tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7640863186466977632..comments2024-03-29T03:41:44.480-04:00Comments on Authoress: First Sentence #50Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger73125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82023324730291940902013-06-29T11:21:30.841-04:002013-06-29T11:21:30.841-04:00Yes! Sounds Luke fun, although I don't think I...Yes! Sounds Luke fun, although I don't think I'd join. Blood's gross<br />Author Lia Mackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15120323328153052120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53143273709074289942013-06-29T01:49:48.585-04:002013-06-29T01:49:48.585-04:00Yes. I loved being exposed to a new word (petechi...Yes. I loved being exposed to a new word (petechial).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41837265235615450912013-06-28T09:57:00.640-04:002013-06-28T09:57:00.640-04:00Yes...and NO! I like the quirkiness of the line bu...Yes...and NO! I like the quirkiness of the line but I think, as an opener, it would do better - and be stronger - to just leave it with the, "Sunday night was always forensic night at the Klyczek house", and not try to dress it up or make it 'more interesting' or give it more 'definition'. Let the intrigue of the opening line stand on its own leading the reader to wonder about 'forensics at the Klyczek house???' <br />And, btw, forensics is not limited to dead bodies, blood, and bullets, etc.Reesehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00330348718504682666noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73660654751607229772013-06-28T05:10:48.281-04:002013-06-28T05:10:48.281-04:00Yes--Definitely intriguing. It's not just a t...Yes--Definitely intriguing. It's not just a teaser line. There's pertinent info there that makes me want to be a fly on the wall in this house.Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60259253716488483842013-06-28T04:01:40.357-04:002013-06-28T04:01:40.357-04:00No. Too many big words. Like the humor though.No. Too many big words. Like the humor though.DayspringJubileehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14269546579701223787noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31726109328820719652013-06-28T01:38:59.977-04:002013-06-28T01:38:59.977-04:00I forgot to add to my yes up there that the pierog...I forgot to add to my yes up there that the pierogies were also part of why I would keep reading, as this type of food generally says something about the family's ethnicity, and I generally find pierogie-eating families interesting! DJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14359760998871484565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-7841679623515602382013-06-28T00:40:40.453-04:002013-06-28T00:40:40.453-04:00Yes. I want to know more about this family. Yes. I want to know more about this family. KariSnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60133139860349539272013-06-27T23:05:59.336-04:002013-06-27T23:05:59.336-04:00Yes, definitely. This made me literally laugh out ...Yes, definitely. This made me literally laugh out loud, and I almost never do that. The humor confirmed my impression that the title was meant as a joke, which is good. And maybe it's just a matter of finding the right audience because I think people who watch the kinds of shows you're talking about know what petechial hemorrhaging is.amhogganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831363893894165135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31068471470803955522013-06-27T22:59:23.272-04:002013-06-27T22:59:23.272-04:00A regretful No. Love the humor, but not the word c...A regretful No. Love the humor, but not the word choice. Very close call for me. Tony Acreehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10645967310766453710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33967616899997475102013-06-27T22:37:22.934-04:002013-06-27T22:37:22.934-04:00Yes. Simply because that strikes me as an unusual ...Yes. Simply because that strikes me as an unusual family I'd like to get to know better. Aightballhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10706831888613374173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88583227414977937662013-06-27T22:07:37.419-04:002013-06-27T22:07:37.419-04:00Yes. Definitely. The goal of your first sentence i...Yes. Definitely. The goal of your first sentence is to get me to read the second, and I don't have to know what petechial means to know this family's investigating blood evidence over popcorn and ethnic food on a Sunday night. Not your average family activity. Intriguing.KarinB.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-446506428381557962013-06-27T21:16:32.885-04:002013-06-27T21:16:32.885-04:00NO - the first half had me, but then I had to goog...NO - the first half had me, but then I had to google some of the second half. A book that starts out with words I don't know breaks my flow.KayChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16267506508468548195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33926793653682629862013-06-27T19:45:51.235-04:002013-06-27T19:45:51.235-04:00Yes. It sounds funny and leaves me wanting to rea...Yes. It sounds funny and leaves me wanting to read on.Kate Larkindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23033183586687244332013-06-27T19:34:14.296-04:002013-06-27T19:34:14.296-04:00Yes_ Because I want to read the next sentence,duh....Yes_ Because I want to read the next sentence,duh.Bill Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12727407427730937429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64642213478420053222013-06-27T19:25:11.624-04:002013-06-27T19:25:11.624-04:00Yes. Humorous voice. Love the sequence from normal...Yes. Humorous voice. Love the sequence from normal to weird to really weird.ChiTraderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08156118145545539641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37428492890763651332013-06-27T19:07:33.828-04:002013-06-27T19:07:33.828-04:00Yes -- witty, intriguing, and funny!Yes -- witty, intriguing, and funny!Britney Gulbrandsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03637618498524496363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-52668920521028745542013-06-27T18:22:13.216-04:002013-06-27T18:22:13.216-04:00Hmm, almost cause I'm not looking up petechial...Hmm, almost cause I'm not looking up petechial in an opening line.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37457036664624268912013-06-27T18:12:36.175-04:002013-06-27T18:12:36.175-04:00Yes - it is witty and engaging.Yes - it is witty and engaging.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05697412264806977992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25452639618611191422013-06-27T17:48:12.372-04:002013-06-27T17:48:12.372-04:00No. If I had to look up pierogies and petechial to...No. If I had to look up pierogies and petechial to understand the sentence, I imagine most YA readers would have to as well. Even after looking them up, I'm not hooked.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-79323789369085397902013-06-27T17:42:31.904-04:002013-06-27T17:42:31.904-04:00Yes. There's a confidence to the writing that&...Yes. There's a confidence to the writing that's attractive - even if I didn't know all the words. :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68482038627727093782013-06-27T17:35:26.952-04:002013-06-27T17:35:26.952-04:00yes. A unique openingyes. A unique openingSujahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16899054126546663789noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2947352225067932982013-06-27T16:47:25.683-04:002013-06-27T16:47:25.683-04:00NO
Sorry, I wasn't sure what half the words me...NO<br />Sorry, I wasn't sure what half the words meant or how they were pronounced.Kennedynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-49058830838804663022013-06-27T16:28:55.955-04:002013-06-27T16:28:55.955-04:00Yes. Normally I wouldn't read anything involv...Yes. Normally I wouldn't read anything involving squick, but this sounds lighthearted enough for me to be interested.Chrohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07768990128419496674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21037337712765061242013-06-27T16:21:08.554-04:002013-06-27T16:21:08.554-04:00No- the voice sounded young, yet I had to Google &...No- the voice sounded young, yet I had to Google 'petechial."SG_Marshnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69910193486377466302013-06-27T16:20:21.990-04:002013-06-27T16:20:21.990-04:00Yes! All day long, yes. This is fabulous - I get h...Yes! All day long, yes. This is fabulous - I get humor, family ethnicity and voice all in one sentence. Bravo!Marilee Hayneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16757885702409755120noreply@blogger.com