ...I like the imagery in the opening paragraphs. The logline is confusing though -- is he happy about the earring or not? At first it seems not, but then you say it will help him, so it leaves me confused.Mary Katehttp://www.wanderlustywriter.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65105238044248596902016-12-14T10:40:48.483-05:002016-12-14T10:40:48.483-05:00I'm already a bit familiar with this one ;) I...I'm already a bit familiar with this one ;) I'm a huge fan of the isolated sentence for the beginning of the story--really start it off with a BANG. The logline is particularly strong. Way to go!Alinanoreply@blogger.com