tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post3570424946428701776..comments2024-03-28T02:12:56.114-04:00Comments on Authoress: (54) YA Romance: THE VIRTUE OF SINAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-56609558190616094322014-12-02T14:02:07.998-05:002014-12-02T14:02:07.998-05:00totally missed out on this one--congrats to Tamar!...totally missed out on this one--congrats to Tamar!sally https://www.blogger.com/profile/11068670473065918371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-22804290906920712892014-12-02T11:24:58.019-05:002014-12-02T11:24:58.019-05:00I didn't even get to bid on this one. Vicious...I didn't even get to bid on this one. Vicious bunch!Melissa Jeglinskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02872585516583314691noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78494625240195088402014-12-02T11:09:22.430-05:002014-12-02T11:09:22.430-05:00CLOSED! Full goes to Tamar Rydzinski.CLOSED! Full goes to Tamar Rydzinski.Authoresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37365781192521741732014-12-02T11:06:25.549-05:002014-12-02T11:06:25.549-05:00Tamar Rydzinski is a monster.Tamar Rydzinski is a monster.Lauren MacLeodnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32521068374672477202014-12-02T11:04:14.904-05:002014-12-02T11:04:14.904-05:00fullfullRena Rossnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10718532036124786106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86226333814341875232014-12-02T11:03:56.391-05:002014-12-02T11:03:56.391-05:00Full ms!Full ms!Laura Bradfordnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-13273331161619806272014-12-02T11:03:48.458-05:002014-12-02T11:03:48.458-05:00full!full!Tamar Rydzinskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10257464963703099847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65663996550870940362014-12-02T11:03:21.473-05:002014-12-02T11:03:21.473-05:00150 pages150 pagesLaura Bradfordnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-26884712976749445792014-12-02T11:02:21.745-05:002014-12-02T11:02:21.745-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Rena Rossnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10718532036124786106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-56672495394896959202014-12-02T11:02:15.625-05:002014-12-02T11:02:15.625-05:00100 pages100 pagesRena Rossnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10718532036124786106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14534128767870862152014-12-02T11:01:29.349-05:002014-12-02T11:01:29.349-05:0075 pages!75 pages!Tamar Rydzinskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10257464963703099847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73875786659558713902014-12-02T11:01:07.737-05:002014-12-02T11:01:07.737-05:00Love this!
25 pages.Love this! <br /><br />25 pages.Rena Rossnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10718532036124786106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60065336005220481432014-12-02T11:00:59.318-05:002014-12-02T11:00:59.318-05:005 pages!5 pages!Lauren MacLeodnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-49270851069429233542014-12-02T10:01:33.302-05:002014-12-02T10:01:33.302-05:00Hi
I'm your tweet diva for the contest.
Good L...Hi<br />I'm your tweet diva for the contest.<br />Good Luck!Julie Butcherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15055134290787317245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29989743567516215502014-12-01T16:20:12.742-05:002014-12-01T16:20:12.742-05:00I love the premise, the writing is great, and I wo...I love the premise, the writing is great, and I would definitely ask for a partial if sent to our submissions inbox. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09500234470173797515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83444734003475263632014-12-01T15:19:30.839-05:002014-12-01T15:19:30.839-05:00I’m also very intrigued, and your title is really ...I’m also very intrigued, and your title is really compelling! Your voice is so easy to follow--it sucked me right into the story. I’m hooked and would definitely read on!<br /><br />Best of luck in the contest!! <br />Laurennoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55154653572421223022014-12-01T11:49:55.328-05:002014-12-01T11:49:55.328-05:00I thought this was very compelling. I also was int...I thought this was very compelling. I also was intrigued by her lack of fear and assumed that her love interest is in the cult. I personally like to be kept guessing, so I was not bothered by not knowing more at this early stage. I would like to read more.<br /><br />Best of luck with this!Vaughan Dicksonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03845105240574840753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-45438947632939191812014-12-01T00:27:49.593-05:002014-12-01T00:27:49.593-05:00"Tonight it is my turn to be chosen." I ..."Tonight it is my turn to be chosen." I was very drawn in by your premise and most definitely wanted to read on. I would suggest pushing even deeper into her point of view. I think readers can't help but to place themselves in this high stakes moment, so the stronger her voice, the less the reader will project emotionally on to the character. Good luck!jennifer pooleynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53351159270250519812014-11-30T12:49:58.725-05:002014-11-30T12:49:58.725-05:00I would love to read this book! The voice is grea...I would love to read this book! The voice is great and it promises to weave together really interesting themes about fundamentalist religion and gender roles. Great job!Jen S.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88815799233231035382014-11-29T21:39:53.044-05:002014-11-29T21:39:53.044-05:00I need more of this. Now.I need more of this. Now.Jennnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-80685860989268608002014-11-29T21:39:39.533-05:002014-11-29T21:39:39.533-05:00I'm so intrigued by this! I already want to kn...I'm so intrigued by this! I already want to know more about this cult - what they stand for, what their rituals are, what Miriam's place is among the group... You put lots of great and interesting things into motion in just this short passage!<br /><br />I do agree that the first paragraph could be whittled down a bit. It does read like summary, and I wasn't truly pulled in until you got to the in-the-moment descriptions a bit later. <br /><br />I did find myself a bit confused about Miriam's emotions in this scene. Though she says she isn't afraid or nervous, the physical descriptions indicate otherwise (her insides feeling like liquid, her stomach lurching, etc). Because there are so many mentions of nausea in the first 250, I'm not sensing that she's calm or excited. If she actually IS nervous (and just lying to herself that she isn't), I wonder if that could be made clearer somehow in the narration. But if she's truly calm and/or excited, I might suggest finding different physical descriptions to convey her feelings.<br /><br />This is a compelling start and I would definitely keep reading. Good luck!<br /> Hali Baumsteinhttps://twitter.com/halibaumsteinnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54508612342624220922014-11-29T14:52:33.458-05:002014-11-29T14:52:33.458-05:00Love this. There whole "forced marriage at 16...Love this. There whole "forced marriage at 16" premise gets old in the dystopian books, but I like that this is a contemporary. The tone is just right, with Miriam seeming to accept the suppressed role of women (although I hope that changes as part of her character arc!). Not much else to say other than beautifully done!Mercinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-49996676977594056592014-11-29T14:34:56.204-05:002014-11-29T14:34:56.204-05:00This is amazing. I want to read more! I think you ...This is amazing. I want to read more! I think you give the perfect amount of information in the few words we see here. Good luck! :) Rachelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870655070026853342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-87027203347712888132014-11-29T13:00:01.251-05:002014-11-29T13:00:01.251-05:00Really solid logline--I'm a sucker for cult st...Really solid logline--I'm a sucker for cult stories--and STRONG opening sentence. I will say that the next sentence felt unnecessary, as did that sentence starting, "Now I am sixteen..." We'll get that soon enough, I imagine, and I always STRONGLY dissuade summarizing on a book's first page. I'd go straight from the opening line into "My father chose my mother..." and then simplify to something along the lines of "Now it's my turn." <br /><br />I also agree that I'd love more of a sense of who our MC is and what she's thinking. Right now we feel fairly distanced. <br /><br />Aside from that I'm really intrigued!<br /><br />~V<br />Victoria Schwabhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15184727462044315624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61321370406267517012014-11-29T12:12:31.711-05:002014-11-29T12:12:31.711-05:00I want to read more right now! Very intriguing! I ...I want to read more right now! Very intriguing! I love the concept and the easy-to-follow voice. The comments above mention some good points. <br /><br />Excellent job!Katherinenoreply@blogger.com