tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post4663036400828093985..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: April Secret Agent Contest #22Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-48351691390648766252010-04-18T23:44:17.886-04:002010-04-18T23:44:17.886-04:00I dug this! Can't wait to find out what happen...I dug this! Can't wait to find out what happens.Kellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16676961526157560787noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89699665156194759192010-04-18T14:20:58.147-04:002010-04-18T14:20:58.147-04:00I'm intrigued but there isn't enough here ...I'm intrigued but there isn't enough here about the MC. Who is she other than the daughter of a man who keeps a gun under his car seat, and a girl who doesn't like Rosie Sanchez?Vicki Tremperhttp://www.vbtremper.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38183397346348753352010-04-16T23:22:56.107-04:002010-04-16T23:22:56.107-04:00I totally agree that there is not enough here to j...I totally agree that there is not enough here to judge - so that means I would definitely read on. <br /><br />Confusedly, perhaps, but I'd be reading. :)Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41463962753960194492010-04-16T21:06:16.040-04:002010-04-16T21:06:16.040-04:00Love the title, it screams gonzo fiction. But I s...Love the title, it screams gonzo fiction. But I suspect this is a "Sean of the Dead" type comedic horror and as such it's nicely set up. I think 250 is really too short to judge anything about this one.<br />"Buy the ticket, take the ride."MacDibblehttp://www.macdibble.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23807101189282031302010-04-15T23:18:21.062-04:002010-04-15T23:18:21.062-04:00Okay, I just have to say that there better be a go...Okay, I just have to say that there better be a good reason that a banshee (they are Irish) would be named Rosie Sanchez, let alone why she is in the desert in the western US. I was really confused about where the story was headed. Not sure if I'd be hooked.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53444517305091506722010-04-15T19:41:35.651-04:002010-04-15T19:41:35.651-04:00Brilliant title! I'm hooked.Brilliant title! I'm hooked.Robin Lemkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12254896327174187893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-71158952299539673952010-04-15T12:28:35.487-04:002010-04-15T12:28:35.487-04:00I thought the idea behind this was great, but it d...I thought the idea behind this was great, but it does seem to be very bare bones. I wanted a taste of the setting and more about this family.<br /><br />You might also diversify the sentence structure. Most of it is short direct sentences. Maybe add a bit of color or flavor.Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14501132182710265406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52303802539936023712010-04-14T19:52:50.359-04:002010-04-14T19:52:50.359-04:00Whew! A lot to take in here, but I'm intrigued...Whew! A lot to take in here, but I'm intrigued, and I'd turn the page for sure.Sara J. Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16145626175256433448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-42774362720362627762010-04-14T19:28:14.955-04:002010-04-14T19:28:14.955-04:00I'm a little confused, too. I would like to k...I'm a little confused, too. I would like to know more about Rosie Sanchez, but I also would like to know more about the narrator of the story. We have Dad, Lynda, Bina, Rosie and an MC that has no name yet. I'd read a few more pages to see if I feel connected enough to follow the unnamed MC through the entire book.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-44268821729295869972010-04-14T14:16:53.183-04:002010-04-14T14:16:53.183-04:00I'm confused. I'm sure it will all be expl...I'm confused. I'm sure it will all be explained further on, but I didn't feel connected to the characters of the story. Sorry.frogetnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32801916543707336232010-04-14T13:47:10.816-04:002010-04-14T13:47:10.816-04:00Love the title- a mix of three genres. Humorous an...Love the title- a mix of three genres. Humorous and intriguing.<br /><br />The first sentence could be stronger. Instead of first stating you were driving through the desert at night, start with the hitch-hiker. "The hitchhiker shivered at the side of the road as my father drove..."<br /><br />The sentence "It was a banshee" confused me- were you trying to say "like a banshee?" Or maybe "She was a banshee?" We already know the hitchhiker is female, since Lynda said SHE'S in trouble.<br /><br />I would be intrigued enough to keep reading. I like the tone. Nicely done!KaraLeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05037958842051839383noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23278422146045958252010-04-14T13:25:08.332-04:002010-04-14T13:25:08.332-04:00I liked this, too, especially the dad grabbing his...I liked this, too, especially the dad grabbing his gun. For some reason, I pictured them in Texas, so that concealed weapon definitely works:) Hooked.Krista Van Dolzerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08830193414560232842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-18600369028859422732010-04-14T09:42:58.656-04:002010-04-14T09:42:58.656-04:00Wow. I'm not sure what to think about this in ...Wow. I'm not sure what to think about this in terms of what's going on but I'm definitely hooked. With the nonchalant attitude towards the banshee and the awesome title, I think this is going to be a fun ride.Valerie Kemphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05795714434618357955noreply@blogger.com