tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6446763079280754434..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Hook the Editor #13Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-4369273011399357462019-10-02T16:01:00.676-04:002019-10-02T16:01:00.676-04:00YES
Love the concept and the opening lines. YES<br />Love the concept and the opening lines. Tiffany Dawnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08886386535104627513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68114748391881438432019-10-02T11:40:06.461-04:002019-10-02T11:40:06.461-04:00YES
The pitch intrigued me, but the opening lines ...YES<br />The pitch intrigued me, but the opening lines really give a sense of Liz and her imagination.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07926235665296224921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69901440301278193322019-10-01T19:52:11.206-04:002019-10-01T19:52:11.206-04:00YES. You have a knack for turn of phrase, I like t...YES. You have a knack for turn of phrase, I like the image of the school bus swallowing her. I agree with Maddie about rewording the pitch, and I think it would help to break it into more than one sentence so it's clearer.Katherine T.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16694801421672317076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54699556074600287862019-10-01T16:28:22.870-04:002019-10-01T16:28:22.870-04:00YES: I love the title and wow the pitch sounds awe...YES: I love the title and wow the pitch sounds awesome. There's a few places in the pitch I think can be reworded though. Good luck :)Maddie Rodriguezhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05284212200918139511noreply@blogger.com