tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post9074241638210383498..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: 6 Drop The Needle TENSIONAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55695933168304191772008-10-30T19:49:00.000-04:002008-10-30T19:49:00.000-04:00I thought this was great. I felt the tension. Woul...I thought this was great. I felt the tension. Would she stay with him and die or wake up.<BR/><BR/>I thought it was quite sad and very real. If you've lost someone you know how she feels.<BR/><BR/>Good job. Loved it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216407428320615449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36669207016465541062008-10-29T21:51:00.000-04:002008-10-29T21:51:00.000-04:00I really like the concept of the story. Can't say...I really like the concept of the story. Can't say I've read anything quite like that.<BR/><BR/>This section is good, but way heavy on the drama, which nearly put me in mind of a soap opera!<BR/><BR/>Also, not a huge fan of: <I> "you appeared to me–"</I>LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12861773745853950832008-10-29T21:22:00.000-04:002008-10-29T21:22:00.000-04:00Love this! I'd say what's going on here is tension...Love this! I'd say what's going on here is tension--maybe not the typical kind, but tension nonetheless. I totally want to read more!Meradeth Houstonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06741790047121063893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78699891242559044682008-10-29T20:29:00.000-04:002008-10-29T20:29:00.000-04:00I'm not sure about tension, but I definitely felt ...I'm not sure about tension, but I definitely felt sadness and a longing ...good story idea.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25748979534301801992008-10-29T18:55:00.000-04:002008-10-29T18:55:00.000-04:00mary -- you cried?? my day is brightened!(only wri...mary -- you cried?? my day is brightened!<BR/><BR/>(only writers are able to say the above and not get slapped)<BR/><BR/>thanks!!sraaschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02960364630183418763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25820894428500454112008-10-29T18:12:00.000-04:002008-10-29T18:12:00.000-04:00Wow. I actually cried, and this is only an excerpt...Wow. I actually cried, and this is only an excerpt. I think it does have tension - is he fully gone, will she see him again, will she be able to move on? Lots of story questions.feywriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17224558691840388691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31299630688703114732008-10-29T16:29:00.000-04:002008-10-29T16:29:00.000-04:00I don't know about tension, but I did feel sadness...I don't know about tension, but I did feel sadness. Tension is usually built on the presumption of a future event. I didn't get that in this short excerpt, but it's likely somewhere in the pages that come before.Karen Duvallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01839711547501582977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83194273761921590912008-10-29T14:40:00.000-04:002008-10-29T14:40:00.000-04:00Excellent tension here. Not my kind of story, but ...Excellent tension here. Not my kind of story, but this scene is interesting.Luc2https://www.blogger.com/profile/01069557738924277313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-91352294955406946002008-10-29T12:18:00.000-04:002008-10-29T12:18:00.000-04:00This hooked me. I felt the tension and also the p...This hooked me. I felt the tension and also the pain of separation at the end of the excerpt. I'm certain the tension is ever more palpable if you've read the story from the beginning!Authoresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-10496284781726990872008-10-29T12:11:00.000-04:002008-10-29T12:11:00.000-04:00Oh, thanks, sissy! You're right about that "anyway...Oh, thanks, sissy! You're right about that "anyway". Sneaky little words get away from me sometimes.sraaschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02960364630183418763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-74362061140091772022008-10-29T11:48:00.000-04:002008-10-29T11:48:00.000-04:00Interesting concept. There is definite tension he...Interesting concept. There is definite tension here - I wish we had more than 250 words to work with!<BR/><BR/>Just one note - I think your "anyway" at the end should be two separate words.Sissyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06307338341018381050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-26057696100684201392008-10-29T10:38:00.000-04:002008-10-29T10:38:00.000-04:00Interesting. I'd like to read more :o)Interesting. I'd like to read more :o)Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.com