tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post5810525280714192528..comments2024-03-29T05:54:33.136-04:00Comments on Authoress: 15 Secret AgentAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-40427324358502315412009-11-23T12:01:12.899-05:002009-11-23T12:01:12.899-05:00Ooh, I love it. Great first line. It sounds like a...Ooh, I love it. Great first line. It sounds like an entertaining read. I would love to know more about this book.Ailsahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02824021953575422303noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-2379743292723100402009-11-10T02:54:29.908-05:002009-11-10T02:54:29.908-05:00Great title and great first line too.
I agree wit...Great title and great first line too.<br /><br />I agree with the crits about his own curls though. Not necessary<br /><br />Clearly Doc Soc's wishes are going to prevail. I would read on to find out what happens to Adrian.Cheryl Shttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11270513035473727341noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-50910374141720283242009-11-05T19:36:21.552-05:002009-11-05T19:36:21.552-05:00Alrighty, looks like blogger ate my original comme...Alrighty, looks like blogger ate my original comment, so here I go again...Ever since I read Heart of Fire by Linda Howard a zillion years ago, I have been a sucker for books set in the Amazon. I am pretty much automatically hooked with this one. I like the opening paragraph, but beyond that, the dialogue feels a little forced. Doc Soc is kind of pushy, but I could like Adrian. I am expecting Adrian to carry the story instead of Doc Soc anyway.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-13160186317332025032009-11-05T15:37:14.332-05:002009-11-05T15:37:14.332-05:00Looks fun. I'd keep reading.Looks fun. I'd keep reading.Melindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17182951575531989338noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-71377104844284565322009-11-05T14:21:21.882-05:002009-11-05T14:21:21.882-05:00Clever title.
I found opening with the 'dick ...Clever title.<br /><br />I found opening with the 'dick fish' comment and then repeating that phrase three more times in the first 250 words off putting. <br /><br />The mention of his shoulder length curls felt out of place where it now stands. It could easily be worked in more smoothly later.<br /><br />That said, I like your set up. This sounds like it could be a fun read.TKAstlehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15853167834460094772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11667873932946081812009-11-05T11:02:23.785-05:002009-11-05T11:02:23.785-05:00Awesome. I'd like to read this book. The tit...Awesome. I'd like to read this book. The title drew my attention and the writing kept me reading. I also like the subject matter. If I see this title out there some day - I'd buy it!B.Loisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5125542693906576922009-11-05T07:48:30.550-05:002009-11-05T07:48:30.550-05:00You had me at parasitic dick-fish :-)
Seriously t...You had me at parasitic dick-fish :-)<br /><br />Seriously though, this is funny and promises adventure. What's not to like? I didn't even notice the writing, which shows I was too wrapped up in the story to care.Bronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13029635239132926178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53450447917017523822009-11-05T07:12:39.217-05:002009-11-05T07:12:39.217-05:00Cute! I'd read on, because of the voice and s...Cute! I'd read on, because of the voice and situation and the characters. I like seeing two male main characters for once, instead of the normal male and female.<br /><br />JodiJodi Ralstonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02400458940845469179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-62005246926082862512009-11-05T00:38:26.749-05:002009-11-05T00:38:26.749-05:00Loved it!
I personally am a wee bit tired of all t...Loved it!<br />I personally am a wee bit tired of all the monster fighting hot chicks I can't relate to in a lot of today's Fan, but the stories with male main characters still grab my attention.<br />I have to say I love the dick fish, it gives me the idea that there's going to be some humor in this adventure!XVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00693331929770648824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82839342340295087102009-11-04T22:03:00.985-05:002009-11-04T22:03:00.985-05:00I agree with losing the 'amended' and desc...I agree with losing the 'amended' and description of the hair. Maybe say something about the tickle making him shiver (could be a bit of worrisome foreshadowing, too :)<br /><br />Everything else is great. Awesome opening lines.Melaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774161341416630904noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-57656372839645072112009-11-04T19:47:44.924-05:002009-11-04T19:47:44.924-05:00I normally hate books that start with dialogue, bu...I normally hate books that start with dialogue, but your first line is definitely a grabber. <br /><br />I also think the parenthetical comment is pretty witty.sally https://www.blogger.com/profile/11068670473065918371noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-612788297582494632009-11-04T19:23:13.466-05:002009-11-04T19:23:13.466-05:00Hooked! There was something in almost parg. that ...Hooked! There was something in almost parg. that gave me another reason to read on. Your characters were appealing, I can imagine all the places this could go, I know what I'm getting into, and it had the added touch of humor.<br /><br />As others pointed out, you could lose the curls and amended, but overall, fun and interesting!Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86708330737078241902009-11-04T17:48:39.779-05:002009-11-04T17:48:39.779-05:00Great title!
I like Adrian and I love Professor...Great title! <br /><br />I like Adrian and I love Professor Socrates Kawasaki's name! <br /><br />A minor thing: <br />This is in Adrian's POV. He wouldn't think of himself as having "shoulder-length curls." Someone else has to comment on his looks or the old, tired and totally overused, mirror gaze. <br /><br />Love the siren call of all things rain forest...line. <br /><br />I'd read on<br /><br />Good luckClairehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09609095934716513347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88918487500328811762009-11-04T14:32:22.140-05:002009-11-04T14:32:22.140-05:00I liked the humor too. I'd probably read furt...I liked the humor too. I'd probably read further, assuming the same snarky tone continues. One suggestion: "he amended" - yuck. Just say "said." Or perhaps "protested." "Amend" not only sounds awful, but it's a transitive verb -- it's got to have an object.Travenerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05160810997837674165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17926800516552689942009-11-04T12:04:14.663-05:002009-11-04T12:04:14.663-05:00Ha! Funny. The energy and the humour really makes...Ha! Funny. The energy and the humour really makes a person want to read on!Liannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02349123766809521894noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82641832039953181912009-11-04T11:04:33.491-05:002009-11-04T11:04:33.491-05:00First of all, LOVE the title, which grabbed me and...First of all, LOVE the title, which grabbed me and made me chuckle.<br /><br />Like the set up and the voice, very humorous.<br /><br />I'd read on.angela robbinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07114119913653244467noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-50563317412243714102009-11-04T10:56:47.357-05:002009-11-04T10:56:47.357-05:00This looks like a fun read. Great wit and voice. I...This looks like a fun read. Great wit and voice. I like the title, too, and the HR Manager bit. Nice set up. I'd keep reading.giginoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-31356976194106160232009-11-04T10:33:03.431-05:002009-11-04T10:33:03.431-05:00A lively, entertaining voice. Lots of adventure ah...A lively, entertaining voice. Lots of adventure ahead. I'm hooked!DCShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03125613995070496696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-41928890339798118492009-11-04T10:30:19.166-05:002009-11-04T10:30:19.166-05:00Not so sure about the dick-fish myself, but I'...Not so sure about the dick-fish myself, but I'd definitely read more. I love the title! And an urban fantasy with a male character (other than Dresden) sounds good too.<br /><br />The shoulder-length curls was my only pause. Ok, maybe the hole in the slacks. Descriptions that didn't seem to go with the rest of the conversation, but I'm still interested.ClothDragonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07542830590515695754noreply@blogger.com