tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post592772962044041988..comments2024-03-28T02:12:56.114-04:00Comments on Authoress: 124 YA SFFAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84969373297716108432010-03-30T06:55:47.924-04:002010-03-30T06:55:47.924-04:00For the purpose of this exercise, I'm not real...For the purpose of this exercise, I'm not really hooked. However, I would certainly read more than 25 words in the bookstore, and I'm sure whatever comes next about the hole will be hooky :-)Bronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13029635239132926178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14836551901819362772010-03-27T21:47:11.022-04:002010-03-27T21:47:11.022-04:00Don't think the 'one day' is in the ri...Don't think the 'one day' is in the right spot.<br /><br />Either drop it or put it after 'hole'Cheryl Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29237970452628610162010-03-26T20:46:52.418-04:002010-03-26T20:46:52.418-04:00It depends a lot on what the book is about... I...It depends a lot on what the book is about... I'm not entirely hooked yet, but I might read on to find out what the hole is.Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68047544269525328362010-03-25T23:29:01.038-04:002010-03-25T23:29:01.038-04:00Partial hook. Need more detail on the hole. Why ...Partial hook. Need more detail on the hole. Why is this one especially interesting?Stellanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-83980566179618581812010-03-25T21:46:08.932-04:002010-03-25T21:46:08.932-04:00I clunked at "one day", but I'd keep...I clunked at "one day", but I'd keep reading.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14115085533635353291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-30985855180676708662010-03-25T19:32:36.410-04:002010-03-25T19:32:36.410-04:00Oh dear...sniggering at possible double entendres....Oh dear...sniggering at possible double entendres. Ignore me.Keren Davidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13121027210783177857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14014093321119856332010-03-25T18:37:35.027-04:002010-03-25T18:37:35.027-04:00I'm not sure... the first sentence sounds like...I'm not sure... the first sentence sounds like the discovery happened long before the beginning of the story. So the second sentence tells me this is a flashback. <br /><br />I'm not ultimately crazy about novels that begin with flashbacks. I'd rather see them jump right in to the protagonist, present, and the problem.Cate Kariaxihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01812494549402252779noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-1073972641016509002010-03-25T17:04:16.199-04:002010-03-25T17:04:16.199-04:00Exactly what BoA said. Well done!Exactly what BoA said. Well done!MHhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16748209334943163314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-1246038830583872212010-03-25T16:56:59.093-04:002010-03-25T16:56:59.093-04:00Quasi-hooked. Wanna know more. Potential to wander...Quasi-hooked. Wanna know more. Potential to wander off bored very shortly, though, if I don't fall into that hole. As it were.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89659809676498724382010-03-25T16:48:37.689-04:002010-03-25T16:48:37.689-04:00I agree with Bane. :-)I agree with Bane. :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14277830328321684592010-03-25T16:42:58.906-04:002010-03-25T16:42:58.906-04:00Partial hook. Sounds like it's starting with a...Partial hook. Sounds like it's starting with a flashback because the narrator is telling the reader about something that happened before this point in the story. If this is a flashback, then it's a big no-no.Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-37887012387047607422010-03-25T16:42:32.186-04:002010-03-25T16:42:32.186-04:00I'd keep reading.I'd keep reading.Michellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05192888587472646161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53759396155513236282010-03-25T16:37:17.411-04:002010-03-25T16:37:17.411-04:00Partial hook. I'd keep reading to find out mor...Partial hook. I'd keep reading to find out more abut the hole.Tamihttp://tamimoore.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55697032012030665182010-03-25T16:36:38.721-04:002010-03-25T16:36:38.721-04:00I'd go along for a bit to see where the hole g...I'd go along for a bit to see where the hole goes. I'd probably cut 'one day.'Joshua McCunehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17367262185912463258noreply@blogger.com