tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post7954220051816270662..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: #36 YA Urban Fantasy: CrackedAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-3841815656088435012011-12-06T12:14:34.588-05:002011-12-06T12:14:34.588-05:00It was in the rules -- you're allowed to bid 1...It was in the rules -- you're allowed to bid 150 and then try for the full right away. If it weren't set up that way, no one would ever want to bid 150. :)Authoresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21687192539812205112011-12-06T12:11:55.328-05:002011-12-06T12:11:55.328-05:00WHAT????
Where did that 20 page increment thing c...WHAT???? <br />Where did that 20 page increment thing come from???? *Glares at Josh from earlier comment above*<br /><br />Also, I think next year there should be no bidding against yourself. I was sitting there like a jackass waiting for someone to make the next bid. This is an AUCTION. Only in publishing do you have people bidding against themselves.<br /><br />I'm storming off in a huff now.Michelle Wolfsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12861727270548481812011-12-06T12:05:42.122-05:002011-12-06T12:05:42.122-05:00BIDDING ON THIS ITEM IS NOW CLOSED!
Victoria won....BIDDING ON THIS ITEM IS NOW CLOSED!<br /><br />Victoria won. You're allowed to bid 150 and then immediately bid on the full. :)Authoresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-81072417216902332252011-12-06T11:55:13.138-05:002011-12-06T11:55:13.138-05:00Wait, crap. Did I make up that 20 page increments ...Wait, crap. Did I make up that 20 page increments rule??? Where did that come from?<br /><br />Ok, Authoress. Just tell us who won already.Michelle Wolfsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-43828563113080435072011-12-06T11:49:29.514-05:002011-12-06T11:49:29.514-05:00Wait, she needed to post 20 more so that was illeg...Wait, she needed to post 20 more so that was illegal. Needed to be 151. Sorry Victoria, I think I should win. :)Michelle Wolfsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38976482281600353092011-12-06T11:48:39.477-05:002011-12-06T11:48:39.477-05:00FULL!!!!FULL!!!!Michelle Wolfsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9597415618561662822011-12-06T11:48:33.359-05:002011-12-06T11:48:33.359-05:00FULLFULLVictoria Marininoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8982880267264962382011-12-06T11:48:20.441-05:002011-12-06T11:48:20.441-05:00150150Victoria Marininoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40263734834165433402011-12-06T11:44:46.864-05:002011-12-06T11:44:46.864-05:00I thought 150 or at least 5 bids.
Hmmm.
131I thought 150 or at least 5 bids.<br />Hmmm.<br />131Michelle Wolfsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39373414036900709822011-12-06T11:42:13.995-05:002011-12-06T11:42:13.995-05:00I'll bid 111I'll bid 111Ammi-Joan Paquettenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-26951375794176121072011-12-06T11:41:07.151-05:002011-12-06T11:41:07.151-05:00No can do! You have to be at 150 first. (I did tha...No can do! You have to be at 150 first. (I did that earlier too...)Ammi-Joan Paquettenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-15376081931618255662011-12-06T11:39:58.807-05:002011-12-06T11:39:58.807-05:00Hello Michelle--Well done!Hello Michelle--Well done!Josh Getzlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01141722943145348820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9743706712921334862011-12-06T11:39:32.173-05:002011-12-06T11:39:32.173-05:00HA HA HA Stealth Attack!!!!!!!!
Wait, did I break ...HA HA HA Stealth Attack!!!!!!!!<br />Wait, did I break the rules?? That was after 5 bids, right?Michelle Wolfsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47960917637055824062011-12-06T11:38:06.914-05:002011-12-06T11:38:06.914-05:00Full!Full!Michelle Wolfsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78930151831477452152011-12-06T11:35:52.122-05:002011-12-06T11:35:52.122-05:009090Josh Getzlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01141722943145348820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8725682844919613402011-12-06T11:34:33.173-05:002011-12-06T11:34:33.173-05:00I could do 70!I could do 70!Ammi-Joan Paquettenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88406610447015624772011-12-06T11:33:56.685-05:002011-12-06T11:33:56.685-05:00Sorry--supposed to be in 20 pp increments--50Sorry--supposed to be in 20 pp increments--50Josh Getzlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01141722943145348820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-75506503879690973372011-12-06T11:32:42.702-05:002011-12-06T11:32:42.702-05:003535Josh Getzlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01141722943145348820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-45547732744872876532011-12-06T11:30:39.101-05:002011-12-06T11:30:39.101-05:0030!30!Danielle Chiottinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-30112677933772120672011-12-06T11:10:03.732-05:002011-12-06T11:10:03.732-05:0010--and it's on!10--and it's on!Josh Getzlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01141722943145348820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32582097370184821422011-12-06T11:07:14.613-05:002011-12-06T11:07:14.613-05:00This is a great premise. I'd love to see more....This is a great premise. I'd love to see more. I bid 5 pages!danielle chiottihttp://www.upstartcrowliterary.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-59204540794249947642011-12-05T16:55:59.496-05:002011-12-05T16:55:59.496-05:00#36 CRACKED
Logline: Clearly we’re meant to sympat...#36 CRACKED<br />Logline: Clearly we’re meant to sympathize with our bad-girl mc. I’ll admit to being charmed by the dangerous girl here, even if I’m not sure from this pitch why/if she’s bad – hiding from demons AND demon-hunters seems like a neither-nor scenario. More about what she is and her motivations? <br /><br />Also, others have pointed this out, but the typos in the pitch aren’t as endearing to draw in readers!<br /><br />Line notes: I see you setting up nice repetition for emphasis with the “some people/other people/third kind” and the “your mum – if she’s the nice/bad sort,” and sighed in disappointment when you didn’t take advantage of it with the third instance of the mum “(_who was_ the nice sort)”. <br /><br />The “mums” also made me wonder if this is British – any other reason for the spelling choice? Also, its inconsistency is a bit confusing.<br /><br />Overall: Actually, this sample has quite a lot of repetition, like pulsing rhythm. Maybe it’s very effective, if you are trying to invoke a level of poetic madness. Just take care not to carry it too far. I’d be interested to read more.Sarah Shumwayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18241110372281920996noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9357519664100112332011-12-04T20:44:08.043-05:002011-12-04T20:44:08.043-05:00LOVE! I love the gritty, dangerous voice of your p...LOVE! I love the gritty, dangerous voice of your protag. I love the recurring use of the nice and bad sort of mum--nicely done.<br /><br />I got a little bit lost with all the grey. It had a nice sound to it at first, all that grey, but I started to get confused. Where exactly is she and why?<br /><br />Also, slightly confused by the logline--who thinks she's a saint, the demon hunters or the army? And I'd love to know why they're after her. What did she do to end up in these circumstances? And if no one's survived to warn anyone about the third type, why is there an entire school of demon-hunters?<br /><br />Strong, lovely voice and awesome protag. I'm definitely hooked.Amanda Sunnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-48301336822752005202011-12-03T16:27:24.963-05:002011-12-03T16:27:24.963-05:00I won't say much since I'm obviously biase...I won't say much since I'm obviously biased because I've read more, but I just wanted to stop and say that I really love your premise and your heroine! Good luck with this!! <33Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00482654021641010175noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23605747000716932402011-12-02T17:24:33.560-05:002011-12-02T17:24:33.560-05:00I've seen this too, so I already knew I loved ...I've seen this too, so I already knew I loved the premise.<br /><br />Did you know you used "mum" at the start and "mom" when she's reminiscing?<br /><br />The others have already pointed out what else I was going to mention, so I'll just say: Good luck!Tamarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16466014613515065083noreply@blogger.com