tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6883465789486379180..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: F2S 22Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9518449817217751702008-10-11T00:55:00.000-04:002008-10-11T00:55:00.000-04:00It didn't really hook me, but I have to say, it's ...It didn't really hook me, but I have to say, it's just random enough I would read on to find out what the heck not drying her hair before bed is a conflict in the story. :P<BR/><BR/>So it's sorta a yes-no, lol.<BR/><BR/>Good luck!<BR/><BR/>~MercMerchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2538466180287444862008-10-10T22:01:00.000-04:002008-10-10T22:01:00.000-04:00Nothing here to grab my attention. Unless the POV ...Nothing here to grab my attention. Unless the POV character would be a mermaid.Luc2https://www.blogger.com/profile/01069557738924277313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11028390008492236142008-10-10T19:13:00.000-04:002008-10-10T19:13:00.000-04:00I'd read on. I find it interesting in a quirky sor...I'd read on. I find it interesting in a quirky sort of way. I almost think she's going to get pneumonia or something, or alternatively she will look wild haired on the 1st day of school or something like that.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32513315665998938032008-10-10T12:21:00.000-04:002008-10-10T12:21:00.000-04:00I like the voice here, and I'm not put off by the ...I like the voice here, and I'm not put off by the vagueness of the conflict. I imagine we'll find out why going to bed with wet hair is a problem in the next sentence. I'd read on (possibly expecting to find a warning about always donning clean underwear before one leaves the house ;-) ).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-46642336415850214462008-10-10T12:14:00.000-04:002008-10-10T12:14:00.000-04:00I'd read on only if the next sentence mentioned a ...I'd read on only if the next sentence mentioned a consequence (other than funky dried hair) of not listening.<BR/><BR/>It does have the right voice for a children's book.feywriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17224558691840388691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69986058801210884992008-10-10T01:16:00.000-04:002008-10-10T01:16:00.000-04:00Nothing to catch my imagination.Nothing to catch my imagination.Gayle Hedringtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01771876679139737652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52445276425227394252008-10-09T23:32:00.000-04:002008-10-09T23:32:00.000-04:00I'd read on, out of curiosity, though this did see...I'd read on, out of curiosity, though this did seem a little strange. Maybe have her mother say a word or two about why she shouldn't go to bed with wet hair?Meradeth Houstonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06741790047121063893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-85390533904647554202008-10-09T21:43:00.000-04:002008-10-09T21:43:00.000-04:00It's a curious opening, but I don't understand the...It's a curious opening, but I don't understand the problem of going to bed with wet hair.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38682878776906439662008-10-09T20:17:00.000-04:002008-10-09T20:17:00.000-04:00I'd read on because I wonder why on earth this is ...I'd read on because I wonder why on earth this is important to the story. Curiosity factor. :)Amy Laurenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16782528327499574711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-45443430967325938732008-10-09T19:31:00.000-04:002008-10-09T19:31:00.000-04:00I agree with Sandra that going to bed with wet hai...I agree with Sandra that going to bed with wet hair is not usually a problem for me, but I'm still interested in this--I feel like someone who still calls their mother, "Mama" creates conflict when they don't listen to her.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-3178240941744719662008-10-09T18:29:00.000-04:002008-10-09T18:29:00.000-04:00Going on the assumption that this is a kids book, ...Going on the assumption that this is a kids book, it didn't hook me. The voice is good for a children's book, but ditto on sandra's comments that there just isn't enough of a conflict in what you've presented to engage me in the MC's plight.LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-77509650680770027042008-10-09T17:13:00.000-04:002008-10-09T17:13:00.000-04:00I've gone to bed with wet hair before and never ha...I've gone to bed with wet hair before and never had problems with it. Despite the conflict, I don't feel any jeopardy here. Sorry, it doesn't hook me.Sandra Ulbrich Almazanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15365908651235829765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-72533323778082633832008-10-09T14:53:00.000-04:002008-10-09T14:53:00.000-04:00Mama said, "Dry your hair before going to bed."I d...<I>Mama said, "Dry your hair before going to bed."<BR/><BR/>I didn't listen.</I><BR/><BR/>I agree with "just me." This did not grab me at all. I feel like I just landed in the middle of something, completely confused - and a little bored.Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33882137479919321792008-10-09T11:57:00.000-04:002008-10-09T11:57:00.000-04:00Without knowing which genre I can't say where this...Without knowing which genre I can't say where this is going. Isolated like this, I'm not hooked.Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.com