tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post976307705629448513..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Drop The Needle #5Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64377574552426366272008-09-12T19:43:00.000-04:002008-09-12T19:43:00.000-04:00Panic. I like your dialogue - it shows first his a...Panic. <BR/><BR/>I like your dialogue - it shows first his anxiety and then his full blow panic when Maggie (ship or ship robot?) momentarily zonks out. <BR/><BR/>I think the setting was a little fuzzy or confusing, but I blame that on the 250 select words. And I think you repeated his name too much. But over all this looks good.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-24309789676628309932008-09-12T14:16:00.000-04:002008-09-12T14:16:00.000-04:00Well..... Maggie is....no. You have to wait.Sorry ...Well..... Maggie is....no. You have to wait.<BR/><BR/>Sorry %-)Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-13838322529384859402008-09-12T13:55:00.000-04:002008-09-12T13:55:00.000-04:00Frustration and desperation more than anything els...Frustration and desperation more than anything else. We have to wait until book 2 to find out what happens to Maggie?! <BR/><BR/>Hooked, line and sinker.feywriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17224558691840388691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86351859688820154992008-09-11T20:39:00.000-04:002008-09-11T20:39:00.000-04:00Not panic so much as utter disbelief at what Maggi...Not panic so much as utter disbelief at what Maggie is doing :D<BR/><BR/>His cerebrality contradicts panic - Ice never panics, dear ;) - but the disbelief, the slight sense of fear are all there :)Amy Laurenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16782528327499574711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84956245036679368682008-09-11T18:34:00.000-04:002008-09-11T18:34:00.000-04:00I think it's fear/panic, but the dialogue which su...I think it's fear/panic, but the dialogue which supports that doesn't seem to support the inner thoughts at the end of the section.LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21885425895507475282008-09-11T18:32:00.000-04:002008-09-11T18:32:00.000-04:00I got the panic and fear. But I thought we were on...I got the panic and fear. But I thought we were only supposed to display one emotion.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23839595158317624842008-09-11T17:16:00.000-04:002008-09-11T17:16:00.000-04:00Panic and frustration came thru to me. Yelling her...Panic and frustration came thru to me. Yelling her name and slamming the console. I'm not sure that I sensed loss yet tho. Not being sure of the relationship, he might have just been mad that she left him alone to do whatever job needed done. <BR/>I'd read on. The story caught my attention.queenofmeanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16488271353775981931noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47730618393277762682008-09-11T16:17:00.000-04:002008-09-11T16:17:00.000-04:00Panic and fear. It was a little hard to get over t...Panic and fear. It was a little hard to get over the technical dialogue and stuff but I got it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17982957140641880342008-09-11T13:14:00.000-04:002008-09-11T13:14:00.000-04:00Yes, I feel it, between the pounding and his refus...Yes, I feel it, between the pounding and his refusal to accept what is going on. The one part that took me out of it was when he said that death was outside of the acceptable parameters of the mission - that seems very cerebral.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89139192530650465062008-09-11T12:20:00.000-04:002008-09-11T12:20:00.000-04:00hehe. *waves to friend*I got the feel of desperati...hehe. *waves to friend*<BR/>I got the feel of desperation and frustration. :)<BR/>Good job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-70244381741117662042008-09-11T12:11:00.000-04:002008-09-11T12:11:00.000-04:00Authoress.... read book 2 to find out...Authoress.... read book 2 to find out...Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37948223999319045222008-09-11T11:33:00.000-04:002008-09-11T11:33:00.000-04:00It took me a few sentences to capture the scene, b...It took me a few sentences to capture the scene, but once I did, I totally got the fear.Christina Graham Parkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04055656554692170817noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69997344173341103842008-09-11T11:03:00.000-04:002008-09-11T11:03:00.000-04:00There's the telling bit about desperation. He seem...There's the telling bit about desperation. He seems to lose control, banging everything in frustration. <BR/><BR/>Worked for me. I'd read on.Luc2https://www.blogger.com/profile/01069557738924277313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60365742677038021432008-09-11T11:02:00.000-04:002008-09-11T11:02:00.000-04:00Yes, I felt it.I HATE scenes like this in movies b...Yes, I felt it.<BR/><BR/>I HATE scenes like this in movies because they make me so tense. LOL So if I'm "seeing" a movie scene when I'm reading, that's a good bet that there's tension, good pacing in the scene.<BR/><BR/>What happened to Maggie??? (See, I'm tense! :D)Authoresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.com