tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7639068635231068320..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: 17 SECRET AGENT: Are You Hooked?Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51340235110849555712008-11-15T21:27:00.000-05:002008-11-15T21:27:00.000-05:00I liked the writing and the voice but there's no h...I liked the writing and the voice but there's no hook, really.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39296918389110731192008-11-14T10:36:00.000-05:002008-11-14T10:36:00.000-05:00Loved the voice. Need some conflict.Her anger at t...Loved the voice. <BR/><BR/>Need some conflict.<BR/><BR/>Her anger at the doctors doesn't do it. They obey the doctors and adjust the food. <BR/><BR/>So the conflict so far is just her depression which might make this good women's fiction, but commercial fiction, I think, needs a fast start.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78429540815289721522008-11-14T09:55:00.000-05:002008-11-14T09:55:00.000-05:00Unlike others, I guess this voice is too "folksy" ...Unlike others, I guess this voice is too "folksy" for me. But that is a personal preference as I don't really like sort of down home type of reading. By the voice I'm picturing that this is set on a farm in the mid-west and is going to involve a woman recognizing her previously stifled power. <BR/><BR/>I sort of don't like this doormat woman. Or the idiot people that are expecting her to take responsibility for their health needs. Me, I'd say to heck with you, fix your own dang breakfast, what are you, stupid? But like I said, that's just me. :)<BR/><BR/>You do have an attention to detail that I like, though.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2912795341068633332008-11-14T00:02:00.000-05:002008-11-14T00:02:00.000-05:00I agree with Lori.I agree with Lori.Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25923307271403581112008-11-13T23:51:00.000-05:002008-11-13T23:51:00.000-05:00Not hooked, sorry. Nothing is happening. It's an...Not hooked, sorry. Nothing is happening. It's an unnamed narrator musing about current events. There's no plot or conflict recognizable yet.LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38904516648188094032008-11-13T22:43:00.000-05:002008-11-13T22:43:00.000-05:00I'm not hooked by this passage, but I like her voi...I'm not hooked by this passage, but I like her voice. Again this may be one of those beginnings that combined with a blurb would hook me in an instant.Amandahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10810590407001594471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-22632072311886270552008-11-13T17:25:00.000-05:002008-11-13T17:25:00.000-05:00Loved the voice so much I'm more than willing to t...Loved the voice so much I'm more than willing to turn the page. <BR/><BR/>I think I know her...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86182902449995633882008-11-13T16:15:00.000-05:002008-11-13T16:15:00.000-05:00Not totally hooked because I don't know enough abo...Not totally hooked because I don't know enough about the story, but I like the voice.Melindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17182951575531989338noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-10281043613348443202008-11-13T14:42:00.000-05:002008-11-13T14:42:00.000-05:00I'm not exactly hooked here... but that could be b...I'm not exactly hooked here... but that could be because of the 250w limit.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5342224667303820982008-11-13T12:02:00.000-05:002008-11-13T12:02:00.000-05:00I also loved the voice. Keep it up!I also loved the voice. Keep it up!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-4789686116649179982008-11-13T11:48:00.000-05:002008-11-13T11:48:00.000-05:00*grin* I loved the voice. The grammar killed me, b...*grin* I loved the voice. The grammar killed me, but I think it went well with the character. :)Danyelle L.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10366276085080565870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31938706171756945332008-11-13T10:13:00.000-05:002008-11-13T10:13:00.000-05:00I like the voice, but I'd need to get into action ...I like the voice, but I'd need to get into action pretty soon to keep going. I know, I know, if someone made that comment about my post I'd scream "But if you just kept reading! Almost...there..."sraaschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02960364630183418763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89262637341067279512008-11-13T10:09:00.000-05:002008-11-13T10:09:00.000-05:00Hooked. The voice catches me, because I can imagin...Hooked. The voice catches me, because I can imagine this woman. I've met this woman. I would have to see where the story was going, of course, but it's an interesting start.S.J.Kincaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14159000802250378161noreply@blogger.com