tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post5995024757971937128..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: First Five Sentences #25Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-66565254414304379312015-03-05T17:14:20.297-05:002015-03-05T17:14:20.297-05:00I am belated here and for that I am sorry. I think...I am belated here and for that I am sorry. I think it is a perfectly pleasant opening but it doesn't catch me so much as wanting to now look out my own window. It fits the genre fine but it doesn't engage me immediatelyMalinbornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04034201115744165370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-79997679956738669072015-03-05T17:14:15.295-05:002015-03-05T17:14:15.295-05:00I am belated here and for that I am sorry. I think...I am belated here and for that I am sorry. I think it is a perfectly pleasant opening but it doesn't catch me so much as wanting to now look out my own window. It fits the genre fine but it doesn't engage me immediatelyMalinbornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04034201115744165370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-90139722038371594842015-02-25T14:48:51.134-05:002015-02-25T14:48:51.134-05:00Thanks, GW. Hope all is clear from the above repl...Thanks, GW. Hope all is clear from the above replies. Difficult to build mystery in five sentences. But general consensus is VERY useful.Bev Spicerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05035892477756704972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-71234810385993081922015-02-25T14:45:23.373-05:002015-02-25T14:45:23.373-05:00Ha! Thanks, Casey - please refer to the above rep...Ha! Thanks, Casey - please refer to the above reply. Good to know that I'm hitting the genre.Bev Spicerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05035892477756704972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-7756037460001654622015-02-25T14:43:42.144-05:002015-02-25T14:43:42.144-05:00Thanks for the comments. We open with Joanna Love...Thanks for the comments. We open with Joanna Love beginning one of her stories. They are in a psychiatric hospital. Grace is a psychiatrist.Bev Spicerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05035892477756704972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64809642608960327882015-02-25T14:30:45.348-05:002015-02-25T14:30:45.348-05:00Agree with above...nice for the genre...but not su...Agree with above...nice for the genre...but not sure at all who is talking in the opening line??GeeWizhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06941244713771870949noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36925047196093746082015-02-25T13:24:21.031-05:002015-02-25T13:24:21.031-05:00It also felt literary to me as well. I wasn't ...It also felt literary to me as well. I wasn't clear on what was happening with the window but would love to be sitting by it. Casey99http://www.carowland.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33210222220827321422015-02-25T11:32:51.814-05:002015-02-25T11:32:51.814-05:00It felt literary. The only thing that tripped me u...It felt literary. The only thing that tripped me up was the quotation marks around the first paragraph. I don't know whether they were sitting by the window or someone was telling Grace about sitting by a window. If it's the latter, then I'm not sure I'm grounded since I can't see what's going on right now.hlbrixeynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68940036462621473622015-02-25T11:01:55.901-05:002015-02-25T11:01:55.901-05:00Thank you for your comments, Christa. I shall dig...Thank you for your comments, Christa. I shall digest them with a cup of tea and a marshmallow.Bev Spicerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05035892477756704972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47404922189836617872015-02-25T11:01:32.855-05:002015-02-25T11:01:32.855-05:00Thank you for your comments, Christa. I shall dig...Thank you for your comments, Christa. I shall digest them with a cup of tea and a marshmallow.Bev Spicerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05035892477756704972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-7104948651210862452015-02-25T10:03:35.694-05:002015-02-25T10:03:35.694-05:00I think this matches with the genre nicely. And I...I think this matches with the genre nicely. And I'm there, by the window, but the imagery is a little hard to follow. I think you're almost there. What really tripped me up is 'winding patterns, like anesthetic." I get what you mean, but the way it's worded tripped me up. Literary fiction definitely gives you room to play with words, but these were too confusing.Christa MacDonaldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11826080633163754406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83521904108114643442015-02-25T10:03:25.510-05:002015-02-25T10:03:25.510-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Christa MacDonaldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11826080633163754406noreply@blogger.com