tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post3554416517662313412..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Drop The Needle 31Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32623179308397400892008-08-02T21:47:00.000-04:002008-08-02T21:47:00.000-04:00Belly is a great name, and I love the character. T...Belly is a great name, and I love the character. The scene felt like I was watching it rather than reading -- great imagery and pace. I was confused by the last line, but over all it was great!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61899144165936230672008-08-01T10:30:00.000-04:002008-08-01T10:30:00.000-04:00The scene is well developed. So typical of young t...The scene is well developed. So typical of young teenagers. I like the interaction between the characters, but I really didn't get a good feel for Belly's character.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-3818893754303509412008-07-31T15:48:00.000-04:002008-07-31T15:48:00.000-04:00Learning to box from a book. That Belly thought h...Learning to box from a book. <BR/><BR/>That Belly thought he was doing it right - priceless.<BR/><BR/>I don't know much about Belly at this point, but boy, do I think he's cute in this scene.<BR/><BR/>KizmetAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21191833383754637552008-07-31T12:29:00.000-04:002008-07-31T12:29:00.000-04:00Belly seems like a funny SC. I loved the part whe...Belly seems like a funny SC. I loved the part where he's jumping around looking stupid, and defends himself that he read the book right. Good job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88865650417549884622008-07-31T10:28:00.000-04:002008-07-31T10:28:00.000-04:00This works to a point... though I think "Belly" co...This works to a point... though I think "Belly" could have been better described or with more depth/detail.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2985186855221238532008-07-31T08:12:00.000-04:002008-07-31T08:12:00.000-04:00I'm guessing Belly is the SC. He sounds like that ...I'm guessing Belly is the SC. He sounds like that bossy kid who actually doesn't know what he's doing. Very amusing.Esther.Jadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11552124058522436295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54864256388213719532008-07-31T04:15:00.000-04:002008-07-31T04:15:00.000-04:00Belly makes me laugh. Very enthusiastic character!...Belly makes me laugh. Very enthusiastic character!Nayuleskahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08693548526829437580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-75090136149171020022008-07-30T19:23:00.000-04:002008-07-30T19:23:00.000-04:00I'm thinking Belly is the SC. What strikes me in y...I'm thinking Belly is the SC. <BR/><BR/>What strikes me in your writing is how smoothly the MC describes Belly without it feeling like a narrative. Praying mantis is an apt description as the name is modern Latin, from Greek, literally ‘prophet.’ I can see Belly as the knowledge-giver in this friendship. And it is indeed a friendship since the MC obviously cares enough not to make fun and to be concerned when Belly gets out of breath and slows down. <BR/><BR/>Nice work.Walking Tigerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02720779567422157000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-15878508627883859332008-07-30T19:11:00.000-04:002008-07-30T19:11:00.000-04:00This is really, really cute. I think both boys com...This is really, really cute. I think both boys come across well here, but the combination of MC's observations with Belly's dialogue gives a tremendous impression of Belly. He seems to me like a boy who sorely wants to be tough but just can't quite manage to get the hang of the finer points of toughness. :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-10644495957714037162008-07-30T18:49:00.000-04:002008-07-30T18:49:00.000-04:00Great job with this! I love Belly, great descript...Great job with this! I love Belly, great descriptions of him and his character really comes off the page. I would definitely read more.Victorinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06052077366367623323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-71166418074774999042008-07-30T17:33:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:33:00.000-04:00Belly's character seems well developed and totally...Belly's character seems well developed and totally appropriate for this genre and scene. Loved the imagery of the two of them hopping around, practicing the moves they got out of a book!LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59487277795230973102008-07-30T17:23:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:23:00.000-04:00Belly strikes me as a fun, strong SC. I love that ...Belly strikes me as a fun, strong SC. I love that he seems unaware -- or doesn't care -- about how odd he looks. Both of the boys are amusing, so the scene was a lot of fun to read.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41552911395364159622008-07-30T16:28:00.000-04:002008-07-30T16:28:00.000-04:00This made me laugh. I could picture Belly running ...This made me laugh. I could picture Belly running around, punching the air, etc. and looking foolish. Good job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78937865905256732262008-07-30T15:04:00.000-04:002008-07-30T15:04:00.000-04:00Hehe. I liked Belly. The descriptions and his beha...Hehe. I liked Belly. The descriptions and his behavior really made him stand out in this piece. I could picture him hopping around acting tough. Good job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com