tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6412656090032085450..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: First Line Grabber #10Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger50125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59301573733188072962014-04-12T12:31:33.097-04:002014-04-12T12:31:33.097-04:00Yes. But I'm not as creeped out as everyone el...Yes. But I'm not as creeped out as everyone else seems to be. Having things move inside walls has been done - a lot. "Within" sounds awkward. I like the title Helennoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23620069665755344312014-04-12T12:12:54.580-04:002014-04-12T12:12:54.580-04:00Yes! Lots of spookiness in few words. Nicely done!...Yes! Lots of spookiness in few words. Nicely done! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65942351322080217142014-04-10T21:46:36.436-04:002014-04-10T21:46:36.436-04:00Yes. very much yes. Tight writing, voice, sense of...Yes. very much yes. Tight writing, voice, sense of mood/atmosphere... awesome.jhnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-10503147376496695112014-04-10T18:59:56.446-04:002014-04-10T18:59:56.446-04:00Yes. Creep factor set up nicely. I'm ready to ...Yes. Creep factor set up nicely. I'm ready to get my flashlight and hide under the blankets.don't hate menoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-66681662655240152252014-04-10T18:55:16.159-04:002014-04-10T18:55:16.159-04:00Yes. because in one line my skin is already crawli...Yes. because in one line my skin is already crawling!Tatum Flynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00074228011847976820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61873899904123210362014-04-10T18:41:47.492-04:002014-04-10T18:41:47.492-04:00Yes. That's really creepy.Yes. That's really creepy.Stephscohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06328839483008086049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52249125393147694742014-04-10T18:11:46.967-04:002014-04-10T18:11:46.967-04:00Yes. The simple yet evocative statement works wel...Yes. The simple yet evocative statement works well, and it definitely sets the right tone for a ghost story.L.C. McGeheehttp://lcmcgehee.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51568210613688523722014-04-10T17:25:52.949-04:002014-04-10T17:25:52.949-04:00Yes!
It's simple and direct, and a nice examp...Yes!<br /><br />It's simple and direct, and a nice example of less is more. You've created mood, mystery and suspense and, for me, voice. I can hear her saying this (or even thinking it) in a whisper. Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14759827445822881122014-04-10T16:22:07.764-04:002014-04-10T16:22:07.764-04:00Yes. Great way to start a ghost story. I'm cre...Yes. Great way to start a ghost story. I'm creeped out already.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-243553405946835842014-04-10T14:39:41.042-04:002014-04-10T14:39:41.042-04:00Yes. I like the creepy feel paired with formality ...Yes. I like the creepy feel paired with formality of Mother.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18219883647458065443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19891657024697996272014-04-10T14:10:51.019-04:002014-04-10T14:10:51.019-04:00Yes. Uber creepy.Yes. Uber creepy.Rebeccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15525362690272102453noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-62301692135180064652014-04-10T09:15:38.023-04:002014-04-10T09:15:38.023-04:00Yes - Plenty of interest, voice and characterizati...Yes - Plenty of interest, voice and characterization in such a short sentence.therealtwinmomnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60414348900923953292014-04-10T06:37:48.370-04:002014-04-10T06:37:48.370-04:00Yes. I'd read on to find out what "they&q...Yes. I'd read on to find out what "they" are.KayChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16267506508468548195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23506708441876351352014-04-10T02:55:56.302-04:002014-04-10T02:55:56.302-04:00Yes. Creepy! The italics made me wonder if the nar...Yes. Creepy! The italics made me wonder if the narrator or mother are ghosts (too).BrigidGnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84533034173872721902014-04-09T21:41:08.893-04:002014-04-09T21:41:08.893-04:00Yes. With a title and opener like that, I am expec...Yes. With a title and opener like that, I am expecting good, creepy things.Her Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04995286754914961766noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29137022744983224902014-04-09T21:37:26.243-04:002014-04-09T21:37:26.243-04:00Yes! I got chills! Raises all sorts of questions i...Yes! I got chills! Raises all sorts of questions in the reader's mind.Lena Coakleyhttp://www.lenacoakley.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-20098932497543230762014-04-09T21:32:17.559-04:002014-04-09T21:32:17.559-04:00YES. Very creepy and draws you into the story. MUS...YES. Very creepy and draws you into the story. MUST know what's in the walls!Anne MacLachlanhttp://acmaclachlan.canoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-79879507632942745582014-04-09T21:26:55.547-04:002014-04-09T21:26:55.547-04:00Draws you in, I want to know what or whom is movin...Draws you in, I want to know what or whom is moving within the walls!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-63557360079525121242014-04-09T21:21:17.636-04:002014-04-09T21:21:17.636-04:00Makes me want to keep reading -- which is the goal...Makes me want to keep reading -- which is the goal.<br />Ellenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09172923659530363030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51380758565964714302014-04-09T21:04:36.214-04:002014-04-09T21:04:36.214-04:00Yes. Ooooh, so many questions raised. Who or what ...Yes. Ooooh, so many questions raised. Who or what moves? Why? What to do about it. Creepy!Sylviahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11785224411053955539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-27423990735738405002014-04-09T20:35:00.880-04:002014-04-09T20:35:00.880-04:00Yes! Creepy!Yes! Creepy!Leandra Wallacehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00381034024025750992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-75708747725579733742014-04-09T20:08:37.934-04:002014-04-09T20:08:37.934-04:00Yes! very creepyYes! very creepyCryssa Bazoshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03339300665743449764noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-44723307030491414672014-04-09T20:00:41.913-04:002014-04-09T20:00:41.913-04:00Absolutely yes!
I won't be sleeping tonight - ...Absolutely yes!<br />I won't be sleeping tonight - for fear and curiosity.Lisa Dalrymplenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40420225382624823772014-04-09T19:05:50.064-04:002014-04-09T19:05:50.064-04:00Yes. Creepy and cool. Unless you're talking ab...Yes. Creepy and cool. Unless you're talking about squirrels, then not so much.Kathleeahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06087009456072956020noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59672332786334227522014-04-09T17:31:55.522-04:002014-04-09T17:31:55.522-04:00Yes.
I like the voice and creepy feel, but be care...Yes.<br />I like the voice and creepy feel, but be careful. We could as easily be talking about squirrels. <br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01021888227904891627noreply@blogger.com