tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post1967396112005923389..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: F2S 65Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17609876684494579282008-12-10T00:19:00.000-05:002008-12-10T00:19:00.000-05:00Ah, *adores*! :)Ah, *adores*! :)Amy Laurenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16782528327499574711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-43147865713039827522008-12-04T09:47:00.000-05:002008-12-04T09:47:00.000-05:00It feels a little awkward to me. It doesn’t really...It feels a little awkward to me. It doesn’t really hook me either. Sorry.Anette J Kreshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15675193405511996480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-6780748722147513302008-12-03T23:38:00.000-05:002008-12-03T23:38:00.000-05:00Hmmm. . . I'd probably read on to see what they we...Hmmm. . . I'd probably read on to see what they were talking about. But this isn't all that intriguing so far.Bethlenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00399849555406133310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-74543307144228172962008-12-03T23:35:00.000-05:002008-12-03T23:35:00.000-05:00Definitely intrigued. It's hard to do the minimal...Definitely intrigued. It's hard to do the minimalist approach, but you nailed it! I'd absolutely read on.LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-42047776870283933472008-12-03T21:01:00.000-05:002008-12-03T21:01:00.000-05:00I like this! Short and sweet and loaded with poten...I like this! Short and sweet and loaded with potential for all sorts of conflict.<BR/><BR/>I think I might eliminate one or the other or both emphases. I'm not convinced you need either one, but if I were going to keep one, I'd keep the first. (Just in case you wanted to know that.) :-)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05740371055384281988noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-20831195275937940062008-12-03T20:32:00.000-05:002008-12-03T20:32:00.000-05:00Interesting setup but still a bit vague with 'they...Interesting setup but still a bit vague with 'they'. <BR/><BR/>I'd give it gander to see what goes on.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19399017663341246092008-12-03T16:44:00.000-05:002008-12-03T16:44:00.000-05:00Hate who???I want to see the people and their acti...Hate who???<BR/><BR/>I want to see the people and their actions before I see reactions.Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2795358225534433612008-12-03T16:14:00.000-05:002008-12-03T16:14:00.000-05:00It occurred to me instantly after posting my comme...It occurred to me instantly after posting my comment, that I'd be twice as interested if the MC had said "I didn't _want_ to hate them."<BR/><BR/>Hopefully the conflict and tension that creates are obvious without a need to expound (or did I just then?)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15772115162429818530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19144931604299348222008-12-03T16:12:00.000-05:002008-12-03T16:12:00.000-05:00Sweet. One wulfish fan coming up. That is, as long...Sweet. One wulfish fan coming up. That is, as long as the rest of the chapter delivers on the lofty promise of these two lines.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15772115162429818530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-74061450662551644402008-12-03T15:54:00.000-05:002008-12-03T15:54:00.000-05:00Is this YA? I'd guess so, given all the emphasis. ...Is this YA? I'd guess so, given all the emphasis. I don't mind it so much here, but keep it up too much and it becomes annoying/distracting. <BR/><BR/>I hands-down adore this, though. I'd buy the book.Stephhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13659688646243833862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-20613242535047996732008-12-03T15:31:00.000-05:002008-12-03T15:31:00.000-05:00I would read on to see who is "they"...I would read on to see who is "they"...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-56325177850823415192008-12-03T15:14:00.000-05:002008-12-03T15:14:00.000-05:00I would read on. I don't like the emphasis in both...I would read on. I don't like the emphasis in both sentences, though. I think it might work fine without them.Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-67809891672399250242008-12-03T14:59:00.000-05:002008-12-03T14:59:00.000-05:00I like it and I'd definitely keep reading, but I'm...I like it and I'd definitely keep reading, but I'm not sure you need the emphasis in both sentences. Although, I can't decide which I think is more important, so maybe it's fine.Casey Somethinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596079290053524103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40847733036733083362008-12-03T14:06:00.000-05:002008-12-03T14:06:00.000-05:00Love this! You really can say so much with two se...Love this! You really can say so much with two sentences, can't you?Jill Wheelerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15059527254551768150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39887477241158737712008-12-03T13:49:00.000-05:002008-12-03T13:49:00.000-05:00Great setup with minimal verbiage! Keep it coming....Great setup with minimal verbiage! Keep it coming.DCShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03125613995070496696noreply@blogger.com