tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6701219531875028655..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: First Sentence #11Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger51125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-12862630475778851852013-06-28T18:42:50.133-04:002013-06-28T18:42:50.133-04:00I have to say yes. The idea of human sacrifice ma...I have to say yes. The idea of human sacrifice makes me queasy, but I'm too curious - I have to read more.Vankarnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-78397466106535786432013-06-28T13:44:17.552-04:002013-06-28T13:44:17.552-04:00I think it's intriguing. I need to see more.I think it's intriguing. I need to see more.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-4455491647267917822013-06-28T12:25:01.937-04:002013-06-28T12:25:01.937-04:00Ooohh, yes. Sounds deliciously dark and funny.Ooohh, yes. Sounds deliciously dark and funny.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-88070883701821900652013-06-28T12:21:51.098-04:002013-06-28T12:21:51.098-04:00OK, you've definitely got my attention. Defin...OK, you've definitely got my attention. Definitely yes!AliKatnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-39034705624045386062013-06-28T12:03:13.923-04:002013-06-28T12:03:13.923-04:00Yes, but barely. This sounds more like the opening...Yes, but barely. This sounds more like the opening of an Urban Fantasy than Literary Fiction. Also, I'm not sure Commercial Literary/Book Club is an actual genre. There's Commercial Fiction, Literary Fiction, and Upscale Fiction. It may benefit you to do a little more research on the specific categories to determine where your novel fits best. (sorry to go off topic)Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-17479694695635670192013-06-28T11:19:00.045-04:002013-06-28T11:19:00.045-04:00No. I'm a little curious about why the narrato...No. I'm a little curious about why the narrator thinks it has an upside, but I don't really like it starting with the question, and I can't imagine what the upside might be.Ailsahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02824021953575422303noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-28066788444256046272013-06-28T07:56:09.948-04:002013-06-28T07:56:09.948-04:00Just. I like the voice, but the following sentence...Just. I like the voice, but the following sentences would need to be good to keep me interested.KayChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16267506508468548195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-68745216642871160932013-06-28T06:25:58.540-04:002013-06-28T06:25:58.540-04:00Yes, definitely. Want to know more!Yes, definitely. Want to know more!HEATHER LYNNE DAVIShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04324491728569039272noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-23166895136601237962013-06-28T02:45:18.439-04:002013-06-28T02:45:18.439-04:00Love the hook. YesLove the hook. YesTweetynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-66404405224604687662013-06-28T02:38:54.702-04:002013-06-28T02:38:54.702-04:00Yes, I like the lead in.Yes, I like the lead in.Curiousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-76440757736373470362013-06-28T00:20:09.823-04:002013-06-28T00:20:09.823-04:00Yes! I'm curious about the type of human sacr...Yes! I'm curious about the type of human sacrifice mentioned. Is it spilling blood on an altar, or the realistic kind of sacrifice that humans make for loved ones - especially in light of the title.MysteryLovernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-90356184842389611462013-06-27T22:48:35.992-04:002013-06-27T22:48:35.992-04:00No. Mostly because this doesn't sound like my ...No. Mostly because this doesn't sound like my kind of book right off the bat. But it also doesn't really intrigue me...I can answer "no" to the that question and put the book down. Aightballhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10706831888613374173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-6794545743636620742013-06-27T21:27:28.677-04:002013-06-27T21:27:28.677-04:00Yes. This question makes me want to read on.Yes. This question makes me want to read on.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-25434352271807441932013-06-27T18:03:41.048-04:002013-06-27T18:03:41.048-04:00No--the concept of human sacrifice (no matter how ...No--the concept of human sacrifice (no matter how you read it) is intriguing, but I don't believe that what's I'm going to get. I feel like the sentence will be followed with the MC chatting away to the reader.<br /><br />Where is the MC? Who is the MC? What is the context behind this comment? Is he out in the woods, making a human sacrifice to the devil, or is he lying on the battlefield after a buddy just died to save him? The sentence gives me no clue. Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15769803733067838372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-55311084158099719592013-06-27T17:36:07.341-04:002013-06-27T17:36:07.341-04:00I'd definitely read further. Good job. (I'...I'd definitely read further. Good job. (I'm a bit morbid that way. Hehehe.)Kathryn J. Bainhttp://www.kathrynjbain.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-62124864301993932272013-06-27T17:24:38.433-04:002013-06-27T17:24:38.433-04:00Yes! It has me looking forward to the mystery and...Yes! It has me looking forward to the mystery and laughs to follow.Katrinkanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32534995288927865862013-06-27T17:19:41.307-04:002013-06-27T17:19:41.307-04:00Yes and like SStokes said, wonderfully twisted.Yes and like SStokes said, wonderfully twisted.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-6580203259156197162013-06-27T17:08:01.739-04:002013-06-27T17:08:01.739-04:00Yes! Though I'm surprised it's commercial ...Yes! Though I'm surprised it's commercial fiction. I hadn't seen that at first and I wonder now if it would play differently for me if I had. Leah Petersenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17668989627100455974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-89873453837117020832013-06-27T16:41:49.751-04:002013-06-27T16:41:49.751-04:00YES. I want to know what the upside is. And it sou...YES. I want to know what the upside is. And it sounds wonderfully twisted. :) SStokeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03607391693287377280noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5438299230274892522013-06-27T16:13:31.841-04:002013-06-27T16:13:31.841-04:00Yes
Intrigued right away!Yes<br />Intrigued right away!Kennedynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-21529783621013789112013-06-27T16:13:01.956-04:002013-06-27T16:13:01.956-04:00Yes, it's titillating. Plus I love the title....Yes, it's titillating. Plus I love the title.Anonymous411?noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-53513401473783013962013-06-27T16:10:09.271-04:002013-06-27T16:10:09.271-04:00Yes. I laughed. So maybe that makes me morbid, but...Yes. I laughed. So maybe that makes me morbid, but i instantly want to know what is going on.SueJayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14428582843087294011noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-35418328946800569092013-06-27T15:55:09.134-04:002013-06-27T15:55:09.134-04:00Yes. I think I have a weird sense of humor and thi...Yes. I think I have a weird sense of humor and this fits with my particular brand of funny.Parkernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-13250968881867150552013-06-27T15:54:44.649-04:002013-06-27T15:54:44.649-04:00Yes! My curiosity is piqued. Who is this narrator?...Yes! My curiosity is piqued. Who is this narrator? What's the story going to be about? I want to read more.<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-26816355929373397372013-06-27T15:32:09.314-04:002013-06-27T15:32:09.314-04:00Yes, I love it. In the form of a question you jus...Yes, I love it. In the form of a question you just know that it will be followed by laughs. I'll definitely read the book!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com