tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post5265721499239103075..comments2024-03-28T02:12:56.114-04:00Comments on Authoress: Drop the Needle #15Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40636709285259129752013-12-20T04:51:05.240-05:002013-12-20T04:51:05.240-05:00My first thought here was about the dresses. The ...My first thought here was about the dresses. The castle is ancient and crumbling, yet the dresses are in fine condition. The cloth has outlasted stone. But perhaps there is something else at work here that is evident in previous chapters?<br /><br />Then she wants to bring the dresses back to her father, which confused me, since the blurb says she ran away. Wouldn't going back force her into the same situation of having to marry someone she doesn't want to marry? And if it doesn't, did she need to run away in the first place?<br /><br />And then perhaps show us his reaction when she shoves him. Does he fall? Stumble? Get bumped back against a wall?<br /><br />I did like that she doesn't seem to be frightened by this man's sudden appearance, and she's not afraid to confront him, which makes for a strong female MC.Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53187986203269331522013-12-19T10:17:02.337-05:002013-12-19T10:17:02.337-05:00While the situation seems quite cliche, it seemed ...While the situation seems quite cliche, it seemed to work. Though her commenting about his pants makes me wonder if this is a portal fantasy or he's just wearing some new fashion she's never encountered in her world before. Just as equally, her reaction of shoving him seems cliche, but I still like it.Yttarnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12475650883254636912013-12-18T22:59:39.349-05:002013-12-18T22:59:39.349-05:00I enjoyed this. I didn't have an issue with th...I enjoyed this. I didn't have an issue with the familiarity from the stranger, as I'm assuming he was present during the hallucinogenic nightmare, but Rose doesn't remember.<br /><br />I also assume she shoves him because she believes she's still having a nightmare - after all, why else would the handsome stranger be wearing inappropriately gaudy clothes?<br /><br />One to many there's in this sentence - "But there he was standing there, grinning at her."<br /><br />I see you have labelled this as YA Fantasy, but I am getting a definite romance vibe from this excerpt.<br /><br />KayChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16267506508468548195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-72493545749327998882013-12-18T19:43:49.379-05:002013-12-18T19:43:49.379-05:00This is darling -- I laughed out loud at the part ...This is darling -- I laughed out loud at the part about the young man neither dissolving nor turning into a frog! :) It certainly makes me want to read more.<br /><br />I think the question of whether Rose's behavior at the end -- marching up to a stranger and shoving him -- is inappropriate (i.e. that she should be feeling more cautious, or even afraid) would depend on the tone of the scene leading up to this -- and of the entire book. <br /><br />The impression I get is that this is a whimsical story with a lot of humor. I could also imagine her feeling a bit devil-may-care at this point, if all this crazy stuff has just happened to her and it doesn't seem quite real. L.C. McGeheehttp://lcmcgehee.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-498564775507419572013-12-18T19:16:47.160-05:002013-12-18T19:16:47.160-05:00This sounds like a really interesting story. Escap...This sounds like a really interesting story. Escaping from an arranged marriage is a good way to build instant sympathy in readers.<br /><br />I think she could be a little more emotional in this scene. A hallucinogenic mushroom-fueled nightmare sounds terrifying to me. Especially if she's in a strange place and just went through something emotional and exhausting, like running away.Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16523176139669118788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-42543650249715691722013-12-18T10:35:37.320-05:002013-12-18T10:35:37.320-05:00I liked the pace of this, and the writing is polis...I liked the pace of this, and the writing is polished. I do agree with the above poster, however, that the familiarity that the man addresses her with, particularly in mentioning that he spoke to her before, makes me feel like she knows him, though her actions and thoughts do not. Overall though I found the scene amusing and entertaining.Michelle Barrynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-34041534055100541392013-12-18T10:25:19.272-05:002013-12-18T10:25:19.272-05:00This is interesting, though I am confused if the p...This is interesting, though I am confused if the person Rose has encountered is someone she knows? (Surely if he were a stranger, she would not shove him?) <br />It kind of throws me from the scene because of this, though I figure it's better explained in the rest of the story.<br />Does Rose have a sister? (Also the same answer is in the story) Messi Jessihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02938434126179725872noreply@blogger.com