tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7080737023840164648..comments2024-03-28T02:12:56.114-04:00Comments on Authoress: February Secret Agent #38Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84815991912561639982013-02-21T14:46:19.684-05:002013-02-21T14:46:19.684-05:00I liked it for the most part. I really liked the t...I liked it for the most part. I really liked the thing under her skin and the idea that there's a countdown until it comes to the surface.<br /><br />I'm not so sure about talking about her reflection as if it's a separate person. Whatever she sees in the mirror, she's also those things, even if she's what she feels like, too. The confidence might be a mask, but physically beautiful would be the reality now matter how you were looking at her.<br /><br />If the mirror isn't integral to the story, you might experiment with other ways to get this idea across that she doesn't feel the way she looks. This set up was a little too "poor little, gorgeous girl" for me to really sympathize much. <br /><br />I'd read on for a while, though, because the writing is solid and the voice is pretty strong.Heathernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-62394243352421204912013-02-21T07:04:24.273-05:002013-02-21T07:04:24.273-05:00The writing was really strong, and I am definitely...The writing was really strong, and I am definitely intrigued. Very nice beginning. Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-6744984870018372142013-02-20T19:42:20.453-05:002013-02-20T19:42:20.453-05:00I like that bit of surprise that she's looking...I like that bit of surprise that she's looking at her reflection. That she's beautiful, but there's something sinister underneath the surface is interesting. What is it?! WHEN will it come out?! <br /><br />The interaction with her and her brother is nice - I get tired of siblings hating each other, so that was fresh as well. <br /><br />Well written and interesting without spoonfeeding everything to the reader, I'd DEFINITELY read on! Feaky Snuckerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17481513779668517971noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-6988902789786362332013-02-20T17:12:18.833-05:002013-02-20T17:12:18.833-05:00Like others have said, at first I was confused by ...Like others have said, at first I was confused by the girl in the mirror, and feeling a little disappointed that the protagonist was so full of herself. But THEN I saw that this was a fairy-tale redux, and am now super intrigued!!!<br /><br />Carissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10594436685900756259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61022784996944247842013-02-20T15:42:58.371-05:002013-02-20T15:42:58.371-05:00I'm intrigued by the mirror. Because the genre...I'm intrigued by the mirror. Because the genre says fairy-tale I immediately assume that it's a magic mirror. If it isn't... if she's just looking at herself in the mirror, then you may want to consider a different opening. <br /><br />I also got a little confused by "wasn't half as broken" which seemed to imply that the reflection was a little broken -- a bit different from the perfection mentioned later.<br /><br />Maybe say instead: <br />The girl looking back at me was beautiful, confident, sure of herself. My complete opposite in many ways. <br /><br />I think I would be more intrigued and less confused. <br /><br />I really like the whole "I felt it. Moving around beneath my skin, waiting, calculating--counting down the days." That hooked me:)<br /><br />I would definitely read more of this book...Kristi Wrighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18392604886780801530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39647092713732570232013-02-20T14:21:39.043-05:002013-02-20T14:21:39.043-05:00The first two lines have a bit of a disconnect, mo...The first two lines have a bit of a disconnect, more confusing than paradoxical. Assuming it's an actual mirror (and if it's not that'll confuse the reader too), it's hard to be the opposite of those things, yet show them. Not impossible, but you need to have a line about the protective shell she has put up.<br /><br />She seems a bit too excited to see her brother - I think a heart only lifts if the brother is four and bubbly.<br /><br />I like <i>the path of destruction</i> and want to find out more of their relationship - her being pretty but pained is less interesting a story.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13593564925888589168noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83881077074282000512013-02-20T12:56:23.163-05:002013-02-20T12:56:23.163-05:00I too was a tad bit confused, re: other girl in th...I too was a tad bit confused, re: other girl in the mirror, BUT once I cottoned on to what you were doing + the label of "fairy tale redux," I'm incredibly intrigued. I'd love to know what fairy tale it is, and where the pretty on the outside/false reflection bit is going.Alexa D.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12597238050641221884noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83578837885190643042013-02-20T12:34:05.902-05:002013-02-20T12:34:05.902-05:00I was a bit confused about the other girl in the m...I was a bit confused about the other girl in the mirror, too. I think a little more clarity on that point will make this opening sing. I love the interaction with the brother.Spaced Out Galhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03400342724853623600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-43013459667681605542013-02-20T11:21:57.345-05:002013-02-20T11:21:57.345-05:00Okay, this is definitely interesting and the writi...Okay, this is definitely interesting and the writing seemed smooth to me -- nothing really jarred. My only thing is that I thought the other girl in the mirror was too subtle. I don't get quite what's wrong with her reflection except that it's pretty -- is it the reflection that's supernatural, or her? A little more info would actually hook me more -- but just a little.Vicorvanoreply@blogger.com