tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post3307797402450434947..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Tense Change Challenge #4Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36443469423791669792015-07-31T14:04:50.134-04:002015-07-31T14:04:50.134-04:00Thanks for all the responses! I wish I could say w...Thanks for all the responses! I wish I could say with a firm conviction I knew which one the story belonged in, but I don't. Both have merit. I only have one chapter done so I'll see where it goes. Thanks, again!Kathleeahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06087009456072956020noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64370925216994389372015-07-28T14:43:03.823-04:002015-07-28T14:43:03.823-04:00I liked the first person, present. The original wa...I liked the first person, present. The original was like watching a movie. In first person, I felt like I was there with him. <br /><br />good luck!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10859703513161420215noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38297609190528035212015-07-27T18:07:34.863-04:002015-07-27T18:07:34.863-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16305902443927694589noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84239929983019834442015-07-27T18:06:42.355-04:002015-07-27T18:06:42.355-04:00Although I liked knowing the MC's name right a...Although I liked knowing the MC's name right away in the Third Person Present version, I preferred the First Person Present for this one. <br /><br />For me there was quite a bit of "telling" in both versions, but the first person present tended to keep me in the MC's head more-so than the original.<br /><br />Cool premise so I'm sure whichever way you go will be great. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16305902443927694589noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-72166756883269193032015-07-27T16:29:30.588-04:002015-07-27T16:29:30.588-04:00I prefer the original on this one. I agree that f...I prefer the original on this one. I agree that first is more immediate, but I think the slight detachment from the original POV works very well for this. But I do want to read this at some point =)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29393806865389800682015-07-27T16:04:56.755-04:002015-07-27T16:04:56.755-04:00This was a fence one for me. There are things I li...This was a fence one for me. There are things I like about the third-person excerpt and things I liked about the first-person excerpt. <br /><br />First gives it more intimacy, but there are some lines (having been third) that feel outside the perspective. Third creates some distance but also gives it more of a lyrical, literary feel, to me. I think I like third for this one.hlbrixeynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-71806694625627620322015-07-27T15:43:35.211-04:002015-07-27T15:43:35.211-04:00I prefer the intimacy of the first person version....I prefer the intimacy of the first person version. But hey--ever since I switched my first ms out of third person, I've leaned that way. For me, using the third person in a sentence like, "He feels alive when he's flying," sounds forced and unnecessarily distant. Looking forward to more opinions. Good luck!C. R. Baileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04627499155109943973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-74577824317520260882015-07-27T13:55:08.183-04:002015-07-27T13:55:08.183-04:00I prefer the original work here. (Third person.) T...I prefer the original work here. (Third person.) The sample is not a lot to go on, but there's a cinematic-feel to this scene that works well in third person. It's sort of a larger-than-life feel. If this is also the tone/mood of the rest of the MS, my vote is for third person. Good luck! Lisa B.noreply@blogger.com