tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post908345560257554757..comments2024-03-19T03:20:39.801-04:00Comments on Authoress: Drop The Needle 20Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38564639460182416502008-07-31T16:19:00.000-04:002008-07-31T16:19:00.000-04:00From the excerpt, I couldn't tell that this was an...From the excerpt, I couldn't tell that this was an SC. Her POV dominates the section and I don't see her interact with anyone else.<BR/><BR/>That said, now that I know she's a POV character at some point in the story, I think you've drawn her well enough that when we get her POV, I'll have enough info to slide effortlessly into that section. Good work. <BR/><BR/>KizmetAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-56423276168972674032008-07-31T14:52:00.000-04:002008-07-31T14:52:00.000-04:00Samantha is your SC? That's what I got, anyway. It...Samantha is your SC? That's what I got, anyway. It's obvious that she hates her job. :)Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16497180479949061660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17982989306458915032008-07-31T14:27:00.000-04:002008-07-31T14:27:00.000-04:00I was thinking that Samantha must be the SC, since...I was thinking that Samantha must be the SC, since the whole scene was about her. If so, she seems very realistic. I love the line about there only being two agents and she still has to ask how to direct the call. That was awesome.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37986342602723560642008-07-31T08:40:00.000-04:002008-07-31T08:40:00.000-04:00Wow. Samantha comes across loud and clear. (Yes, I...Wow. Samantha comes across loud and clear. (Yes, I cheated: I read your explanation of multiple viewpoints.) I like her, and she seems very well-drawn to me. :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51726631114101992832008-07-30T19:29:00.000-04:002008-07-30T19:29:00.000-04:00Thanks everyone for your comments! Yes, this is a...Thanks everyone for your comments! Yes, this is a pov shifting story, so Samantha is the SC. I appreciate all your thoughts so much!Victorinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06052077366367623323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69646410206594840642008-07-30T17:24:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:24:00.000-04:00All I see is the recptionist and I'm not sure if s...All I see is the recptionist and I'm not sure if she's the MC or not. None of the other characters moved out from the background. Sorry.Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-35898963780929182292008-07-30T15:44:00.000-04:002008-07-30T15:44:00.000-04:00If I hadn't looked through the comments of people ...If I hadn't looked through the comments of people who know your characters, I wouldn't have been able to tell that Samantha is an SC. From this scene, she reads like an MC -- which would be a good thing. She felt rushed and irritated. I like her voice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-63907328792643591902008-07-30T15:29:00.000-04:002008-07-30T15:29:00.000-04:00First off- I LOVE Samantha's voice. It's sassy an...First off- I LOVE Samantha's voice. It's sassy and sarcastic and fresh. However, I don't think Paul counts as a SC in this scene, as he doesn't interact with Samantha directly, nor would I say Courtney is a full SC yet since we only get her for the last two lines of the section. Right now, with only two lines to judge from. there's nothing unique about her.LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-81082383855096961792008-07-30T14:44:00.000-04:002008-07-30T14:44:00.000-04:00I kno this piece quite well, so I can say no-one i...I kno this piece quite well, so I can say no-one in this scene is an MC. All SC, and quite well portrayed, IMO.Luc2https://www.blogger.com/profile/01069557738924277313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-4590297349518028062008-07-30T14:13:00.000-04:002008-07-30T14:13:00.000-04:00I'm confused about who the secondary character is ...I'm confused about who the secondary character is after having read the other posts so it's a bit hard to comment. Paul is a realistic boss, but one-dimensional here. Samantha seems like a MC so is well rounded.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-35156127510145708262008-07-30T13:47:00.000-04:002008-07-30T13:47:00.000-04:00Samantha is not what she seems...She is developed ...Samantha is not what she seems...<BR/><BR/>She is developed enough to be your MC (visible and can hear her), and she technically is the only character here except for Courtney (whose voice is described and phone-dialogue worded well enough that I can hear her).<BR/><BR/>But I do know she is the SC. <BR/><BR/>So nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84661556963780863832008-07-30T13:08:00.000-04:002008-07-30T13:08:00.000-04:00Hmm. There only seems to be one char in here so I'...Hmm. There only seems to be one char in here so I'm assuming Samantha is the secondary character in a POV switching story? I could really feel her angst for her job. I think she comes out well in this piece.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-81531888567214538682008-07-30T11:40:00.000-04:002008-07-30T11:40:00.000-04:00I think the secondary character is Paul...he seems...I think the secondary character is Paul...he seems like a slavedriver, leaving everything for Samantha. He also seems very full of himself. I don't like him, but as a character he is real.Nayuleskahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08693548526829437580noreply@blogger.com