tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6449901947358964621..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: 20 Secret AgentAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29887157746480588102009-11-10T02:26:50.341-05:002009-11-10T02:26:50.341-05:00Seth seems to be very empathetic character. Is Hol...Seth seems to be very empathetic character. Is Holly the girl he's following?<br /><br />Can you tell that I want to read more of this?<br /><br />Good jobCheryl Shttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11270513035473727341noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-76768052921863356722009-11-06T21:25:50.018-05:002009-11-06T21:25:50.018-05:00I liked it! I, too, liked Seth's voice more th...I liked it! I, too, liked Seth's voice more than Holly's, but then, I didn't get a lot of Holly so maybe that's why. Good job!ChristaCarol Joneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02908423468344511136noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78288340940687922002009-11-06T17:54:09.285-05:002009-11-06T17:54:09.285-05:00I like this. I admit I like Seth better and was a ...I like this. I admit I like Seth better and was a bit jarred when Holly entered the picture. Still, I'd keep reading . . . I really want to keep reading, can you send me the MS? LOLjustJoanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10377292351547511489noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-42531999388920721432009-11-05T00:57:40.760-05:002009-11-05T00:57:40.760-05:00Hooked!
Love Seth.
Totally gets the dark YA angst ...Hooked!<br />Love Seth.<br />Totally gets the dark YA angst feel down pat.<br />Very nice.XVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00693331929770648824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33534390101257229582009-11-04T22:37:21.640-05:002009-11-04T22:37:21.640-05:00I like the voice quite a bit. I feel like I knew ...I like the voice quite a bit. I feel like I knew who these characters were right away and that always helps launch a story well. And angst works in YA if done right. I kind of like imagining what someone resigned to her own loneliness might look like. Nice job.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36563607131697662422009-11-04T20:52:03.208-05:002009-11-04T20:52:03.208-05:00Loved loved loved it. I was instantly hooked. I ...Loved loved loved it. I was instantly hooked. I would love to read more.<br /><br />Good luck,<br /><br />KimKimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680930946666979702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14626182862706535752009-11-04T18:16:59.642-05:002009-11-04T18:16:59.642-05:00I liked Seth's POV. I was surprised that I li...I liked Seth's POV. I was surprised that I liked the short, choppiness of it. <br /><br />Holly seems interesting. I like the choreographer line. <br /><br />I'd give it a few more pages to see if things picked up a bit. <br /><br />Good luckClairehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09609095934716513347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-30143741792663291222009-11-04T14:25:45.577-05:002009-11-04T14:25:45.577-05:00I'd probably keep reading on, but waiting for ...I'd probably keep reading on, but waiting for some action or twist to pop up.<br />I don't mind 2 POV's, but not sure if I entirely like the "Seth:" and "Holly:" approach to it. Perhaps, with different words or styles we'll know when it's Seth or Holly.angela robbinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07114119913653244467noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-15607261728805292372009-11-04T14:12:57.510-05:002009-11-04T14:12:57.510-05:00I'm with Krista. Also, Seth's angst left ...I'm with Krista. Also, Seth's angst left me totally uninterested in him as a person.Travenerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05160810997837674165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-75192723478341193932009-11-04T13:47:44.142-05:002009-11-04T13:47:44.142-05:00Not hooked. Seth's disjointed narration was di...Not hooked. Seth's disjointed narration was distracting (can't he just pick a paragraph and go with it?), and I'm not a fan of the alternating points of view, at least in the way you present them here. We're all going to prefer one or the other, so instead of giving us the choice, you be the decision maker and pick one. But that's just my opinion, of course:)Krista Van Dolzerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08830193414560232842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36869152930199149402009-11-04T13:20:20.705-05:002009-11-04T13:20:20.705-05:00Seth’s a ghost, Holly’s a lonely girl. She’ll be ...Seth’s a ghost, Holly’s a lonely girl. She’ll be able to see him, or something. Seems like a great set-up for a paranormal romance. I like Seth’s tone more than Holly’s – I think she should be more ordinary.<br />I’d definitely read on.Momwomannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9833259926479349172009-11-04T13:00:48.378-05:002009-11-04T13:00:48.378-05:00I liked this a lot! I love both Holly and Seth'...I liked this a lot! I love both Holly and Seth's voice, definitely hooked!<br /><br />I want to know why he can't know her.Alix https://www.blogger.com/profile/04684209302932310537noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-30075437912528219532009-11-04T12:38:59.004-05:002009-11-04T12:38:59.004-05:00Hmmm... so far, I like Holly's voice more than...Hmmm... so far, I like Holly's voice more than Seth's voice. I'm interested in how they're connected, though, and in the situation's Seth's describing, so I'd definitely read on.Harper K.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9631270147366810292009-11-04T11:21:13.842-05:002009-11-04T11:21:13.842-05:00I liked this a lot. I enjoyed Seth's POV. I...I liked this a lot. I enjoyed Seth's POV. I'm curious about the reason he must stay away from her. <br /><br />I think you nailed pulling the reader in, especially considering there's not a whole lot of action and no dialogue here. There's already a "longing" aspect, which is a must in any YA romance..add to that the mystery of what happened to Holly that night, and I'm hooked. I'd keep reading.Shannonhubzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06406808686930468910noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65717162133187750862009-11-04T10:13:16.154-05:002009-11-04T10:13:16.154-05:00I enjoy the alternating points of view, but I'...I enjoy the alternating points of view, but I'm already a little confused. Seth talking is a lot of prose-y backstory (seemingly), and not a whole lot of plot. I would read a little bit further, looking for the action.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com