tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post9012700716452691898..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: 37 Secret AgentAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60865165953505675552009-08-21T20:48:37.339-04:002009-08-21T20:48:37.339-04:00Ok, I've read your entry a long time ago, mayb...Ok, I've read your entry a long time ago, maybe a half a year ago. I still love it. Honestly, I would love to read this novel!Sarah Erberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15364100717989701019noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-46555883577870340842009-08-21T20:42:04.676-04:002009-08-21T20:42:04.676-04:00Hooked! :) Not sure if you need to start with the ...Hooked! :) Not sure if you need to start with the woman...the query should reflect enough of your story to show that the plot it there.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-67487966852168602372009-08-21T19:44:19.042-04:002009-08-21T19:44:19.042-04:00I liked the opening! Satan made me giggle.I liked the opening! Satan made me giggle.Kelsey (Dominique) Ridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10646757546422013401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-57904343289338160012009-08-21T11:18:16.026-04:002009-08-21T11:18:16.026-04:00Thanks for all your helpful comments, everyone! Y&...Thanks for all your helpful comments, everyone! Y'all are making me rethink my opening chapter. Believe it or not, it's a love story that alternates between the POV of Satan and the woman he falls (rises?) for. Based upon so many "I liked this, but" comments, I might rearrange to open with the woman's POV.<br /><br />Thanks again!The author of this manuscriptnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8140762757708679432009-08-21T08:36:59.964-04:002009-08-21T08:36:59.964-04:00This is very clever and the writing strong and cle...This is very clever and the writing strong and clear, but it's not for me. I like to relate to the mc, and in this case I related more to his victim. I could see this working for a specific type of reader (and agent) though.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2861199530837035342009-08-21T03:34:43.044-04:002009-08-21T03:34:43.044-04:00I was laughing at this. I'm hooked.I was laughing at this. I'm hooked.Bronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13029635239132926178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54494547051537629752009-08-20T22:38:12.993-04:002009-08-20T22:38:12.993-04:00Meg, your line about the screenplay occurred to me...Meg, your line about the screenplay occurred to me too. I keep seeing Hellboy as Satan. loleliza dolittlenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36632183585757921602009-08-20T15:55:07.815-04:002009-08-20T15:55:07.815-04:00I actually found myself laughing out loud with thi...I actually found myself laughing out loud with this one. However, I can't help but wonder with some of the other commenters if Satan is just too, well, silly. Could he be a little crazy, too? I mean, he's got to be insane by now, don't you think...if he wasn't already.Krista Van Dolzerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08830193414560232842noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-43367206124601529342009-08-20T08:19:50.024-04:002009-08-20T08:19:50.024-04:00I can't quite say I'm hooked. It's an...I can't quite say I'm hooked. It's an interesting concept and I liked the third para with the minted immortal, but Satan to me came off like a big kid just throwing a tantrum with the pouting and giggling and the last line. Also and this is a little thing but the caps made me wince. I assusme it's supposed to be a comedy urban fantasy? At least I get that from those two lines. I don't know... I'm sorry but it's just not for me.Alexia Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07417042858758187599noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12635613061009474302009-08-20T02:14:54.501-04:002009-08-20T02:14:54.501-04:00I liked the first line...great imagry.I liked the first line...great imagry.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89654355120766364612009-08-20T00:27:49.580-04:002009-08-20T00:27:49.580-04:00Heh. This one has some great humor, but it's n...Heh. This one has some great humor, but it's not for me. I just can't get behind Satan as a protag. It's not you. It's me.Jodi Meadowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11796496740054225283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29536734675443964722009-08-19T22:05:25.162-04:002009-08-19T22:05:25.162-04:00Definitely amused, and though usually this would b...Definitely amused, and though usually this would be my kind of thing, something just didn't "click" with me to make me love it and say I'm hooked. I'd read on for a bit, definitely, and depending on the jacket copy, I might pick it up.Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-4401761506821694682009-08-19T21:15:42.317-04:002009-08-19T21:15:42.317-04:00Can we see this as a screen play? LOL Enjoyed. ...Can we see this as a screen play? LOL Enjoyed. Not hooked yet, but I liked it.Meghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01806075459880162155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78474650970549764372009-08-19T20:24:56.414-04:002009-08-19T20:24:56.414-04:00You need to show what Satan is pouting about. Why...You need to show what Satan is pouting about. Why is this moment different from any other?Marilynn Byerlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16720129999636676998noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69705090424098016532009-08-19T19:25:10.300-04:002009-08-19T19:25:10.300-04:00Smart, funny writing, but as someone said above, t...Smart, funny writing, but as someone said above, this is the cartoon view of Hell and is not original. I've also seen writing like this that moves into erotica/S&M. I would probably look at the next page, but this is not my type of story.<br /><br />Good luck!Callienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-67865763333998330222009-08-19T17:23:21.189-04:002009-08-19T17:23:21.189-04:00LOVE the humor and voice! Definitely hooked!LOVE the humor and voice! Definitely hooked!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-72020563031431081632009-08-19T17:22:56.344-04:002009-08-19T17:22:56.344-04:00Hooked! The humor here is great, and I'm inter...Hooked! The humor here is great, and I'm interested in where this is going. I would read on.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07615258719942916382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55612987997358724732009-08-19T16:10:34.612-04:002009-08-19T16:10:34.612-04:00This isn't my type of story - I don't like...This isn't my type of story - I don't like this much humor. Guess I like my Satan a bit darker (yikes! Satan giggling) so no, I wouldn't read on. However, I think it's great that so many enjoyed.CassieKnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17677224919458290002009-08-19T15:39:06.081-04:002009-08-19T15:39:06.081-04:00Not interested, though I did enjoy the humor. It f...Not interested, though I did enjoy the humor. It felt a little cliche and over the top- this is how hell is depicted in cartoons all the time; it didn't really feel original.Valerie Gearyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17165554338889917253noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-87545145171489300772009-08-19T13:49:43.673-04:002009-08-19T13:49:43.673-04:00Amused. I've seen this before. As then - this ...Amused. I've seen this before. As then - this isn't my thing, but I do appreciate the sardonic humor at least.Cate Kariaxihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01812494549402252779noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-70660484396474591372009-08-19T13:42:50.227-04:002009-08-19T13:42:50.227-04:00I think this is funny. I love first line, tells me...I think this is funny. I love first line, tells me it's going to be tongue in cheek.<br /><br />Speaking of cheeks, though, I stumbled on that word in the first paragraph. Who's cheek is the bat gouging? Who's down there?<br /><br />There's a unique voice here and good use of humor.Lisa Katzenbergerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03541571187216239983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51580918451230632502009-08-19T13:37:16.013-04:002009-08-19T13:37:16.013-04:00very clever..I'm definitely hooked!very clever..I'm definitely hooked!sue laybournhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14549268075528924978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83755254384132824082009-08-19T13:17:54.746-04:002009-08-19T13:17:54.746-04:00I loved the first line, and laughed at the bad spe...I loved the first line, and laughed at the bad spelling sign. I'm hooked!Deborah Blakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04032614187237072683noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-13623615287582606692009-08-19T13:14:59.688-04:002009-08-19T13:14:59.688-04:00Okay, so I was already laughing at: Satan pouted-L...Okay, so I was already laughing at: Satan pouted-LOL. This seems really interesting. I'd definitely read on to see where it goes.Karen Denisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15154015690643682525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33928409543960125702009-08-19T12:52:06.451-04:002009-08-19T12:52:06.451-04:00Interesting. I like the voice and the pace. I thin...Interesting. I like the voice and the pace. I think a little bit more sensory description could add even more.<br /><br />I'm hooked. Thanks for sharing. :)pj schnyderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06770556738469006567noreply@blogger.com