tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7781824633088368314..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: February Secret Agent #36Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-3156720004224601632012-02-19T12:16:23.968-05:002012-02-19T12:16:23.968-05:00You have a great mg voice but I would be careful n...You have a great mg voice but I would be careful not to introduce too much at once. I thought it was really strong from the beginning up through, “Now she’d have to put up with another round of teasing.” After that you introduced so many new things I lost my connection to the voice. If the bats end up being a plot point, stay with them for a bit. Wouldn’t Cody tease her about the bats comment instead of her eyes? You can introduce her eyes, her psychic family and her ability to understand animals later.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64458759539303849622012-02-18T12:26:56.387-05:002012-02-18T12:26:56.387-05:00Great job capturing MG voice and setting up a very...Great job capturing MG voice and setting up a very interesting main character!<br /><br />Good luck!Carmenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01502915116446772081noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55564098665889436932012-02-18T01:22:42.966-05:002012-02-18T01:22:42.966-05:00I liked this, because I liked Stella and the bat s...I liked this, because I liked Stella and the bat situation interested me. I thought the last paragraph sounded a little forced though, like a dump of information. I would read on for a while though to see where it goes.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04319768362229583026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64962932767263392342012-02-16T14:29:40.054-05:002012-02-16T14:29:40.054-05:00I like it! I like it! Did I say I liked it?
I wan...I like it! I like it! Did I say I liked it?<br /><br />I want to know more about Stella and the bats, and the teacher acts like maybe she's hiding something. . . Tell me, please:)lol<br /><br />Great opening. Good luck!J.R. Worthamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08360006987817234516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17646944171319367622012-02-16T10:18:49.947-05:002012-02-16T10:18:49.947-05:00Wow, this sounds like SO MUCH FUN. Stella is just ...Wow, this sounds like SO MUCH FUN. Stella is just leaping off the page. Good luck!!MarcyKatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08303670174583471227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68838570922743435272012-02-15T20:34:25.898-05:002012-02-15T20:34:25.898-05:00Great voice and I definitely get MG from this. Yay...Great voice and I definitely get MG from this. Yay!Alleged Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04869021184116123477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14140298196777007642012-02-15T18:10:42.077-05:002012-02-15T18:10:42.077-05:00Love it! Love Stella!
I think it's very impor...Love it! Love Stella!<br /><br />I think it's very important to let teachers know when they're wrong. Umm, no, they never appreciate it, but just must be done!<br /><br />Want more!GSMarlenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17558162486383585621noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-75182386520137494892012-02-15T16:09:27.649-05:002012-02-15T16:09:27.649-05:00Stella sounds like quite a character. I'm very...Stella sounds like quite a character. I'm very intrigued and would keep reading. <br />One problem I had was the teacher's reaction when Stella makes her statement. I'm not sure a teacher would drop the eraser (out of shock I'm guessing) and then a moment later almost dismiss the entire thing (that's very...interesting). Unless, of course, the teacher is hiding some secret that involves the bats, in which case it makes perfect sense.<br />Also, in the first paragraph, I'd say desk instead of school desk. It is very clear this takes place at school. <br />Good job and good luck!rbgreene04noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55618060853377726792012-02-15T16:09:17.873-05:002012-02-15T16:09:17.873-05:00I love the geekiness of the MC, all set on proving...I love the geekiness of the MC, all set on proving her teacher wrong. i think its something all kids that age would get behind. Love that she calls them mutants in her rush to prove it. The name choice are something too: Stella, Possum Trot, even the title, sets the tone and targets that student who's just a little off center. The prose can use some tightening and polish, but the foundation is there. I'd read more.Kelly Metzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16393486174448300525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78394162339380960692012-02-15T13:48:51.686-05:002012-02-15T13:48:51.686-05:00So many mysteries introduced, of course I'd ke...So many mysteries introduced, of course I'd keep reading! Great job.Michellenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-18120994333167608552012-02-15T12:34:57.595-05:002012-02-15T12:34:57.595-05:00Wow! I definitely would keep reading this. Stell...Wow! I definitely would keep reading this. Stella is a very interesting character and you've done a good job of bringing her to life.will1966noreply@blogger.com