tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7191743824877736781..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: August First Line Grabber #15Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger92125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-50244183025595006602012-08-14T17:19:19.847-04:002012-08-14T17:19:19.847-04:00Since voting is done, I'd like to respond to O...Since voting is done, I'd like to respond to Owl. I have to say I'm shocked at such a judgmental and accusatory statement being made here. If you look at new YA being published, it's heavily female-centric. If you look at NPR's list of top YA novels, it's about a 60-40 split with the majority of narrators being female. (http://www.npr.org/2012/08/07/157795366/your-favorites-100-best-ever-teen-novels) So it's not a far stretch for many of us to assume the narrator here is female. Questioning how the narrator knows it's his/her father's penis does not mean the commenter has "daddy issues" and needs therapy. Yes, boys grow up seeing their dad's pee, but I doubt my brothers could look at a random penis snapshot and know it was my dad's. In the same way that I, despite growing up changing in front of my mom as a child, wouldn't recognize a random snapshot of boobs and know whether they were hers or not.<br /><br />We are judging whether the first line grabbed us as a reader, and why or why not. We are not judging one another. I certainly hope your statements don't prevent blog readers from commenting in the future for fear of such harsh judgment.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59762052297646180262012-08-11T11:28:24.771-04:002012-08-11T11:28:24.771-04:00No. Good line but I think it needs some tightening...No. Good line but I think it needs some tightening. Also, why would he keep tax records in there? I do like the concept of finding a photo of your dad's wang in a drawer - good conflict.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01866320252287612514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-90020862200369360472012-08-11T09:57:11.168-04:002012-08-11T09:57:11.168-04:00No. Not because I'm afraid of the word penis b...No. Not because I'm afraid of the word penis but don't understand the nonchalant attitude - like in assign they ration - once I found a picture of my dad's penis. The tone seems off.Adopted Goddesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16854988307087656003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28461303258217827082012-08-10T15:40:07.201-04:002012-08-10T15:40:07.201-04:00Yes. I found it funny!Yes. I found it funny!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00052141159886452951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-77753017551215282832012-08-10T00:10:24.384-04:002012-08-10T00:10:24.384-04:00Once again....all the above commenters need therap...Once again....all the above commenters need therapy. There is no "she" in the opening line. Maybe it is a girl, maybe it is a boy but we don't know that yet. I am stunned by the assumption and also the first thoughts in the comments. Obviously, this blog has a lot of girls with daddy issues.Owlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52377550156754998822012-08-09T23:30:53.722-04:002012-08-09T23:30:53.722-04:00No. It's too gross. How does she know it's...No. It's too gross. How does she know it's her dad's penis?Britney Gulbrandsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03637618498524496363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59802767525854704352012-08-09T22:37:52.217-04:002012-08-09T22:37:52.217-04:00Yes. Because we've all found *something* in ou...Yes. Because we've all found *something* in our parents drawer that squicked us out. And I want to see the MCs reaction.Aightballhttp://aightball.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33027519725491486142012-08-09T20:09:13.667-04:002012-08-09T20:09:13.667-04:00Yes. I'm curious about the snooping, and why t...Yes. I'm curious about the snooping, and why the photo is where it is. It didn't squick me out - I read the usual suspects like Forever when I was in middle school.tarakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11879814735940426961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-58818583837561942132012-08-09T19:28:49.211-04:002012-08-09T19:28:49.211-04:00No. I wondered how she knew it was her dad's ...No. I wondered how she knew it was her dad's penis. Had she seen it before?Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-70662591422925922972012-08-09T17:05:03.088-04:002012-08-09T17:05:03.088-04:00No. Not only does this make me dring it has the po...No. Not only does this make me dring it has the potential to trigger someone.Books or Deathnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-91016474839189741132012-08-09T15:37:32.972-04:002012-08-09T15:37:32.972-04:00I just came from a summer in Greece and Austria. A...I just came from a summer in Greece and Austria. And, on the beaches I was at, the girls were naked and , god forbid,so were the guys. Mom, dad and little Sven and Aphrodite were also as God made them. So, I think this American presumptiom (from women in this case) that "penis" = abuse is th emost disturbing part of this ONE LINE. May I say again...ONE LINE!DannyMacnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-66987601075854404582012-08-09T15:22:07.896-04:002012-08-09T15:22:07.896-04:00I know a lot of you are turned off by the squick f...I know a lot of you are turned off by the squick factor, but if our MC is male, boys and dads often pee together. You know, public restrooms with walls of urinals? Also very helpful in potty training ("See dad, see dad pee.") Males grow up with this and think nothing of it. <br /><br />(I already voted yes for it, but I love the controversy it's creating! And it's interesting how us females just assume the MC is a girl.)DJnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-62625296763113895902012-08-09T14:30:43.117-04:002012-08-09T14:30:43.117-04:00No.
