tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6012401398632772894..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: 113 YA Epic FantasyAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84668931789291747352010-03-30T07:49:36.078-04:002010-03-30T07:49:36.078-04:00How can a stone hide in her neck? I'm confused...How can a stone hide in her neck? I'm confused rather than hooked. Given the genre, it might help to set the scene and the character first so we have some idea of what is happening before mentioning the stone.Bronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13029635239132926178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-1791331413376623812010-03-27T22:40:52.418-04:002010-03-27T22:40:52.418-04:00Too passive and too many descriptors to pack a rea...Too passive and too many descriptors to pack a real punch.Cheryl Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-50565252035617366652010-03-26T20:56:07.960-04:002010-03-26T20:56:07.960-04:00Not hooked, sorry.
(I really don't think &quo...Not hooked, sorry.<br /><br />(I really don't think "epic fantasy" should go hand in hand with purplish prose.)Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8599618725385963902010-03-26T16:30:06.687-04:002010-03-26T16:30:06.687-04:00Zzzzz... Not hooked.Zzzzz... Not hooked.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03884912115599229843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82456626216215229262010-03-26T06:32:12.485-04:002010-03-26T06:32:12.485-04:00Not hooked.Not hooked.Jodi Meadowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11796496740054225283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-29191693705263327042010-03-25T18:16:19.785-04:002010-03-25T18:16:19.785-04:00Consider me unimaginative, but how can a black sto...Consider me unimaginative, but how can a black stone glow? Is it glowing a different color? Or are the edges just kinda fuzzy? I'm not exactly hooked, really, but I'm not NOT hooked. :DBethany Elizabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12829932931010851406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68833745536628921702010-03-25T16:52:41.310-04:002010-03-25T16:52:41.310-04:00I would probably read for a while longer, but the ...I would probably read for a while longer, but the hook is weak. :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-11042164753735233912010-03-25T16:32:49.779-04:002010-03-25T16:32:49.779-04:00Weak hook. I'm a sucker for the genre and I lo...Weak hook. I'm a sucker for the genre and I love that the magic is immediate, but as with the above comments, the logistics of what is described don't quite jive for me. I'd read a little further.Tamihttp://tamimoore.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14095360431353740312010-03-25T16:28:48.518-04:002010-03-25T16:28:48.518-04:00I agree with Steve; the logistics don't quite ...I agree with Steve; the logistics don't quite work for me.Sandra Ulbrich Almazanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15365908651235829765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17963922391506215332010-03-25T16:28:42.968-04:002010-03-25T16:28:42.968-04:00Hooked, though I'm not into epic fantasies. No...Hooked, though I'm not into epic fantasies. Not sure how much longer I'd read because of that. Purely subjective.Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-60753420855511797922010-03-25T16:26:17.882-04:002010-03-25T16:26:17.882-04:00Not quite hooked. If the stone is on her neck, whe...Not quite hooked. If the stone is on her neck, where is it (was it) hiding? And...caught her attention...? If she's wearing it (and it kinda sounds like she is), wouldn't she be aware of its glow already? <br /><br />I think you tried to put too much information in the first sentence, which leads to too many questions. Answer one or two of those in the first sentence, and I might read on.Stevehttp://kestrelsaerie.usnoreply@blogger.com