tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post6722871691016522933..comments2024-03-28T08:14:28.881-04:00Comments on Authoress: Drop The Needle 30Authoresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09223228949688667517noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-3114525060499152322008-07-31T15:55:00.000-04:002008-07-31T15:55:00.000-04:00I don't know Finch's rank or authority - probably ...I don't know Finch's rank or authority - probably that's clarified before the excerpt. <BR/><BR/>But he's well-drawn and you've concisely made him officious, haughty and a boor in 250 words. Good job!<BR/><BR/>KizmetAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-22445657973959997012008-07-31T12:32:00.000-04:002008-07-31T12:32:00.000-04:00Finch is the SC. He seems pretty full of himself, ...Finch is the SC. He seems pretty full of himself, like he knows so much more than everyone else. That certainly came through, as well as Penn's dislike for him. Good job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-80257807068441013752008-07-31T08:10:00.000-04:002008-07-31T08:10:00.000-04:00I'm guessing Finch is the SC. He sounds like a rea...I'm guessing Finch is the SC. He sounds like a really annoying pencil-pusher. I already want to strange him. I particularly liked Finch's line "Oh, that Russell" - so simple and it says so much about Finch.Esther.Jadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11552124058522436295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-84727877293845337332008-07-30T19:17:00.000-04:002008-07-30T19:17:00.000-04:00Ooh! That Finch is a snooty, officious SOB, isn't ...Ooh! That Finch is a snooty, officious SOB, isn't he? I've hardly met him, and already I was looking for a way to push him backward down the steps he just climbed.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-73649075011563875582008-07-30T18:54:00.000-04:002008-07-30T18:54:00.000-04:00Finch is great here! I love his 'stick to the rul...Finch is great here! I love his 'stick to the rule book' attitude, and his pushyness. He really comes across as a jerk. I want to know more about what injuries happened and why. Nicely done!Victorinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06052077366367623323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-10712377378655594412008-07-30T17:30:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:30:00.000-04:00I really liked this. Finch's SC status, and uptig...I really liked this. Finch's SC status, and uptight-edness come through loud and clear. He's the kind of character I'd like to throttle, and you write that aspect for him really well. Penn's voice also is fresh and engaging. Good job!LoriStronginhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10764202539292045963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-76021150546359976132008-07-30T17:12:00.001-04:002008-07-30T17:12:00.001-04:00Very good job. I can just picture the pin-faced pa...Very good job. I can just picture the pin-faced paper pusher.Liana Brookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587774916354749190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-47055513062420425572008-07-30T17:12:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:12:00.000-04:00I think Finch makes a strong SC. I find him unlika...I think Finch makes a strong SC. I find him unlikable and pompous. It's also intriguing that he's more concerned about blood stains than the dead or injured pilot.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-48891713475523359872008-07-30T16:26:00.000-04:002008-07-30T16:26:00.000-04:00I was drawn in by the story, and Finch was compell...I was drawn in by the story, and Finch was compelling mostly by what he's not doing - there clearly was some kind of accident or horrible thing happening, and he's so nasty about it. It made me suspect him.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5680626115438187932008-07-30T15:24:00.000-04:002008-07-30T15:24:00.000-04:00I like this, but more because of what I get from t...I like this, but more because of what I get from the MC, Penn, than from Finch, who seems just an anal snob. Love the thought about the payroll. That's great!Luc2https://www.blogger.com/profile/01069557738924277313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-32486427197114589942008-07-30T13:45:00.000-04:002008-07-30T13:45:00.000-04:00I still love this piece. Finch comes off really we...I still love this piece. Finch comes off really well as a snide, pompous jerk.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3615675676021392217.post-5006786676817840042008-07-30T12:24:00.000-04:002008-07-30T12:24:00.000-04:00Well... Finch is the secondary character. He works...Well... Finch is the secondary character. <BR/><BR/>He works for the most part, but I think I would have liked him to have more presence. This could have been accomplished with a little more description of the cramped conditions of the cockpit. Maybe the warmth and smell of Finch standing behind Penn, the rattle of the clipboards when he reached over Penn's shoulder, maybe he bumps Penn's shoulder... details like that solidify him a little more.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com