tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post536717089298602176..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: #32 January Secret Agent Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64828526972862891792011-01-22T21:48:46.270-05:002011-01-22T21:48:46.270-05:00Congrats! That's wonderful.Congrats! That's wonderful.tarakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11879814735940426961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55566077501466281292011-01-22T10:27:22.000-05:002011-01-22T10:27:22.000-05:00That's "when I read." I'm obviou...That's "when I read." I'm obviously so thrilled I can't type.Julie True Kingsleyhttp://www.julietruekingsley.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55318899123157790172011-01-22T10:25:50.372-05:002011-01-22T10:25:50.372-05:00I am so excited so for you! Seriously, I got chil...I am so excited so for you! Seriously, I got chills when read the words at the top of the page. This business is tough. I'm thinking you deserve a massage and a bottle of champagne. Heck, where are you from? I'd love to deliver it and pop it with you. So, fellow writer, all the best to you.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28057239318975646862011-01-22T07:26:13.975-05:002011-01-22T07:26:13.975-05:00Thank you SO much, everyone. I'm still reeling...Thank you SO much, everyone. I'm still reeling from the news. This has been a super exciting week :D Hopefully I'll be able to make everything official soon. Waiting to hear back from other agents, first.<br /><br />Krista -- That must be one of the coolest things anyone's ever said about my writing. :D<br /><br />And Jessica, fae <i>can</i> be major threats, but generally only if you enter into a deal with them. So yes, you're definitely right, for now it's an irritant.<br /><br />As for later into the book - well. See the title. *g*Corinnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17346963796400016806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54138539141975605152011-01-21T19:46:33.257-05:002011-01-21T19:46:33.257-05:00Congrats!!Congrats!!Tatum Flynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00074228011847976820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25137573422075143612011-01-21T15:59:42.719-05:002011-01-21T15:59:42.719-05:00Congratulations, Corinne! Your voice is so strong ...Congratulations, Corinne! Your voice is so strong it could probably bench press an elephant:) Best of luck with this.Krista Van Dolzerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08830193414560232842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52854675849483311902011-01-21T15:56:23.171-05:002011-01-21T15:56:23.171-05:00Congrats on the offer! Keep us posted on when it ...Congrats on the offer! Keep us posted on when it comes out. I want to see how it all turns out.<br />Wishing you many sales.Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9849499319086341972011-01-21T15:55:56.986-05:002011-01-21T15:55:56.986-05:00Congratulations on your offer! I hadn't made i...Congratulations on your offer! I hadn't made it to this entry yet--I've been going through them pretty slowly this week--but I'm not surprised at all that someone snatched this up.<br /><br />I'd read on, so I hope to see it on the shelves someday.Jessnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-49521712818763221622011-01-21T15:33:55.703-05:002011-01-21T15:33:55.703-05:00Saw authoress' tweet about your offer, and I j...Saw authoress' tweet about your offer, and I just wanted to say congrats! I really liked this as well--definitely not surprised to hear your good news. :)Stefanie Gaitherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10395840199437943202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5010513857763523972011-01-21T14:36:37.377-05:002011-01-21T14:36:37.377-05:00Congrats on the offer! When I was reading through ...Congrats on the offer! When I was reading through the entries I must say this one grabbed me and made me want to read more. Good luck and can't wait to see this on the shelf!Lisa B.http://angel28140.livejournal.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-80370879577236471832011-01-20T20:48:28.467-05:002011-01-20T20:48:28.467-05:00I enjoyed this, too and would read on. I didn'...I enjoyed this, too and would read on. I didn't get the sense that the fae was that horrific that the MC's flippant attitude was out of place. My impression was that the fae was an irritant in her world but not a true threat of any sort. Is that wrong?<br /><br />My only comment is that Arjan's immediate comment after ending the make out session was "Could we talk about something?" It seems too abrupt.jessicambhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02359240762476346533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-57890669725291815712011-01-20T18:10:16.496-05:002011-01-20T18:10:16.496-05:00Ashley is right -- my MC is used to these things, ...Ashley is right -- my MC is used to these things, but Arjan can't see fae and the likes.<br /><br />Thanks, everyone, for your in-depth thoughts. It's very helpful -- and I'm really glad so many of you like it! :)Corinnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17346963796400016806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-44037743790551011572011-01-20T15:51:41.435-05:002011-01-20T15:51:41.435-05:00I really like the voice here. I can understand whe...I really like the voice here. I can understand where Andrew is coming from with the humor interfering with the creep-factor, but I think it works. For me, the flippant humor tells us a lot about the narrator. It shows us that although seeing these creatures is unnerving, it is also a perfectly normal part of this girls life. She's not really shocked or scared, she just doesn't want to come off like a weirdo in front of Arjan (who, I assume, can NOT see, and maybe isn't aware of, paranormal creatures). The details slipped in in the second to last paragraph, about the vampire and necromancer, are perfect--they paint a picture of this girl's world in a smooth, unobtrusive way. <br /><br />One small note, in the last sentence of the second to last paragraph (re: the scars), the phrase "brushed past" threw me off, and I had to reread to figure out that you meant that he had maybe felt them. "Brushed