tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post4760685587087598447..comments2024-03-29T03:41:44.480-04:00Comments on Authoress: 38 Spec FicAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36664040217929777552010-03-26T21:59:53.731-04:002010-03-26T21:59:53.731-04:00Not hooked. "dead of night" is cliche, a...Not hooked. "dead of night" is cliche, and there's too much wordiness. It feels too contradictory without better structure and tightening. <br /><br />Shortened and smoothed out (and with knowledge where the sentence is going) and maybe. I like the title.Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-75208828899237204082010-03-26T04:03:32.350-04:002010-03-26T04:03:32.350-04:00I'd read a little more. I like the description...I'd read a little more. I like the description but haven't got a character to care for. I'd decide as soon as someone shows upKatharina Gerlachhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00223722392075669331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39792208126523169832010-03-25T19:44:34.166-04:002010-03-25T19:44:34.166-04:00Sorry - didn't hook me.Sorry - didn't hook me.Pat Tnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-71815938204223257392010-03-25T16:27:46.338-04:002010-03-25T16:27:46.338-04:00Not hooked--sorry! Atmosphere seems a little force...Not hooked--sorry! Atmosphere seems a little forced. (25 words is hard!)Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03402266791214015301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-80622088401148406292010-03-25T16:03:07.374-04:002010-03-25T16:03:07.374-04:00Not hooked. Sorry.
I love the title though! ㋡Not hooked. Sorry.<br />I love the title though! ㋡samsevernhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10913647759811350705noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41861617243741165292010-03-25T14:32:54.478-04:002010-03-25T14:32:54.478-04:00It's dark. That's not enough to get me in...It's dark. That's not enough to get me interested in an entire novel. Put your MC into that dark and then I have someone to be interested in.Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54206509018707981752010-03-25T13:11:16.779-04:002010-03-25T13:11:16.779-04:00Not hooked -- trying too hard to set atmosphere, I...Not hooked -- trying too hard to set atmosphere, IMO.Joshua McCunehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17367262185912463258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-85294961160620246402010-03-25T12:20:34.861-04:002010-03-25T12:20:34.861-04:00Not hooked.Not hooked.Sandra Ulbrich Almazanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15365908651235829765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-64468966475902242172010-03-25T11:30:58.194-04:002010-03-25T11:30:58.194-04:00The lamps are the only thing that grabbed me at al...The lamps are the only thing that grabbed me at all, and that really wasn't enough. Not hooked, though I'd likely finish the sentence.Selestialhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11513212631394350304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-7225179547663458182010-03-25T11:02:27.564-04:002010-03-25T11:02:27.564-04:00Not hooked. Pretty descriptions, with a slight cur...Not hooked. Pretty descriptions, with a slight curiosity pique at the gas lamps, but no character to tie me to.Tamihttp://tamimoore.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84104893199472709282010-03-25T11:01:52.291-04:002010-03-25T11:01:52.291-04:00Dead of night - seen it before. Not hooked.Dead of night - seen it before. Not hooked.Momwomannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-42430837866329989032010-03-25T10:43:01.531-04:002010-03-25T10:43:01.531-04:00Not hooked. Nothing to connect to.Not hooked. Nothing to connect to.fairchildnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39699489388848941552010-03-25T10:25:05.692-04:002010-03-25T10:25:05.692-04:00Not hooked--too much like 'it was a dark and s...Not hooked--too much like 'it was a dark and stormy night' for my tastes.Clairehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09609095934716513347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19440091368763345702010-03-25T10:08:13.299-04:002010-03-25T10:08:13.299-04:00Not hooked.Not hooked.Jodi Meadowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11796496740054225283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73340004733663739842010-03-25T09:45:52.599-04:002010-03-25T09:45:52.599-04:00Not hooked. Nothing here for me to latch onto (lik...Not hooked. Nothing here for me to latch onto (likely what I want is after the 'and' ;-).Adam Heinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02225813532455467868noreply@blogger.com