tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post3342281552165994654..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Hook the Editor #17Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23721458605336932822019-10-04T02:40:43.821-04:002019-10-04T02:40:43.821-04:00play bazaar tu he haqeekat khwaab tu dariya tu hee...<a href="http://www.playbazzar.xyz/" rel="nofollow">play bazaar</a> tu he haqeekat khwaab tu dariya tu hee pyas tu tu dil be krari tu sukoon<a href="http://www.playbazzar.xyz/" rel="nofollow">Satta Bazar</a><br /><br />tya6ihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10390641251474798574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28677648345837602362019-10-02T17:15:15.825-04:002019-10-02T17:15:15.825-04:00NO. Why would his men kill him? The story sounds e...NO. Why would his men kill him? The story sounds episodic and the protagonist has no control.Alicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14640032121885343233noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-76428962659033750652019-10-02T15:56:31.922-04:002019-10-02T15:56:31.922-04:00YES
The pitch is confusing and needs to be more st...YES<br />The pitch is confusing and needs to be more straightforward and specific, so I almost said no. But then the first two lines were really good, so that would make me read on anyway. Tiffany Dawnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08886386535104627513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-13066495398335897292019-10-02T11:09:12.409-04:002019-10-02T11:09:12.409-04:00NO
I really wanted to say yes to this as it seems ...NO<br />I really wanted to say yes to this as it seems like something I would enjoy, but the pitch was confusing once the chancellors came in. After reading the first sentences I would keep reading.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07926235665296224921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-90057989734018374632019-10-01T17:04:20.770-04:002019-10-01T17:04:20.770-04:00I'm confused. Who's killing who now? Why i...I'm confused. Who's killing who now? Why is Liu Jie summoned to battle anyway? Why is he the only one who can exorcise the demon? Are there two Chancellors, and is he/they on the Emperor's side or Liu Jie's side? I like the first sentences, but the messy pitch makes this a NO from me.Pen Namehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09623279455622246115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29195296311667116622019-10-01T17:00:29.377-04:002019-10-01T17:00:29.377-04:00In a land where necromancers are reviled and the d...In a land where necromancers are reviled and the dead feared--isn't that pretty much every land? This doesn't seem remarkable enough to warrant a mention. Why might his men kill him? There are too many unanswered questions in this pitch for it to grab me. Betsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15172083170208857228noreply@blogger.com