tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post5374239121437789020..comments2024-03-28T02:12:56.114-04:00Comments on Authoress: Pitch for the Win #27 - Historical FantasyAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29570601702160140492019-07-24T21:10:15.966-04:002019-07-24T21:10:15.966-04:00We offer financial assistance services to all indi...We offer financial assistance services to all individuals around the world.<br />Please, contact us if you are in need:<br />E-mail: info@creditfinance-bank.com<br />Whatsapp number: +33784505888<br />Website: https://www.creditfinance-bank.commaria verohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00395001437654660020noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-34870539161581987252019-07-22T19:29:32.720-04:002019-07-22T19:29:32.720-04:00Are you tired of being human, having talented brai...Are you tired of being human, having talented brain turning to a vampire in a good posture in ten minutes, Do you want to have power and influence over others, To be charming and desirable, To have wealth, health, without delaying in a good human posture and becoming an immortal? If yes, these your chance. It's a world of vampire where life get easier,We have made so many persons vampires and have turned them rich, You will assured long life and prosperity, You shall be made to be very sensitive to mental alertness, Stronger and also very fast, You will not be restricted to walking at night only even at the very middle of broad day light you will be made to walk, This is an opportunity to have the human vampire virus to perform in a good posture. If you are interested contact us on Vampirelord7878@gmail.comLord Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08802168788305626209noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28537031160780987892019-06-26T18:52:52.400-04:002019-06-26T18:52:52.400-04:00Yeah, I had a problem with that, but ran out of ti...Yeah, I had a problem with that, but ran out of time to fix it. Thanks!Victoria Dixonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08978050059674596756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-70044241488365311882019-06-26T18:52:00.337-04:002019-06-26T18:52:00.337-04:00Thanks & I agree! LolThanks & I agree! LolVictoria Dixonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08978050059674596756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-30595866501938983882019-06-26T15:33:15.833-04:002019-06-26T15:33:15.833-04:00Nice title, nice premise but I personally would be...Nice title, nice premise but I personally would be uninterested in the missing emotion in this line. "<br />When a hungry ghost kills Liu Jie's children, he concludes he's an unfit leader." His priorities seem mixed up.<br /> Rework. I wouldn't include the comp comparison in pitch. Query maybe, not pitch. Meghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01806075459880162155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60804707177668447662019-06-26T09:18:36.682-04:002019-06-26T09:18:36.682-04:00Wow. I would love to read this story. Super pitch....Wow. I would love to read this story. Super pitch. The second sentence is a little wordy - maybe you could break it up or take out a few words to make it flow a bit smoother? That's the only thing I can find - it is an awesome pitch. :)Loie Dhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06401248986730044338noreply@blogger.com