tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post4469584113188477313..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Secret Agent #31Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55117537594104844302020-04-18T10:31:02.835-04:002020-04-18T10:31:02.835-04:00You do a great job of conveying a historical tone,...You do a great job of conveying a historical tone, but this read much younger than YA. Between Emmet loving candy, his hair being ruffled, and Emmet skipping out of the shop—it felt much more like MG. Also, at times, Emmet almost seemed animal-like? Between baring his teeth like a horse and sniffing at the air—we aren’t getting a great sense of him as a true character. And right now, there is very little conflict on the page. I’d love to have a greater sense of what I am reading on to find out. Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78588649135698716362020-04-17T10:54:24.305-04:002020-04-17T10:54:24.305-04:00The opening of this sounds a little removed from E...The opening of this sounds a little removed from Emmet's POV, probably because you're describing him as if you (the author) are looking at him rather than describing what Emmet sees. <br /><br />I agree that the skipping and candy makes him sound very young. A teenager in historical is much more mature than now, not less.<br /><br />Good luck!<br />HollyHolly Bodgerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08218140291198124199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11825284173943887022020-04-16T16:34:29.153-04:002020-04-16T16:34:29.153-04:00I love it. Seriously. Great job. I want to read mo...I love it. Seriously. Great job. I want to read more. <br />Having just read the previous comment, I'm surprised to note that is YA. I agree that this seems far more MG than YA.Betsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15172083170208857228noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-45056528051698759822020-04-15T13:25:52.666-04:002020-04-15T13:25:52.666-04:00You're doing a good job at giving us a sense o...You're doing a good job at giving us a sense of the historical setting - that was clear to me even before I read the genre at the top. On this page Emmet feels more like a younger kid than a teenager to me, based on his passion for sweets, his looking for treasures, and how he's treated (the "unruly mop of blonde hair" strikes me more as describing a younger child). A small note: I like the comparison to the horse, but I think you could tighten that up to something like, "Emmet grinned like a horse, showing off his pearly whites."TJBnoreply@blogger.com