tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post4653336041520367224..comments2024-03-19T07:38:28.530-04:00Comments on Authoress: 48 YAAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-81869221835790722382010-03-27T21:55:55.638-04:002010-03-27T21:55:55.638-04:00Not hooked. I don't like the nickname inserted...Not hooked. I don't like the nickname inserted here. I'm not sure if it would hook me without it, but it bothered me, and I didn't see anything else in the line that screamed "read me"Selestialhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11513212631394350304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82648685343114901692010-03-26T21:47:06.403-04:002010-03-26T21:47:06.403-04:00Not really hooked.Not really hooked.Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38812860884934607722010-03-25T18:17:40.596-04:002010-03-25T18:17:40.596-04:00Love the title. I'd read on...Love the title. I'd read on...Sharon K. Mayhewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83075735088273539632010-03-25T17:48:03.318-04:002010-03-25T17:48:03.318-04:00oh, yes! I agree with Laura.
Skip the icky douche...oh, yes! I agree with Laura.<br /><br />Skip the icky douche-bag thingy and go on with the rest. And if my kids ever talked like that, life would not be pleasant for them.<br /><br />change mine to 'Hooked'.Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64868920192788611162010-03-25T17:24:56.905-04:002010-03-25T17:24:56.905-04:00Knowing the next line makes a difference for me. I...Knowing the next line makes a difference for me. I'd keep reading. Still not too sure about the douche-bag thing. It is a bit jarring, but perhaps that's what you were going for. Also, do kids still use that term?Laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00953304463413984709noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8456997790031669122010-03-25T16:21:14.001-04:002010-03-25T16:21:14.001-04:00this is mine and I really wanted to include the ne...this is mine and I really wanted to include the next line but only half would fit. So here it is, it gives you a little more about my MC's hostile attitude:<br /><br />"Like I was just some fly he could flick right off his shoulder."Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06004818838544105847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69330207999676904272010-03-25T16:18:28.651-04:002010-03-25T16:18:28.651-04:00I like it. This is exactly how kids would talk. &q...I like it. This is exactly how kids would talk. "Big giant douche bag" is probably said a million times per day. I think sometimes writers forget who the target audience is when they critique something.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68189609303255144822010-03-25T15:34:04.591-04:002010-03-25T15:34:04.591-04:00Not hooked. My first reaction after reading this ...Not hooked. My first reaction after reading this was - if it was that obvious, and she didn't get it, how bright is she?<br /><br />My impression is she's a stupid mean girl with a nasty mouth. <br />I'd rather know why Drew Strunkler was a douche bag.<br /><br />Perhaps tell me what he did, then call him a douche bag.Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28674485120746597722010-03-25T15:03:21.097-04:002010-03-25T15:03:21.097-04:00I loved this. Humor and fun here, and I'd read...I loved this. Humor and fun here, and I'd read on.Portiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13435815819572442582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-92157972610377291102010-03-25T14:08:16.705-04:002010-03-25T14:08:16.705-04:00Oh yes. Only quibble: I'd scrap big in favor o...Oh yes. Only quibble: I'd scrap big in favor of giant. Might even scrap "bag" and leave it at douche; that's what the kids seem to be saying these days :)MHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16748209334943163314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8955765774151499152010-03-25T13:31:28.616-04:002010-03-25T13:31:28.616-04:00I'd take off "big, giant" since douc...I'd take off "big, giant" since douche bag is a strong enough word on its own. But I'd keep reading.Casey Somethinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596079290053524103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-75295972613229790622010-03-25T13:10:34.519-04:002010-03-25T13:10:34.519-04:00I like it! I agree that you need to something with...I like it! I agree that you need to something with the Skunkler, though - maybe offset with commas or Drew "Skunkler" Strunkler. :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9101211947525853082010-03-25T13:07:03.534-04:002010-03-25T13:07:03.534-04:00Trying a bit too hard, IMO -- doesn't compute ...Trying a bit too hard, IMO -- doesn't compute as reality for me.Joshua McCunehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17367262185912463258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31021166399191727492010-03-25T12:53:43.302-04:002010-03-25T12:53:43.302-04:00love the title. hooked.love the title. hooked.smrnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-16196300803084833462010-03-25T12:25:06.228-04:002010-03-25T12:25:06.228-04:00I like this. I think you need a comma before and a...I like this. I think you need a comma before and after Skunkler though for clarity. I would read on though, which is good because ordinarily,with a title like that, I would think this wasn't my kind of book.Valerie Kemphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05795714434618357955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-57568096410567303822010-03-25T12:23:57.699-04:002010-03-25T12:23:57.699-04:00LIke the title. The rest... not so much.LIke the title. The rest... not so much.Kateehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03909851761164178447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-43493800616473352652010-03-25T11:50:09.451-04:002010-03-25T11:50:09.451-04:00I LOVE THIS! (yes I am yelling) You got me. I...I LOVE THIS! (yes I am yelling) You got me. I'm hooked. Keep going.Chantal Kirklandhttp://eternallyconfused.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25951630341471615142010-03-25T11:43:27.074-04:002010-03-25T11:43:27.074-04:00Maybe. Either he's big or giant, not both.Maybe. Either he's big or giant, not both.Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-80007050480356975532010-03-25T11:21:15.020-04:002010-03-25T11:21:15.020-04:00uh, ick. Not hooked. Stuff that turns my stomach d...uh, ick. Not hooked. Stuff that turns my stomach does not make me want to turn the page.Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19166768003970601722010-03-25T11:11:53.740-04:002010-03-25T11:11:53.740-04:00I'd keep reading, but one question: is "S...I'd keep reading, but one question: is "Skunkler" his nickname? I think you should find a different way to punctuate that because it's a little confusing in italics.A.L. Sonnichsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11358456786727534289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-16007486675489385662010-03-25T11:01:14.577-04:002010-03-25T11:01:14.577-04:00Not hookedNot hookedfairchildnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37508025807375767432010-03-25T10:35:52.768-04:002010-03-25T10:35:52.768-04:00Cracked me up. Love the voice.Cracked me up. Love the voice.Clairehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09609095934716513347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84713870562026490532010-03-25T10:20:47.735-04:002010-03-25T10:20:47.735-04:00Not really, but it's a personal preference.Not really, but it's a personal preference.Jodi Meadowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11796496740054225283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54066679466373786602010-03-25T10:00:30.500-04:002010-03-25T10:00:30.500-04:00I was scrolling down, reading all of the entries a...I was scrolling down, reading all of the entries and this one made me laugh out loud and snort in my coffee. Anything that makes me snort in my coffee is worth reading on! Good job :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com