tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post3520062004491576653..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: August First Line Grabber #18Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger78125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60439984910600298892012-08-11T11:25:24.218-04:002012-08-11T11:25:24.218-04:00No, not enough as a stand alone sentence. It may b...No, not enough as a stand alone sentence. It may be that in combination with the next few sentences it turns out to grab, though.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01866320252287612514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11423368686252834142012-08-11T09:52:13.977-04:002012-08-11T09:52:13.977-04:00Yes. Simple and intriguing.Yes. Simple and intriguing.Adopted Goddesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16854988307087656003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-79305016760585737762012-08-10T15:38:05.739-04:002012-08-10T15:38:05.739-04:00No. It didn't grab me.No. It didn't grab me.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00052141159886452951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-63299490062957019172012-08-09T22:35:01.551-04:002012-08-09T22:35:01.551-04:00Yes. I'm intrigued enough to keep reading.Yes. I'm intrigued enough to keep reading.Aightballhttp://aightball.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33384749602132016312012-08-09T22:21:01.820-04:002012-08-09T22:21:01.820-04:00Yes. Short, but I like the hint of voice and confl...Yes. Short, but I like the hint of voice and conflict. Nicely doneEarthnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-80469734546736693982012-08-09T19:25:21.805-04:002012-08-09T19:25:21.805-04:00Yes. Intrigue and mystery right off the bat.Yes. Intrigue and mystery right off the bat.Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-43249860940263051172012-08-09T18:56:12.895-04:002012-08-09T18:56:12.895-04:00Yes. I'm intrigued enough to keep reading. I l...Yes. I'm intrigued enough to keep reading. I like the alliterative flow of Lang and letters.Jennnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-72711004444582566922012-08-09T14:55:07.483-04:002012-08-09T14:55:07.483-04:00Yes.
I liked that it named the character up fron...Yes. <br /><br />I liked that it named the character up front, and I have a sort of half scene imagined already. I'm intrigued by why the letters make him want to smile and why he knows smiling would be inappropriate. It'd be stronger if I knew what kind of letters these were.Heathernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23320680603461884802012-08-09T14:45:32.631-04:002012-08-09T14:45:32.631-04:00Yes. I'm interested to find out what the lette...Yes. I'm interested to find out what the letters are and why Lang is being cautious.Cherylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02106422736653397018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38157958568708384322012-08-09T10:39:09.558-04:002012-08-09T10:39:09.558-04:00Yes. Intrigued about the letters and who Lang migh...Yes. Intrigued about the letters and who Lang might beAnnieBnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-63066771628020249642012-08-09T08:40:22.924-04:002012-08-09T08:40:22.924-04:00No. Nothing for me to latch onto and I'm not s...No. Nothing for me to latch onto and I'm not sure if they are talking about a letter (received in the post) or a selection of individual letters that are laid out somewhere i.e. B, D F T FKayChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16267506508468548195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69939048344151711612012-08-09T02:23:15.929-04:002012-08-09T02:23:15.929-04:00No. Insufficient information. Love letters? Blackm...No. Insufficient information. Love letters? Blackmail? Who is Lang hiding the smile from?Tori Schindlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12350474671522596420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52328464616008112422012-08-08T23:18:16.204-04:002012-08-08T23:18:16.204-04:00No. Nothing there to make me care.No. Nothing there to make me care.Stacy McKitrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07898731847653710759noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36549781920173490932012-08-08T22:50:17.164-04:002012-08-08T22:50:17.164-04:00No. I'm not sure what letters, and it doesn...No. I'm not sure what letters, and it doesn't really tell me if she knows better because she's being sneaky, or because she'd be in trouble.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73213585027118460322012-08-08T22:21:59.402-04:002012-08-08T22:21:59.402-04:00Yes. Who is this Lang person who smiles when he sh...Yes. Who is this Lang person who smiles when he shouldn't? And what are the letters?Meganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11378846887890437566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-195738657271957312012-08-08T21:04:30.593-04:002012-08-08T21:04:30.593-04:00Yes. Suggests conflict in a few words.Yes. Suggests conflict in a few words.Mary Holmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00413720275477716972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-18308782626157799502012-08-08T20:55:09.907-04:002012-08-08T20:55:09.907-04:00Yes. I'm confused, but I'd definitely stic...Yes. I'm confused, but I'd definitely stick around for a few more sentences to find out what the letters are and why she shouldn't smile.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09413777557796110450noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47989159168211087882012-08-08T20:16:22.034-04:002012-08-08T20:16:22.034-04:00No. The letters part threw me because I don't ...No. The letters part threw me because I don't know what kind of letters he means.magmonkey34noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-77919024679655559382012-08-08T18:23:34.775-04:002012-08-08T18:23:34.775-04:00No. I agree with the above comment that stopping a...No. I agree with the above comment that stopping at 'smile' would be stronger for me, because that sounds stronger and more mysterious. I just stop caring when it's letters she's smiling about--unless you can show me that they're really interesting letters.Petre Panhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09116806277306186024noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37193768815618451812012-08-08T18:19:38.379-04:002012-08-08T18:19:38.379-04:00Yes. I instantly connect with a character who smil...Yes. I instantly connect with a character who smiles inappropriately.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-30289904013354718802012-08-08T16:53:26.267-04:002012-08-08T16:53:26.267-04:00Yes. Though I agree that giving one more word to i...Yes. Though I agree that giving one more word to identify the type of letters would really help, this is just over the line into "intriguing" for me. It poses a ton of questions for such a short sentence: What letters, why can't Lang smile about them, who is it that says Lang can't smile, what will happen if Lang DOES smile, etc.foxfyrehttp://www.rmthompson.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39206341521190512392012-08-08T16:40:34.330-04:002012-08-08T16:40:34.330-04:00Yes. It's simple with enough mystery that I wa...Yes. It's simple with enough mystery that I want to read on.SStokeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03607391693287377280noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-16735982011852631752012-08-08T16:30:03.278-04:002012-08-08T16:30:03.278-04:00Yes, intriguing.Yes, intriguing.Melindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17182951575531989338noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54651095790404428652012-08-08T16:19:04.489-04:002012-08-08T16:19:04.489-04:00No. Not enough here to pull me forward.No. Not enough here to pull me forward.Marianne Suhttp://www.mariannesu.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-87103898806874420912012-08-08T15:55:03.101-04:002012-08-08T15:55:03.101-04:00Yes, I'm curious.Yes, I'm curious.Shakier Anthemhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16169934547082128953noreply@blogger.com