against" or even "felt" might be more clear. And now that I think about it, that whole sentence felt a little out of place. <br /><br />Great job, I would definitely read more.Ashley Hastingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00653245264761861523noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64375771218575493952011-01-20T15:34:39.593-05:002011-01-20T15:34:39.593-05:00Hi Andrew. I think I get what you're saying ab...Hi Andrew. I think I get what you're saying about the seemingly incongruous juxtaposition of the serious and the flippant. It can be difficult for the reader to know how to respond. I have seen it done successfully by Christopher Moore. I have also seen it attempted in ways that don't work, or work only for a couple of chapters and not for the entire novel. <br /><br />Anyhow....FWIW.Yat-Yeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04028075516122778317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68490227739375960942011-01-20T15:17:32.030-05:002011-01-20T15:17:32.030-05:00I think the voice and the writing are strong, but ...I think the voice and the writing are strong, but I'm not sure I'd keep reading.<br /><br />I think partly my response is a reaction to what others like here: the humor. I like some of it, but it also takes the edge off of what is supposed to be creepy and/or strange. If the MC is flippant about everything, then why should I care about it?<br /><br />The introduction of all the other fantastical elements at the end bothered me, mostly because I'm not sure why she'd care so much about Arjan noticing if we're in a world where faeries, vampires, and necromancers (for starters), all exist. Unless we're talking World of Darkness here, where normal humans don't know what's going on because their brains can't handle the stress/horror, then, again, I'm not sure why she's worried.<br /><br />But I'm in the minority here. Your writing is strong and most people are reacting positively, so I'd say job well done, even though I wouldn't read on.Andrew Kozmahttp://www.kozma.curragh-labs.org/blog/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-4545792511436329322011-01-20T12:01:14.723-05:002011-01-20T12:01:14.723-05:00I loved it! Punchy and funny. It reminds me someho...I loved it! Punchy and funny. It reminds me somehow of the cartoon Ugly Americans..lol. <br /><br />I would definately keep reading.The Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07773479939559180654noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21797880950388899422011-01-20T09:29:45.517-05:002011-01-20T09:29:45.517-05:00Great job! I'm absolutely hooked. The little d...Great job! I'm absolutely hooked. The little details like her matchmaker aunt and her Hot Dutch boyfriend wanting to talk instead of make out has me dying to read onward!MarcyKatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08303670174583471227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12361380734171585802011-01-20T01:44:07.291-05:002011-01-20T01:44:07.291-05:00Love the voice.
Her aunt setting her up with a va...Love the voice.<br /><br />Her aunt setting her up with a vampire? lol.<br /><br />Hooked.rheanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-27523037686657987082011-01-20T00:30:10.884-05:002011-01-20T00:30:10.884-05:00The voice drew me in right away. She's humorou...The voice drew me in right away. She's humorous yet real. And though I think you do it intentionally because it's part of her character, some of the sentences were too long and rambling. <br /><br />I'd read on.Joshua Jacobsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-26336493117462113742011-01-19T22:22:21.961-05:002011-01-19T22:22:21.961-05:00I like this one a lot: the voice, as many have com...I like this one a lot: the voice, as many have commented on, and how effortlessly we get the picture of who the MC is. <br /><br />When she pushed hot Dutch dude away, his response seems strange. She announces that she is thirsty and he asks if she wanted to talk.<br /><br />It's a very small detail though. It doesn't take away from the rest of the section. <br /><br />I would definitely read on, even though I am not a big fan of the genre.Yat-Yeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04028075516122778317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-16308246541336430802011-01-19T20:50:25.136-05:002011-01-19T20:50:25.136-05:00I really liked this one. Great start.I really liked this one. Great start.Patricia A. Timms-McGeheehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08989800584001861716noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12545389054976246502011-01-19T20:37:05.332-05:002011-01-19T20:37:05.332-05:00Love the title! :)
You've got a great voice! ...Love the title! :)<br /><br />You've got a great voice! I think you could maybe tighten up a bit here and there. For example.. 'Could be. I'd never made out with a human before.' <br /><br />Overall I thought it was fun and would like to read more.Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53342080931221530342011-01-19T18:38:35.957-05:002011-01-19T18:38:35.957-05:00This was wonderful, especially that second-last pa...This was wonderful, especially that second-last parg.<br /><br />My only suggestion would be to replace 'less awesome' with a stronger word. After all she tells us about the fae, 'less awesome' just seems much too weak. You need something like earth shattering, or catastrophic. Something much more powerful than 'less awesome.'Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59314829242740052502011-01-19T16:05:49.971-05:002011-01-19T16:05:49.971-05:00I also enjoyed the voice. I didn't mind the qu...I also enjoyed the voice. I didn't mind the questions because I liked the humor they added.AJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02228259014384152606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-91001322737587184202011-01-19T15:07:59.978-05:002011-01-19T15:07:59.978-05:00I really liked this. I was just confused about on...I really liked this. I was just confused about one thing: she is at work? and in the kitchen? Is it that her mom is at work?<br /><br />Either way, this has great voice, and I loved the flushed hot Dutch boyfriend.Ann Bradenhttp://ratinghistoricalfiction.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.com