tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6481765619190647725..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: (10) Paranormal Romance: To Catch A FetchAuthoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-36237307065966238822012-12-04T11:19:01.840-05:002012-12-04T11:19:01.840-05:0025 25 Victoria Marininoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-8125610366339086012012-12-04T11:18:00.691-05:002012-12-04T11:18:00.691-05:005!5!Amy B.https://twitter.com/notjustanyboggsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-639716606666225192012-12-02T13:08:16.787-05:002012-12-02T13:08:16.787-05:00Did she inherit the house? If it is just a settin...Did she inherit the house? If it is just a setting for a photo shoot is it really her future? Enjoyed the writing and the description of the house. I was ready to move in with her. <br />I would take the word "had" out of this sentence "Opportunity hadn't knocked, it had handed her the damn key." Gives it more punch. <br /><br />I would love to turn the page and keep reading.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03254595113817870478noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23446173152953400322012-12-02T05:10:48.849-05:002012-12-02T05:10:48.849-05:00The writing here is great. I love all the details ...The writing here is great. I love all the details and the tone that's set right from the get-go. As far as action, not alot has happened yet except she's put the key in the door and opened it. If I kept reading I'd want to see something more to move the story pretty quick. Overall, great job. I'd keep reading. Annie Rainshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18408863685494968873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-81584603183382616922012-12-01T21:54:21.012-05:002012-12-01T21:54:21.012-05:00You had me at "antique." Boom.
Good luc...You had me at "antique." Boom.<br /><br />Good luck with this!Mindi Piconenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47040394514741012922012-12-01T20:23:25.565-05:002012-12-01T20:23:25.565-05:00I'll echo everyone's comments here. Very w...I'll echo everyone's comments here. Very well written, great narrative voice, good attention to the detail of word choice. But I had the same question Peter had - how is the house her future? I went on the presumption she inherited it until the last two paragraphs. Then I didn't know what it meant.<br /><br />Great job and good luck!Emmanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-24602788076927274542012-12-01T14:17:13.311-05:002012-12-01T14:17:13.311-05:00I think this is a good start and sets the tone nic...I think this is a good start and sets the tone nicely for what’s to come, especially with a ghost-hunting hero. The only question I have is how this house is Devyn’s future. Did she buy it? Inherit it? Or is she just supposed to be photographing it? She seems to have a good sense of humor, too.Peter Senftlebenhttp://twitter.com/gr8thepeternoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-19624868856343614702012-12-01T12:19:11.428-05:002012-12-01T12:19:11.428-05:00I would definitely read on, and logline makes this...I would definitely read on, and logline makes this sound like an intriguing premise. Good luck!Jami Goldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00957122956518765455noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84955406907952527482012-12-01T00:03:55.194-05:002012-12-01T00:03:55.194-05:00This beginning really creates a lot of atmosphere,...This beginning really creates a lot of atmosphere, while still keep it lighthearted and with a contemporary flair! I think a lot of people can relate to the head versus heart battle Devyn faces...even if they don't all believe in ghosts, etc. Good luck!Ryannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06844778818522680595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-57741925922798187852012-11-30T22:11:59.533-05:002012-11-30T22:11:59.533-05:00I like the atmosphere here--the Victorian house an...I like the atmosphere here--the Victorian house and antique key give some great setting details. I'm assuming more conflict pops up in the next few pages as hunting for antiques doesn't hold much tension. I'd keep reading in the hope that the ghost piece shows up pretty quickly. <br /><br />And I loved, "Opportunity hadn't knocked, it had handed her the damn key." Great line!Stephanie Thorntonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17437077559099315853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65488839368735305532012-11-30T21:26:12.254-05:002012-11-30T21:26:12.254-05:00Love this! Snicked is great and your description p...Love this! Snicked is great and your description pulls me in. Crisp and interesting writing. Good job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08085276525748118708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-15158979978461941922012-11-30T21:21:41.105-05:002012-11-30T21:21:41.105-05:00I want to read more! I see an engaging style, a ch...I want to read more! I see an engaging style, a character who already seems intriguing, and a hint of mystery. What more could you ask for?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06688406562351107282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-72696761996547025362012-11-30T19:16:57.965-05:002012-11-30T19:16:57.965-05:00Great start! I can't say I am much for romance...Great start! I can't say I am much for romance novels but love me some antiques so label me anxious to read moreLarrynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-86987814859105905792012-11-30T16:10:20.404-05:002012-11-30T16:10:20.404-05:00I loved this! Antique keys, nineteenth-century hom...I loved this! Antique keys, nineteenth-century home, ghosts, and ghost hunting? I'd definitely read more. I love the bit of humor at the end with the light switch. Good luck!Erinhttp://www.erinbrambilla.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73823200365926357982012-11-30T11:01:11.313-05:002012-11-30T11:01:11.313-05:00any reason why you went for a**, i found it a litt...any reason why you went for a**, i found it a little distracting, as the idea of third favorite swear word.Lilanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-7822735695639181282012-11-30T10:41:00.563-05:002012-11-30T10:41:00.563-05:00Sounds like a great book and I dont really read to...Sounds like a great book and I dont really read to.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-24448270912004044792012-11-30T10:10:59.451-05:002012-11-30T10:10:59.451-05:00Love all the little details - I can almost feel th...Love all the little details - I can almost feel the heaviness of the antique key in my hand. Lovely opening and the hook definitely has me intrigued. Well done!Rockethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15624569711289689258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-90356127439149424052012-11-30T09:39:14.056-05:002012-11-30T09:39:14.056-05:00I would definitely read on! I would definitely read on! Elainenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-82356911638599561532012-11-30T09:29:42.098-05:002012-11-30T09:29:42.098-05:00I would totally read on! Intriguing and I like th...I would totally read on! Intriguing and I like the humor!<br />laurakatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14865711194566382414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-90486485055501033882012-11-30T09:11:46.264-05:002012-11-30T09:11:46.264-05:00Wow, I absolutely love this!!! I have to say, it&#...Wow, I absolutely love this!!! I have to say, it's really hard to hook me with paranormal romance lately since the market was recently so saturated (and I grew up on Buffy the Vampire Slayer, so that's something I never thought I'd say!) but your logline hooked me, and Devyn's obsession with nineteenth century homes and period furniture kept me reading. I'm really drawn to this character. She seems to have a lot of sass, and I'd love to see how she handles encountering the ghosts she doesn't believe in, and the man who's going to change how she feels about love at first sight. I would definitely keep reading. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05397143823061698282noreply@blogger.com