tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post5626795358985947783..comments2024-03-18T12:01:18.507-04:00Comments on Authoress: 87 YA FantasyAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger37125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73921025215633796402010-03-28T03:08:16.061-04:002010-03-28T03:08:16.061-04:00I didn't like the first sentence. It seemed a...I didn't like the first sentence. It seemed awkward and jerky.Cheryl Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-16515459287736593122010-03-27T21:57:28.269-04:002010-03-27T21:57:28.269-04:00Not hooked. It's too vague and disjointed for ...Not hooked. It's too vague and disjointed for me.Selestialhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11513212631394350304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65378451177848712132010-03-26T18:53:45.683-04:002010-03-26T18:53:45.683-04:00Great writing, but I'm not sure I learn enough...Great writing, but I'm not sure I learn enough to be hooked.ND_Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06641381503249317673noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37604229978617603362010-03-26T12:22:29.041-04:002010-03-26T12:22:29.041-04:00I'd give it a few more paragraphs because I lo...I'd give it a few more paragraphs because I love YA :)Annie McElfreshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14312634754232333138noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84624746998732892322010-03-25T23:36:49.079-04:002010-03-25T23:36:49.079-04:00The first thing I thought was "It sounds like...The first thing I thought was "It sounds like a Haiku". But that is is irrelevant. It must be somebody important if the wind tells you about it. I would read on.Davehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03699751175612528665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-58186574471890765252010-03-25T17:08:53.642-04:002010-03-25T17:08:53.642-04:00I like the title and the first sentence. Given the...I like the title and the first sentence. Given the genre,I am hooked. My only comment is to combine the two sentences. Something like “Someone approaches, the winds tell me—it’s a rider.” I connected with the protagonist and learned she has communication with the wind. I would read more.David Ferretti IIIhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08077205988316403994noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51816211403143292412010-03-25T16:06:24.309-04:002010-03-25T16:06:24.309-04:00Lightly hooked.Lightly hooked.Amber / Obsidian Dragonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07677468494179012802noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-51412594535607187292010-03-25T16:06:15.822-04:002010-03-25T16:06:15.822-04:00Hooked for at least a few more sentences. I like ...Hooked for at least a few more sentences. I like the tone so far.falconessehttp://falconesse.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14567957530899776492010-03-25T14:55:05.791-04:002010-03-25T14:55:05.791-04:00i like the writing style enough to keep reading.i like the writing style enough to keep reading.Ash. Elizabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03796125310595262268noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31886284637136286872010-03-25T14:46:41.164-04:002010-03-25T14:46:41.164-04:00I like this opening. Not horribly strong, but I ge...I like this opening. Not horribly strong, but I get a sense of what's happening and that the wind is speaking to the MC.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04081314889684032209noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88435706811326354422010-03-25T14:05:30.582-04:002010-03-25T14:05:30.582-04:00Hooked.Hooked.Sara J. Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16145626175256433448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86526807114247337132010-03-25T13:40:53.092-04:002010-03-25T13:40:53.092-04:00Not hooked.Not hooked.Sophianoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-58054634048609006052010-03-25T13:32:26.565-04:002010-03-25T13:32:26.565-04:00I like it. Talking with the wind appeals to me. It...I like it. Talking with the wind appeals to me. It's a soft-feeling sentence, but I like it. Evocative.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-58837831567243030502010-03-25T13:28:17.731-04:002010-03-25T13:28:17.731-04:00I'm not wowed, but I would read on.I'm not wowed, but I would read on.CindyLou Fosterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178779080794507708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-54627329384689248922010-03-25T13:20:54.878-04:002010-03-25T13:20:54.878-04:00It read awkward for me. But I'm not a huge fan...It read awkward for me. But I'm not a huge fantasy fan either.Kristi Faithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17527544253341529009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-49891372230622694392010-03-25T13:18:35.598-04:002010-03-25T13:18:35.598-04:00I agree with Christine.I agree with Christine.Casey Somethinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596079290053524103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61695950726484733052010-03-25T13:13:36.866-04:002010-03-25T13:13:36.866-04:00I like people who talk to winds, but I feel like I...I like people who talk to winds, but I feel like I've read this before. I'd keep reading to see if it gets less common.Christinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15498766421459190134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-87691457747932206902010-03-25T12:56:46.820-04:002010-03-25T12:56:46.820-04:00Hooked.Hooked.Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-34778691026985028832010-03-25T12:56:27.056-04:002010-03-25T12:56:27.056-04:00It's got a lyricism that reminds me of old sch...It's got a lyricism that reminds me of old school fantasy, which I like. Hooked.Portiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13435815819572442582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83124118111462383022010-03-25T12:50:38.393-04:002010-03-25T12:50:38.393-04:00Hooked. The writer's voice comes across clearl...Hooked. The writer's voice comes across clearly with this, and I want to keep reading.Tamihttp://tamimoore.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61514033498986170222010-03-25T12:30:30.520-04:002010-03-25T12:30:30.520-04:00Hooked. I love how the wind speaks here.Hooked. I love how the wind speaks here.Beth C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/09967873284070473154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86459321248955227292010-03-25T12:15:57.362-04:002010-03-25T12:15:57.362-04:00i like the first sentence. it's restrained but...i like the first sentence. it's restrained but still evokes a mood. i'd read on.smrnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-49732381542160621792010-03-25T12:11:13.808-04:002010-03-25T12:11:13.808-04:00Interesting. I'd give ita few more paras.Interesting. I'd give ita few more paras.fairchildnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-18225243317316258702010-03-25T12:04:07.575-04:002010-03-25T12:04:07.575-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Moira Younghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14090235556206768369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-85782905218685195222010-03-25T12:02:44.484-04:002010-03-25T12:02:44.484-04:00I like the writing, I'd read moreI like the writing, I'd read moreMeghan S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12447149254455271636noreply@blogger.com