tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6559383730924295180..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: May Secret Agent #29Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-27148254913353372472010-05-23T22:24:51.701-04:002010-05-23T22:24:51.701-04:00Love the voice! Hilarious title and love the plot ...Love the voice! Hilarious title and love the plot so far. A few sentences could be either chopped or combined for smoother reading, but overall I'd totally keep reading.Secret Agentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-15710835857720413812010-05-21T16:48:37.312-04:002010-05-21T16:48:37.312-04:00Title is catchy and the names of the characters ar...Title is catchy and the names of the characters are nice. Not much happening otherwise, but it's got enough promise to make me read on. Good luck.Mike Winchellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11771482167997501541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55959207599212856072010-05-21T12:21:50.084-04:002010-05-21T12:21:50.084-04:00I'm finding it breaking my suspension of belie...I'm finding it breaking my suspension of belief that the class and the sub would react that way to Foster's question. Nobody's asked him that before? Really? And the sub reacts with kid language instead of adult language. This just isn't a believable situation to me.Kate Fallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12856887940900664692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-77494190274157150252010-05-20T17:30:07.804-04:002010-05-20T17:30:07.804-04:00I'm torn on this one. Normally, I would say s...I'm torn on this one. Normally, I would say start out with some action, but I had fun reading this one because of the voice and the humor. I would definitely keep reading to find out how the granny panties fit in! The title caught my eye while scrolling through the entries, which shows it peaked my interest.<br /><br />Someone else mentioned that Foster F. Finkman seems like the MC, and that did occur to me too while reading this. We hear so much about Foster and Mr. Thompson that the MC remains shrouded in mystery. Although, maybe that's what the author intended...Cathionoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-46986231418632782322010-05-20T16:06:10.049-04:002010-05-20T16:06:10.049-04:00Love the voice--it definitely entertained me. I...Love the voice--it definitely entertained me. I'd read on.Merchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-58318460649494454322010-05-20T12:33:53.807-04:002010-05-20T12:33:53.807-04:00This was fun. I don't read much MG, so take wh...This was fun. I don't read much MG, so take what I say with a grain of salt, but I liked a lot of this. I liked the voice and that they were torturing the sub. Loved the sub's nickname!Valerie Kemphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05795714434618357955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-65611348641588915842010-05-20T07:49:35.976-04:002010-05-20T07:49:35.976-04:00Love the title. I like this overall, but there wer...Love the title. I like this overall, but there were a couple things that threw me off. If the MC's known Mr. Thompson since kindergarten, why does he say "this guy" in the second sentence? It makes it seem like he doesn't know him. I found that conflicting. Also, calling his friend by his first name, middle initial, and last name seemed weird. Kids don't do that--especially with their friends. Also, I don't think a sub would criticize a student's name like this, even if he thought it was a fake name. It's too risky.Kelly Hashwayhttp://www.kellyhashway.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-61900575217420913032010-05-20T02:46:38.900-04:002010-05-20T02:46:38.900-04:00Some fun humor and funny images. SOmetimes the la...Some fun humor and funny images. SOmetimes the language is a bit old for the humor. I'm gonna say this is almost a chapter book. But I like it, and I think kids need books like this. Best of luck!shelleynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-35765379528869716182010-05-20T02:18:35.520-04:002010-05-20T02:18:35.520-04:00Sorry, but I have to agree with Jenny. It seems a...Sorry, but I have to agree with Jenny. It seems a little bland, and kind of forced. I did like the title, but it might not be the best one for attracting young male readers. The idea is good, and with a little revising it could be a really good read. Best of luck.Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546484149438441933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-56399606275422936942010-05-19T21:50:28.985-04:002010-05-19T21:50:28.985-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Mamehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04853842158606222286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-49515468338430786852010-05-19T21:15:31.755-04:002010-05-19T21:15:31.755-04:00Not hooked. It seems FFF is the star of this stor...Not hooked. It seems FFF is the star of this story, and I'm going to hear about it through someone else's POV, someone who's name I don't even know yet.<br /><br />And all I'm getting concerning hints to plot are the adventures of a trouble-making team. There may be more to it than that, but it doesn't show in these 250 words.<br /><br />Perhaps give us more of your main character, or make triple F the MC?Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68821938935891959402010-05-19T21:13:04.351-04:002010-05-19T21:13:04.351-04:00Oh, I love this one. I love naughty school kids. G...Oh, I love this one. I love naughty school kids. Great names and a great voice. I'm hooked.<br /><br />Good luck!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216407428320615449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73830513658418400312010-05-19T20:13:04.976-04:002010-05-19T20:13:04.976-04:00I would definitely drop pink from the title. Other...I would definitely drop pink from the title. Otherwise, the structure is great and you certainly made me laugh a few times. Two thumbs up.Mamehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04853842158606222286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78099535851722345792010-05-19T16:01:10.955-04:002010-05-19T16:01:10.955-04:00Love the voice. And, the idea of a prank on the ho...Love the voice. And, the idea of a prank on the horizon. I would have liked to have jumped right in though, rather than hear so much description about the sub. Still, I would read on. :) Good luck!Laura P.http://www.laurapolk.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-80097562588111614252010-05-19T13:54:47.140-04:002010-05-19T13:54:47.140-04:00I don't know. I just don't get it. It read...I don't know. I just don't get it. It read flat to me and I could't see reading any further. It has no hook and frankly kind of stupid. I wasn't impressed. Sorry. And the title doesn't seem like a book a boy would read. I think you need to rewrite the beginning and create more of a hook. Boys will put down book rather quickly. You need to draw them in. Try joining a writing group or critque circle. Best of luck.Jenny Barkinsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-76455240999309120172010-05-19T12:17:41.147-04:002010-05-19T12:17:41.147-04:00Great voice. Loved the name, Foster Florentine Fin...Great voice. Loved the name, Foster Florentine Finkman. And the question. Too fun!htourkinnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14407942540616927912010-05-19T11:53:08.689-04:002010-05-19T11:53:08.689-04:00Yeah. Kudos on the title. A book about pranksters ...Yeah. Kudos on the title. A book about pranksters and ne'er do wells sounds like a fun read.JKWnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-14645496842885104402010-05-19T11:45:26.284-04:002010-05-19T11:45:26.284-04:00LOL! I love this title.
I don't read MG, but ...LOL! I love this title.<br /><br />I don't read MG, but I think this is good. Hooked.<br /><br />Good luck with SA!Sarah Erberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04372612203349863638noreply@blogger.com