tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post1108707106360152831..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: Grab My Heart #30Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51793219265870334082018-07-18T22:56:05.848-04:002018-07-18T22:56:05.848-04:00Thank you both for your notes! It's most appre...Thank you both for your notes! It's most appreciated. :)ETSmithhttps://twitter.com/eltsmithnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-63321090782213850472018-07-18T17:46:35.081-04:002018-07-18T17:46:35.081-04:00I like this perspective and would like a bit more ...I like this perspective and would like a bit more set up, like where they are first (ie: a dusty marketplace) and then the call to watch out for witches. I got hung up on 'Taking them into their own hands' where I thought you meant the sheriff and his posse, then was confused when she pulls Gwenifer close- only because then it felt like she had her hands full. If the action occurred without the exposition as to why, then I think the tension would be more immediate when she and her daughter (I'm assuming) faint, creating more mystery around your CC and her true identity.Selkienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32822266024964960842018-07-18T15:45:36.844-04:002018-07-18T15:45:36.844-04:00I am intrigued by this but a little confused in yo...I am intrigued by this but a little confused in your pitch. She doesn't get what she wants...but it sounds like the Sheriffs are in fact going to get what's coming to them? Is it her who has forgotten the old wives' tale? In such a short pitch, I would stay focused on your main character. In the piece itself, I love the fainting moment. The clothing--the bonnets and wool dresses--put me in this time and place. I am very curious if the accused, in this case, is really a witch, and how the main character feels about that either way. I am also curious about how the sheriff and his men are going to handle a witch the sailors are so afraid of. All details I hope will be revealed in the coming pages! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15931930938362271431noreply@blogger.com