tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post1410780225872198335..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Drop The Needle 25Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-1787508581597077822008-07-31T17:38:00.000-04:002008-07-31T17:38:00.000-04:00Miss Sue is kind of cliched, but ya know, in compa...Miss Sue is kind of cliched, but ya know, in comparison to a boy who's obviously got some issues, a bit of normal is working for me.<BR/><BR/>I liked the hair description best. Normally, that's not something I'd pick up on, and I wondered if it was significant that the mc did.<BR/><BR/>Nice.<BR/><BR/>KizmetAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21788337481676787092008-07-31T15:11:00.000-04:002008-07-31T15:11:00.000-04:00Miss Sue reminds me of my highschool librarian. Th...Miss Sue reminds me of my highschool librarian. The characterisation is very fitting.Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16497180479949061660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-67000045404371860582008-07-31T14:15:00.000-04:002008-07-31T14:15:00.000-04:00I think Miss Sue is the SC. I thought she was a bi...I think Miss Sue is the SC. I thought she was a bit stereotypical of a librarian (they're not all like that, you know : ) and I was a little confused about the POV with this sentence: "She knew that Joey didn’t frequent the library, and certainly never visited for pleasure." Other than that, it was good. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-35306148956610369092008-07-31T07:52:00.000-04:002008-07-31T07:52:00.000-04:00I couldn't work out which was the SC because bits ...I couldn't work out which was the SC because bits of the scene seemed to be in each of their viewpoints. I didn't get too much of a read on either - Joey seemed nervous and Miss Sue seemed like a fairly typical librarian.Esther.Jadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11552124058522436295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21775707956915527302008-07-30T22:19:00.000-04:002008-07-30T22:19:00.000-04:00Miss Sue is obviously the SC. But I was a little ...Miss Sue is obviously the SC. But I was a little confused. She sounded elderly, but she had an energy about her, always working, so I found that a little contradictory. There was perhaps a little too much description of her as well, but I was left wondering why the MC was there to see her...Great!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-38099391624674713482008-07-30T20:31:00.000-04:002008-07-30T20:31:00.000-04:00I think Miss Sue is a sweet character, and I love ...I think Miss Sue is a sweet character, and I love the part about her mumbling to herself. Very nice. :-)Victorinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06052077366367623323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53655085516508689912008-07-30T19:46:00.000-04:002008-07-30T19:46:00.000-04:00Aw.... What a sweet little old librarian. Yes, she...Aw.... What a sweet little old librarian. Yes, she's a bit cliche, but sometimes that can work for a writer who plays her cards right. :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31645995556076397302008-07-30T17:17:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:17:00.000-04:00Good description, and very apporpriate for the tar...Good description, and very apporpriate for the target age group. I think you nailed this.Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-9148015459118034912008-07-30T16:50:00.000-04:002008-07-30T16:50:00.000-04:00I think Miss Sue is supposed to be the SC, but sev...I think Miss Sue is supposed to be the SC, but several of the paragraphs seem to be too much in her viewpoint. I do think she seems kind and patient, if not a little stereotypical of a librarian.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-69160502842429649392008-07-30T15:59:00.000-04:002008-07-30T15:59:00.000-04:00Ditto on Blodwyn's comments about Miss Sue being a...Ditto on Blodwyn's comments about Miss Sue being a cliched librarian. Her personality (evidenced by her dialogue) felt the same way to, IMHO.LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21856340130618825872008-07-30T15:07:00.000-04:002008-07-30T15:07:00.000-04:00Sorry, but i couldn't get past the "shrugged his s...Sorry, but i couldn't get past the "shrugged his shoulders" bit, and the abundance of adverbs.Luc2https://www.blogger.com/profile/01069557738924277313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40501220081190310812008-07-30T14:56:00.000-04:002008-07-30T14:56:00.000-04:00Good job. It does appear that Miss Sue does have ...Good job. It does appear that Miss Sue does have typical librarian traits... maybe you could make her wear fishnet stockings.. just joking. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-77951636665312510232008-07-30T14:26:00.000-04:002008-07-30T14:26:00.000-04:00I get a sense of who Miss Sue is from the paragrap...I get a sense of who Miss Sue is from the paragraph - typical librarian - although I find that between the half-glasses and the bun she's a little stereotypical.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-34880770775536979442008-07-30T13:27:00.000-04:002008-07-30T13:27:00.000-04:00I like Miss Sue. She seems real and I can clearly ...I like Miss Sue. She seems real and I can clearly imagine her. Her personality comes out well in this scene: hard-working and nice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54133659698332953242008-07-30T12:59:00.000-04:002008-07-30T12:59:00.000-04:00Miss Sue is you SC. Heh. She sounds like the littl...Miss Sue is you SC. <BR/><BR/>Heh. She sounds like the little old lady in the children's section of my library. This came to mind immediately - or at the second paragraph. <BR/><BR/>So I read on and see I was right on the money, and so were you. Nice job. I can see this lady.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41512975169517123002008-07-30T11:47:00.000-04:002008-07-30T11:47:00.000-04:00I think its Miss Sue, and she's very real :)I think its Miss Sue, and she's very real :)Nayuleskahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08693548526829437580noreply@blogger.com