tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post9081596238223140765..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: 153 Romantic Environmental SuspenseAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11183704105633077102010-03-28T12:11:41.943-04:002010-03-28T12:11:41.943-04:00Not bad. I'd keep reading. I don't know i...Not bad. I'd keep reading. I don't know if I'm hooked-hooked yet, but you've got some of my attention.Kelsey (Dominique) Ridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10646757546422013401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55784475865213412962010-03-27T20:09:13.469-04:002010-03-27T20:09:13.469-04:00LOVED the first line, but had to wonder how it fit...LOVED the first line, but had to wonder how it fitted with the second.Cheryl Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-72713317851204518532010-03-26T21:57:20.120-04:002010-03-26T21:57:20.120-04:00I liked the first line, but there was a disconnect...I liked the first line, but there was a disconnect between that and the second line. Perhaps the first line could be Miller's thoughts as she turns off the car?Bronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13029635239132926178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9171404982458234122010-03-26T15:51:38.904-04:002010-03-26T15:51:38.904-04:00Hrm. Almost hooked. The opening line is iffy for m...Hrm. Almost hooked. The opening line is iffy for me, though I like "ruin a spring morning" (it makes it fresher) so it would depend on how the rest of the scene unfolds.Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88584488537738546642010-03-26T13:36:50.986-04:002010-03-26T13:36:50.986-04:00Your first line is fantastic. The second like cou...Your first line is fantastic. The second like could be smoothed out. If we're in Miller's POV, then lose her last name. I don't run around thinking of myself as Lucy Woodhull. "Miller twisted off the ignition of her Lexus and sagged against the seat." reads more smoothly to me. Romantic Environmental Suspense is not a genre - romantic suspense is. In your query you can give it the environmental element.Lucy Woodhullhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10772331811727392601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40558999415870129612010-03-26T12:30:48.703-04:002010-03-26T12:30:48.703-04:00Maybe. I'd like to know more about the genre f...Maybe. I'd like to know more about the genre for sure. The 2 sentences seem unrelated. Is the stench in her car?Susan X Bradleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03933142677328722384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51217816870586080872010-03-26T07:33:20.248-04:002010-03-26T07:33:20.248-04:00Maybe hooked, but what is Romantic Environmental S...Maybe hooked, but what is Romantic Environmental Suspense? Second line is not so strong, might bear rethinking.Irishttp://www.irisharper.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-79351877955397591192010-03-26T05:56:19.239-04:002010-03-26T05:56:19.239-04:00Possibly hooked.Possibly hooked.Jodi Meadowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11796496740054225283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-67635684303185872842010-03-26T05:03:36.586-04:002010-03-26T05:03:36.586-04:00Intrigued. I'd read more.Intrigued. I'd read more.Katharina Gerlachhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00223722392075669331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2744362248677933642010-03-25T21:14:07.025-04:002010-03-25T21:14:07.025-04:00I like the first line, but the second seems comple...I like the first line, but the second seems completely unrelated. Does she have a dead body in the car or what?Vicki Rochohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07381089434014961076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2447691309663448592010-03-25T20:33:00.433-04:002010-03-25T20:33:00.433-04:00hookedhookedKristi Faithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17527544253341529009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36747929228633024682010-03-25T19:13:30.679-04:002010-03-25T19:13:30.679-04:00Liked the first line. Don't like her name or ...Liked the first line. Don't like her name or fancy carMeghan S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12447149254455271636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-44938034626304586612010-03-25T19:13:02.404-04:002010-03-25T19:13:02.404-04:00More intrigued by the genre than the line...still ...More intrigued by the genre than the line...still probably give it a few pages, though.Amyspitznoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-26434908168595450782010-03-25T18:41:15.626-04:002010-03-25T18:41:15.626-04:00Liked the first line -- twisting off the ignition ...Liked the first line -- twisting off the ignition struck me oddly, though.Joshua McCunehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17367262185912463258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-700586178961515142010-03-25T18:13:09.679-04:002010-03-25T18:13:09.679-04:00Hooked. Good start. Just curious, what is romantic...Hooked. Good start. Just curious, what is romantic environmental suspense?Portiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13435815819572442582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41147017267762359712010-03-25T17:13:38.409-04:002010-03-25T17:13:38.409-04:00Tentatively hooked... :)
I like the first line e...Tentatively hooked... :) <br /><br />I like the first line especially.Cate Kariaxihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01812494549402252779noreply@blogger.com