tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post835905018607369203..comments2024-03-29T05:51:50.813-04:00Comments on Authoress: February Secret Agent #12Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9550208351640277862012-02-20T08:56:37.696-05:002012-02-20T08:56:37.696-05:00Wow! You've grabbed me. The indifference of th...Wow! You've grabbed me. The indifference of the narrator when she finds her father, apparently dead, immediately brings questions to mind. The whole scene is interesting and her reaction to the smell is nicely done in a 'delicate' manner.<br /><br />While I haven't read a lot of Adult Literary, this has more of a feeling of paranormal or mystery than Literary.<br /><br />I'd definitely read more!<br /><br />Just a quick afterthought- you might try this scene from a 1st Person POV and see if it is more powerful/ more personal- it almost seems like that anyway.SMKraftynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9410828318296823012012-02-18T13:36:47.518-05:002012-02-18T13:36:47.518-05:00Very interesting and creepy. I wish I could read m...Very interesting and creepy. I wish I could read more!Carmenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01502915116446772081noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61921959259361807952012-02-18T09:14:25.397-05:002012-02-18T09:14:25.397-05:00Creepy! So many interesting questions here. How ma...Creepy! So many interesting questions here. How many times has he done this before? Does he die each time? Is this a paranormal book? <br /><br />You’ve done a good job grabbing my attention.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14089834767370417682012-02-18T00:18:14.050-05:002012-02-18T00:18:14.050-05:00No prob! Thanks for the explanation.
I love the f...No prob! Thanks for the explanation. <br />I love the flavor here then! No worries, girl. We only want to help. :)Alleged Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04869021184116123477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-6051044900346384492012-02-17T17:35:12.714-05:002012-02-17T17:35:12.714-05:00This is my excerpt. Hope it's OK to comment on...This is my excerpt. Hope it's OK to comment on comments. I just wanted to add that a "water witch" is a water dowser or diviner. I just liked the term better.<br /> I've had a hard time getting the system to "take" my note, so I sure hope this is the only time it's posted!Georgia Girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05596379202196822294noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-34846949526230193482012-02-17T12:07:14.210-05:002012-02-17T12:07:14.210-05:00I really liked it, good imagery. The "water w...I really liked it, good imagery. The "water witch" part confused me too.Amynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5093754110974230742012-02-16T10:03:26.684-05:002012-02-16T10:03:26.684-05:00Intriguing and creepy...I would definitely keep re...Intriguing and creepy...I would definitely keep reading. The opening sentence feels awkward and perhaps too ambiguous with the pronouns and "this time by accident". Perhaps rework the first sentence or dive right into her checking the traps. I also wondered about the water witch, but it made me want to keep reading.<br /><br />I love the eerie description of Pa. Good luck with this!Celestahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08445617947839984701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-87264203485893526972012-02-16T07:00:51.512-05:002012-02-16T07:00:51.512-05:00Water witch I'd say is used for Pa. I'm no...Water witch I'd say is used for Pa. I'm not sure what it is, either, but it's clear to me that he is - was - the water witch. <br /><br />Great descriptions and a really interesting start. I'd read on.JeffOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07947660745120963286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33360423903939414632012-02-15T21:59:22.384-05:002012-02-15T21:59:22.384-05:00Water witch confused me.I didn't get the meani...Water witch confused me.I didn't get the meaning. It also made me think paranormal and I thought she was referring to her dad but witch is female. But other than that, it all worked well- great descriptions though the eerie description of her dad also gave me a paranormal feel.sbjameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06986950185596914217noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78298533995835218432012-02-15T19:39:16.656-05:002012-02-15T19:39:16.656-05:00This is good! I do want to know what a "water...This is good! I do want to know what a "water witch" is because the term makes me think more adult paranormal that literary.Alleged Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04869021184116123477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-3384868486558089372012-02-15T10:58:45.716-05:002012-02-15T10:58:45.716-05:00Sent shivers down my spine. Amazing job!Sent shivers down my spine. Amazing job!Vividhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16003429030895750901noreply@blogger.com