tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post8341629677143363600..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: February Secret Agent #43Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-87746949256966933602012-02-19T13:21:43.156-05:002012-02-19T13:21:43.156-05:00You’ve done a great job with the mood and setting ...You’ve done a great job with the mood and setting and there are some fantastic, creepy lines in here. I think you could tighten and get to a scene faster. We are just beginning to see the main character. (If he is the main character.)<br /><br />It doesn’t feel YA at all though.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-27556977991404863332012-02-18T01:00:05.173-05:002012-02-18T01:00:05.173-05:00I found this interesting on one level, but also fe...I found this interesting on one level, but also felt a little lost in all the detail on the religious stuff. Does that play a significant role in the story? Your descriptions are nice, but it's probably too much for me if the whole story goes that way.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04319768362229583026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-50939200630292661532012-02-17T23:39:36.595-05:002012-02-17T23:39:36.595-05:00I found the opening compelling, and my quibble is,...I found the opening compelling, and my quibble is, as pointed out by other commentors, that the voice did not quite have a YA ring to it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28934028776884182882012-02-16T17:32:16.815-05:002012-02-16T17:32:16.815-05:00I like where this is going. Though I would be care...I like where this is going. Though I would be careful not to lead too heavily with description. That said, I'm still hooked.Lisa B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11499350159201423248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-74599434056885151722012-02-15T20:52:15.500-05:002012-02-15T20:52:15.500-05:00Great description in your paragraphs--super creepy...Great description in your paragraphs--super creepy! I kind of get a more adult voice from this, so I am guessing it's older YA (17/18)?Alleged Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04869021184116123477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40935630321605112412012-02-15T14:05:55.895-05:002012-02-15T14:05:55.895-05:00Eerie, creep, dark. I'm really digging it. The...Eerie, creep, dark. I'm really digging it. There were some really great lines in there: <br /><br />-enough to bathe a child or drown one depending on your intent.<br />-There were many ways to kill a man. And only one way to kill a soul.<br /><br />It needs a little tightening and polish, but the foundation is intriguing.I'd read more.Kelly Metzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16393486174448300525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5360901680416242772012-02-15T13:47:50.870-05:002012-02-15T13:47:50.870-05:00Love the voice and dark description.
There are s...Love the voice and dark description. <br /><br />There are so many lines that draw me in here:<br />"There were many ways to kill a man. And only one way to kill a soul."<br />"...unable to remember his true name."<br /><br />Who is this spooky character? Totally hooked. =)Anita Saxenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12444339735834716979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82660295618686501062012-02-15T12:43:14.235-05:002012-02-15T12:43:14.235-05:00WOW! This is enthralling and seriously creepy (in ...WOW! This is enthralling and seriously creepy (in an awesome way). I love how your descriptions feed the story instead of being static. Goosebumps. Seriously.Sharonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17311797688566799767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2242581025647682162012-02-15T11:53:14.876-05:002012-02-15T11:53:14.876-05:00Hooked. The atmosphere is great, and the fact that...Hooked. The atmosphere is great, and the fact that the narration seems to come from the Intruder even if it isn't in first person is very well done.Vividhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16003429030895750901noreply@blogger.com