tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post542279626391422351..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: #74 SECRET AGENT Are You Hooked?Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51998320624298230572008-07-20T21:28:00.000-04:002008-07-20T21:28:00.000-04:00Yes.Even though I feel a little strung out about w...Yes.<BR/><BR/>Even though I feel a little strung out about what the mc actually is, I'm intrigued enough to want to know more. I did start skimming the last paragraph. I want to get on to some more meat of the story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-66227645802312666952008-07-20T00:06:00.000-04:002008-07-20T00:06:00.000-04:00Love it. Skimmed the last para with all the descri...Love it. Skimmed the last para with all the description, but I am getting tired. Voice is great :)Amy Laurenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16782528327499574711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-74097800895538743872008-07-19T22:13:00.000-04:002008-07-19T22:13:00.000-04:00I like the humor in this and the fact the main cha...I like the humor in this and the fact the main character is a harpy. I'd keep reading.Ardythhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15379643762791779892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-63373091749907326892008-07-19T21:01:00.000-04:002008-07-19T21:01:00.000-04:00A harpy. Fantastic. Something I haven't seen. I...A harpy. Fantastic. Something I haven't seen. <BR/>I say yes. Hooked.D L Jacksonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03005096541408308851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-48788353178014530912008-07-19T17:20:00.000-04:002008-07-19T17:20:00.000-04:00Love the unique MC. I think you could lose the sec...Love the unique MC. I think you could lose the second sentence. I really like the fact that she's already set up to be an outsider, and I'm interested to know how she fits into the rest of the world and her own society.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12159497253546804862008-07-18T22:20:00.000-04:002008-07-18T22:20:00.000-04:00Not my thing, but I like the MC's voice and attitu...Not my thing, but I like the MC's voice and attitude. Good humor, too.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-24279403478696362432008-07-18T15:21:00.000-04:002008-07-18T15:21:00.000-04:00Hehehe, yes. :)I was leery at first that this open...Hehehe, yes. :)<BR/><BR/>I was leery at first that this opened with a character staring at herself in a pool, but the immediate turn of humor and her voice (and frustration) engaged me and I quickly got over the aversion to 'character stares at self in reflective surface and we get a complete physical description while deep, and utterly boring, musings happen' openings. ;)<BR/><BR/>Just goes to show that if you take a tired device and put a spin on it, it can work great!<BR/><BR/>I would read on.<BR/><BR/>~MercMerchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12696068441323060152008-07-18T13:26:00.000-04:002008-07-18T13:26:00.000-04:00Yes. I laughed at the bad fruit sentence. Definite...Yes. I laughed at the bad fruit sentence. Definitely want to find out more.Nayuleskahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08693548526829437580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-79945458762477021132008-07-18T09:54:00.000-04:002008-07-18T09:54:00.000-04:00This is an interesting premise but the first page ...This is an interesting premise but the first page isn't enough for me to get an idea of what the stakes are here. I understand she can't make a face but have no idea what that means to her. I suggest editing and trying to make the *why* behind her dillema come earlier.Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60613882148382031342008-07-18T09:41:00.000-04:002008-07-18T09:41:00.000-04:00I have insider information here, but if you read t...I have insider information here, but if you read the title, you might get that she's a ...harpy:)<BR/><BR/>I like this a lot. I almost want it to start a few paragraphs down after the bad fruit line.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11774070575429512242008-07-18T08:41:00.000-04:002008-07-18T08:41:00.000-04:00Maybe I’m watching my reflection too much, Helen t...<I>Maybe I’m watching my reflection too much, Helen thought</I><BR/><BR/>*amused* <BR/><BR/>Um... I'm not entirely sure if this is a "me" thing. I usually don't read books with nonhuman characters. Offhand, I'm guessing she's either a sphynx or gryphon (smiles). <BR/><BR/>Yes(ish)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47952207738379640272008-07-18T07:57:00.000-04:002008-07-18T07:57:00.000-04:00Loved it. Am already feeling sympathetic towards y...Loved it. Am already feeling sympathetic towards your character after this small snippet. :D<BR/><BR/>Renae_kAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-13555390231546162272008-07-18T05:29:00.000-04:002008-07-18T05:29:00.000-04:00What type of animal is Helen? I'm very curious. I ...What type of animal is Helen? I'm very curious. I didn't like the last paragraph. A bit of an awkward jump into exposition/description. Also, I'm not too fond of animal POV for narrative. That being said, I think I'd have to pass. Sorry :(Beth Overmyerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04820441246149409581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39120516850599388872008-07-18T02:37:00.000-04:002008-07-18T02:37:00.000-04:00I'd read a little more to see where it goes. I lik...I'd read a little more to see where it goes. I like Helen so far -- she has an interesting voice and her predicament is an unusual one. That said, I'm not big on books where an animal or creature narrates, so I'd have to love the plot to stick with the whole book.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19767987702721253862008-07-18T00:19:00.000-04:002008-07-18T00:19:00.000-04:00Definitely interested in reading more. I like how...Definitely interested in reading more. I like how you've already introduced the fantasy element right off the bat, but not clobbered your readers over the head with the rules of this world. You've created something plausible (i.e., a magic system), and trusted your readers to understand elements on their own. Great job!LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65886574936430116802008-07-17T22:35:00.000-04:002008-07-17T22:35:00.000-04:00I love it. I'd definitely read more. I like how yo...I love it. I'd definitely read more. I like how you let us know that Helen wasn't quite human right away without being "obvious" about it. She's likable and has great character.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54621402123530881442008-07-17T22:24:00.000-04:002008-07-17T22:24:00.000-04:00I like the humor and would keep reading to see if ...I like the humor and would keep reading to see if it continued. You do seem to lose it in the last 2 paragraphs, so a page that starts strong doesn't PULL me onto the next page. That said, I would continue to read in the hope it would pick back up.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19326417799263251762008-07-17T21:01:00.000-04:002008-07-17T21:01:00.000-04:00I like the touches of humor you added to this.I like the touches of humor you added to this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33626323008314233142008-07-17T16:56:00.000-04:002008-07-17T16:56:00.000-04:00I like the voice, Helen's character, and the story...I like the voice, Helen's character, and the story. I would read a few pages more. I'm not a big fan of books where the main character is an animal, so the rest would have to really keep me interested me as well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-33810179334182150302008-07-17T15:41:00.000-04:002008-07-17T15:41:00.000-04:00I love the character already. Her voice is fresh ...I love the character already. Her voice is fresh and her POV unique. I want to read more.<BR/><BR/>KizmetAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com