tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6113715197710620115..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Logline Critique Round #15Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68669199370474280922016-08-26T18:09:42.388-04:002016-08-26T18:09:42.388-04:00We need to know: the character's name, what ch...We need to know: the character's name, what challenge they face, why they might lose, who is in their way (kind of cool if the love interest is the person in the way). Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08334805667163665312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-35294119750889082562016-08-24T21:07:35.950-04:002016-08-24T21:07:35.950-04:00Definitely need more specifics, plus you need to m...Definitely need more specifics, plus you need to mention the character who we're going to follow over the course of the book.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10100364670783624333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-20929943506844412492016-08-24T20:21:12.778-04:002016-08-24T20:21:12.778-04:00It's a good line, interesting and definitely i...It's a good line, interesting and definitely inspiring me to want to read more, but I agree with the comments above - more specifics would push your description from good to great.LMnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-15504163526898222492016-08-24T13:43:48.030-04:002016-08-24T13:43:48.030-04:00This is a tagline. A logline needs a protagonist, ...This is a tagline. A logline needs a protagonist, a problem, an antagonist, a conflict, and a goal. It also needs to show the genre. What is the magic part of the magic realism?don't hate menoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78759941322282459152016-08-24T10:56:54.564-04:002016-08-24T10:56:54.564-04:00I would like to see some reference to magic in you...I would like to see some reference to magic in your logline. BlueMetalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07441774555617067141noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-79337891559805488542016-08-24T10:29:32.079-04:002016-08-24T10:29:32.079-04:00This is missing all of the specifics. Who is this ...This is missing all of the specifics. Who is this about? What does he/she want? Why is falling in love an obstacle to this goal?<br /><br />Good luck!<br />HollyHolly Bodgerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08218140291198124199noreply@blogger.com