tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6131117524505244895..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Are You Hooked? Adult Genre Fiction #13Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-30309744088433100152016-05-17T16:35:39.631-04:002016-05-17T16:35:39.631-04:00Super congrats on a successful novel!! I once had ...Super congrats on a successful novel!! I once had a class with Donald Maass (agent extraordinaire) who said no backstory in the first 50 pages. You will know best what works for you story and your series, but it was a hangup here. If it's necessary, perhaps you could come at it from a different direction. Good luck and continued success!GeeWizhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06941244713771870949noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59095895344814793342016-05-17T10:20:29.092-04:002016-05-17T10:20:29.092-04:00I like the logline which leaves me wondering why a...I like the logline which leaves me wondering why anyone would want to kidnap her children. I was even more intrigued when I read on and found that Alicia is a librarian, and appears to co-write with her husband.<br /><br />I was able to connect with Alicia in the first paragraph, but agree with others that there's perhaps too much backstory here. If it's a sequel, I won't need to be reminded at the beginning about past events as I'd want to know what had changed since the previous story closed.<br /><br />I also agree that there should be a hint of foreboding.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03973478718603712004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-46688515459305483142016-05-16T16:41:14.741-04:002016-05-16T16:41:14.741-04:00Thanks for your comment, Gee Wiz. The mention of &...Thanks for your comment, Gee Wiz. The mention of "the tragedy" is actually backstory from the first novel (this is a sequel to an already published first book, possibly 2nd of series). Are you saying the backstory should be introduced later in the book?Debbie Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17498299547094240054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29885914614149275812016-05-16T16:35:14.260-04:002016-05-16T16:35:14.260-04:00Based on your blurb, I'm interested in reading...Based on your blurb, I'm interested in reading more. <br />The opening could do with some zing, maybe a hint of foreboding. An omen that things will get worse. Overall its nice, but maybe if I read a little more I'd be hooked. Pamela Q Fernandeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04280244804316274619noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64900925194631361272016-05-16T13:42:56.317-04:002016-05-16T13:42:56.317-04:00The premise appears promising, but opening falls s...The premise appears promising, but opening falls short/slows for me. Is she a co-author with the husband? Tag says husband is the writer, but para 1 says publisher was awaiting "their" draft. Also, the mention of "the tragedy" seems like backstory in the opening. GeeWizhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06941244713771870949noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19659289031774443362016-05-16T12:24:00.912-04:002016-05-16T12:24:00.912-04:00You write well, but it feels like you're getti...You write well, but it feels like you're getting warmed up to tell us the story. Not having read the rest of it, I could be wrong, but that's the sense I'm getting from this first page. Because your writing is strong, I suspect that once the story starts it'll be a good one.Lanettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16250426387059799179noreply@blogger.com