I squicked out. That doesn't often happen...No.<br /><br />I squicked out. That doesn't often happen to me. Sorry. But I also thought the sentence was too long and the extra clause softened the punch too much. And I wondered how it was identifiably "Dad's."Heathernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65404711576513725772012-08-09T14:07:01.714-04:002012-08-09T14:07:01.714-04:00Yes...but...I agree with commenters who stated tak...Yes...but...I agree with commenters who stated take the "dad" out of it in the first sentence. Stating where the MC found it gives mystery. It is definitely shocking and readers will either know immediately if they love it or hate it. No gray area here! : )Kellie D.G.https://www.blogger.com/profile/05109856150108146250noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47976557410692294392012-08-09T13:25:05.365-04:002012-08-09T13:25:05.365-04:00Yes.
Hilarious opening - esp. the justaposition of...Yes.<br />Hilarious opening - esp. the justaposition of the tax records. Super.<br />(on a side note, I see a lot of comments here saying it is an "ick" factor. Well, wait for the next line. Perhaps it says, "Of course I did not know it then that it was dad's..." etc.<br />Anyway, it is funny. All those seeing abuse need to get thee hence without delay to a therapist (and stop watching cable TV)Happy Dolphinnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54562472049569165382012-08-09T13:24:25.067-04:002012-08-09T13:24:25.067-04:00Most definitely YES! It's a funny image. I wan...Most definitely YES! It's a funny image. I want to know not only the kid who remembers this but also the parents who do something like that. Fantastic.Jenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13194120188040608319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-16287884048286176302012-08-09T13:15:23.664-04:002012-08-09T13:15:23.664-04:00No. Completey turned off. How does she know it'...No. Completey turned off. How does she know it's her dad's penis? Why not just a nude photo of her dad or parents? I feel like the line is for pure shock value.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9973540296899655622012-08-09T10:43:32.001-04:002012-08-09T10:43:32.001-04:00Hmm. How does she/he know it's Dad's penis...Hmm. How does she/he know it's Dad's penis? No. Too squeamish about this one.Annie Bnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-90068618505662565082012-08-09T07:47:29.962-04:002012-08-09T07:47:29.962-04:00No. Too angsty-therapeutic-needy. Weirded out, I g...No. Too angsty-therapeutic-needy. Weirded out, I guess.Jennnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9047899401829959342012-08-09T04:10:43.814-04:002012-08-09T04:10:43.814-04:00Yes. Because it's obviously intriguing/controv...Yes. Because it's obviously intriguing/controversial enough for so many people to get into the debate - and I think that merits some exploration!Dayspringnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-10118071066600086922012-08-09T02:32:14.393-04:002012-08-09T02:32:14.393-04:00Yes. Squeal & ewww! Then of course the questio...Yes. Squeal & ewww! Then of course the question arises: how did she know it was her dad's? Did he tattoo his name on it? Okay, I'm imagining worse than you probably wrote now. It's an attention getting opening line, that's for sure.Tori Schindlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12350474671522596420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25387135697467965772012-08-08T23:59:56.247-04:002012-08-08T23:59:56.247-04:00As a teacher, I have to agree with the above. The ...As a teacher, I have to agree with the above. The problem with YA is that it is taregeted at a non-living entity. The real "YA" audience is sexual, active, profane, and has no idea what PC means. Yet, the books that are written for that age group are as the above commenter suggested, sanitized of everything that is in their everyday life. Including, may I add, language, before the bell rings, my toes curl at the language I hear from my students in their discussions with one another - it is really profane. The average "young adult" will be spewing more profanity and talking about more sex than the also average 30 year old man or woman could wrap their head around in a week. So, I think we need to get real and realize that when we say YA what we really mean is we are writing a version of teenagers that would be palatable to a 10-12 year old. Because the real teenagers of that age - dayam, they are not reading us.DocWilisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14639736878510354492012-08-08T23:14:23.006-04:002012-08-08T23:14:23.006-04:00No. Not for YA. No way.No. Not for YA. No way.Stacy McKitrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07898731847653710759noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89830227667686936892012-08-08T23:05:40.309-04:002012-08-08T23:05:40.309-04:00Yes. It's a first line. 3 seconds of your atte...Yes. It's a first line. 3 seconds of your attention bnefore you go onto the 2nd line..and 3rd. It's funny and it means the author and MC might be fun to go along with. Everyone who is trying to say that it is creepy because how does he/she know it belongs to the dad should get a freaking life and look in the mirror. Obviously what you are implying is sexual abuse and molestation which means that is how YOU see the world. Sad, really sadcommentary on where we are as a people and all I can say is whoa! When I read the comments I take note of the names and I think, if that is how your mind works then I don't want YOU anywhere near my kids.DocWillisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-85886824149308735452012-08-08T21:33:30.052-04:002012-08-08T21:33:30.052-04:00My first instinct is YES, because it made me laugh...My first instinct is YES, because it made me laugh. <br /><br />But, Ellie has a point. How does the narrator know it belongs to her/his dad?<br /><br />If that one line causes this much controversy, perhaps we have to at least read the first paragraph.Dana Enoreply@blogger.com