tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post8288541730599139778..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: Friday FricasseeAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-43888758861883226952013-12-23T11:54:28.987-05:002013-12-23T11:54:28.987-05:00I prefer the first version, in fact. It gets all t...I prefer the first version, in fact. It gets all that set-up across neatly, then you can get into the scene with the Dragon King. The second version just stretches it all out.Vincenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41649413802547388662013-12-21T13:57:17.314-05:002013-12-21T13:57:17.314-05:00No matter how many times we hear it, it's stil...No matter how many times we hear it, it's still good advice. I have a particularly hard time with telling in my first chapters. This is great advice for the New Year's editing.SueJayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14428582843087294011noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-34340471925219429182013-12-21T00:02:49.663-05:002013-12-21T00:02:49.663-05:00Thanks for sharing this, it really was a gift! It&...Thanks for sharing this, it really was a gift! It's good to see an example like that, it really does help. <br /><br />Thanks for all you do for writers, and have a very merry Christmas.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61037978901626259712013-12-20T20:30:31.462-05:002013-12-20T20:30:31.462-05:00Good examples, Authoress. :)
It's funny how ...Good examples, Authoress. :) <br /><br />It's funny how the show-don't-tell point is driven into us when we're new writers, and often we can get so caught up in the showing that we don't tell enough. I had to add more backstory to the second book in my Knight's Curse series because my Harlequin editor said I wasn't giving the reader enough information. <br /><br />Many times it can be a matter of taste, and it depends on the story. Fantasy and historical fiction will sometimes have a considerable amount of telling, but if done right, it works. If what you're telling has a direct effect on the plot and/or character at that particular moment in story time, you might want to keep it.Karen Duvallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01839711547501582977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28996810635486207852013-12-20T16:20:14.862-05:002013-12-20T16:20:14.862-05:00The best way I've found to get better at show ...The best way I've found to get better at show don't tell is to have a critique partner or group. I can more easily see telling in someone else's work than my own. Even when I think I'm not info-dumping or using extended narration, someone else's eyes and viewpoint can point it out. Over time it gets *slightly* easier :) I'm still in that stage trying to figure out which scenes should be shown and which scenes aren't necessary. Sometimes a scene doesn't add anything to the story and even if it's good writing, might be slowing the pace.<br /><br />Thanks Authoress for all you do! Happy Holidays! Enjoy that family time.Stephscohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06328839483008086049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53848029693666325452013-12-20T15:51:31.833-05:002013-12-20T15:51:31.833-05:00Everything about this post is like a shiny package...Everything about this post is like a shiny package wrapped up in ribbon. Thank you for your dedication, wisdom, and of course, snark ;)Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12589132806788056004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47291301487574441312013-12-20T14:57:27.338-05:002013-12-20T14:57:27.338-05:00Great examples. The second had me shivering. (i...Great examples. The second had me shivering. (i'd fazed out on the first by the fourth sentence.<br /><br />But what I really wanted to say was Merry Christmas to you and your sister. Eat lots of cookies.sbjameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06986950185596914217noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-18991430088295371662013-12-20T14:00:55.062-05:002013-12-20T14:00:55.062-05:00Enjoy the Christmas celebration with your sister.
...Enjoy the Christmas celebration with your sister.<br /><br />And thank you for a great example of "Show Versus Tell Too Much Too Soon."Michael G-Ghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07947421844294471304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-50039329746163163002013-12-20T13:42:43.905-05:002013-12-20T13:42:43.905-05:00That was a fantastic example and clarified a LOT f...That was a fantastic example and clarified a LOT for me. 'Too much telling, not enough showing' has always been a rock in my shoe- more so when I didn't have a lovely side by side example and solution as you have so graciously given me. THANK YOU.zolosolohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15330948524013339225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86922404966407583502013-12-20T13:39:52.075-05:002013-12-20T13:39:52.075-05:00Great example.
Have a great time with your sister...Great example.<br /><br />Have a great time with your sister. Merry Christmas. Eliza Tiltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00765731038856226730noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-3061638222951547502013-12-20T12:30:08.098-05:002013-12-20T12:30:08.098-05:00Actually, I liked the first example. A little rush...Actually, I liked the first example. A little rushed, true, but all around not bad. The second example, although more in the moment, is less interesting. If I picked up the first book (if I were the type to read fantasy) and then the second, I'd probably go with the first. <br /><br />Telling, like all the other 'no-no's, is okay if it's done well. Brilliant voice, the perfect word choices, and you can tell all you want. It will be a gripping story anyway. <br /><br />Enjoy the holiday, how great you'll be able to spend it with your sister! Here's to peacefulness and sparkle. Emmanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82781777315560579922013-12-20T11:56:48.805-05:002013-12-20T11:56:48.805-05:00It's true-and it's hard. It takes a lot of...It's true-and it's hard. It takes a lot of practice to KNOW what the reader needs to know first off. We think they need all of it, and for me it's hard to find the simple pieces they do need. I need a template for every book!<br />BTW-This is really a fantastic sample of what not do and what to do. Really nice. I'm saving it. Happy Holiday's authoress. Enjoy special time with your sister after all these years.shelleynoreply@blogger.com